Well, I was gonna wait for La'ra, but I'd rather have this posted before '09.
This next CH. is one I deliberated on for some time on how to bring it about. I hope it's liked. Tell me what you think of it please!
CH. 5
Endeavour’s final landing party materialized amid a scape filled with twisted starship debris, med teams and alien bodies. The craft had been dashed upon a long stretch of unforgiving rock protruding up from the otherwise flat valley between monumental mountain chains. The ship’s debris was strewn over a six kilometer run, beginning just before the protrusion of granite which had torn it to shreds. The Ya’wenn cruiser had possessed a crew of just under four hundred. Only seventy of them were now among the living.
The rest were scattered amid the forest of jagged, burned metal.
Ford turned to face the largest bulk of the wreck. It was full of breaches. Much of it had obviously been the result of direct weapons fire. The ship would never have survived even a controlled landing among the best circumstances. Beside the commodore, Lieutenant Smith whistled aloud in awe of the macabre sight.
“Man…that ship is f*cked!”
Ford ignored the outburst of profanity. Such did not bother him. He simply turned to face his team. “Remember to keep an eye on your radiation meters. Black means bad. Help the med techs where you can. Get the survivors rounded up into concentrated groups. Don’t let the rebels put you in any kind of bind or get anything over on you. They’re prisoners till further notice, understood?”
There were nods from his team of officers as they stared back at him. The commodore’s face was a stern, emotionless mask. It just meant he was all the more angry. His crew knew this. They moved out slowly, picking their way amid the rubble to reach the maroon and white clad medical teams where they spread out among the living and the dead. Lieutenant Bronstien stayed close to the flag officer, unofficially his armed escort. Ford, though, had eyes for but one person among the landing party.
Doctor Keller was bent over the still body of a Ya’wenn female. The alien’s head was splayed open to the air, a dangerous infection already evident within the darkened grey flesh of her exposed scalp. Ford quickened his pace at the sight of the badly injured woman and knelt close by to render aid.
“She has severe cranial fractures and a high temperature. I’m going to have to stabilize her before I can transport.” Keller was telling him even as she applied her hypo to the alien’s throat. Chevis nodded and checked the CMO’s open medical bag for the next thing she might need.
“Don’t you need some assistance on this ‘n?” He asked her, glancing about for the nearest nurse.
“I don’t have enough to go round, I’m afraid.” Her English accent told him. “You’re going to have to do, Commodore.”
Ford smirked despite the dark nature of their task. Bronstien knelt close by in case he was needed, but kept his eyes peeled for problems of a more tactical nature. The helmsman’s prosthetic legs did not seem to be causing him any real difficulties today. The radiation spilling from the cruiser’s ruptured core wasn’t affecting the cybernetic components yet, either.
“Dermal regenerator.” Keller asked next, hand out for the tool. Ford handed it over without hesitation and watched as the skilled hands of his lady sealed up the huge gash atop the woman’s skull.
“She’s not going to feel very sporting when she wakes up, but she’s stable enough for transport.”
Ford stood, thinking he’d heard something. Was that a yell? He patted Keller on the shoulder of her duty jacket. “Have her beamed up to the ward, Andrea. I’m headin’ over that way to check on something.”
Andrea nodded back without words as she plucked the communicator from her belt. Motioning to Bronstien, Chevis led the helmsman over a small rise and toward a tall mound of damaged engineering structure. The two of them rounded the torn-off butt of a warp nacelle and were faced with an entirely new expanse of twisted, silver and carbon-black junk.
“Le’s spread out, Lieutenant. I thought I heard a holler.”
Johnathan nodded and drew his phaser. Ford left his holstered but kept his hands free and at the ready. They took angled paths through the wreckage, careful not to get sliced open on the jagged edges of warm metal. The planet’s sun was beginning to beat down on them, adding to the heat emanating out from the ship’s engine core. Ford ducked beneath a bent, twisted pipe and paused, hearing a gruff, strangled call. The call had been too muffled and distorted for the UT in Ford’s communicator to translate, and the vocal was definitely Ya’wenn. Ford moved a bit faster. He rounded a torn swelling of dirt and half-buried metal. The call repeated with a familiar note.
The commodore paused, uncertain. His heart skipped a beat. He began to trot ahead as a more clear voice of gravel began to call again. The Endeavour CO had lost sight of his guard. Bronstien soon called out for him. Ford didn’t answer. He was near now to the issuing voice.
“Help!” His translator finally began to decipher the harsh male call. Ford slowed to a cautious walk, drawing his phaser and holding it low. He rounded a huge, dented capacitor and looked down the rise for his quarry. The huge Ya’wenn lay with his broad, bloodied back facing the human.
Chevy’s face began to twist into a dark, vengeful smirk as he slowly circled the pinned survivor. The alien had been clawing at the dirt for some time it seemed. His hands were bloodied from the effort and his handprints stained the multi-ton mounting frame leading from the damaged capacitor further back. The big man stiffened as the sound of Ford’s boot steps on the rough ground came to him. He twisted, trying to see out behind him.
Ford slowed even more, reveling in the trapped man’s feelings of fear and agony. The man still couldn’t see him. He tried turning his stiffened neck to cast a glance on him. “Hello! I hear you there! Help me! My legs are broken!”
Lieutenant Bronstien came over the top of the rise from the opposite direction, his pistol raised and ready. He was bent cautiously when he’d come into view, but straightened immediately in surprise at the sight of the malicious expression burned into his CO’s face and the drawn weapon. His young brown eyes widened as they saw Ford set his phaser to maximum. Then he looked down on the man lying trapped in the dirt and blood. The helmsman looked back and forth between the two men, uncertain. At last, the survivor saw Bronstien standing there.
“Humans…Starfleet…” Jarn visibly balked at the sight of his ‘rescuer’ and began to push with renewed might at the angled metal piercing his twisted legs. “No…NO!!!”
Ford looked back to his pilot. The young officer looked back in continued indecision. Ford kept his eyes locked on the boy as he continued to round the mounting frame and come into Jarn’s sight. The boy blinked a few times, and looked again to the pistol in Chevis’s hand. Then he made his decision.
Smiling slightly, Johnathan turned away.
Chevy returned his full, undivided animosity back on the Ya’wenn jailer and took the final step into Jarn’s field of view. The huge, helpless man drew totally still. Sweat beaded and rolled from his upper lip. He’d been lying here long enough to grow stubble on his face. With a single quake of fright, the alien looked up to the commodore.
“Ford!” He whispered in the tiniest of voices. He’d stopped pushing on the immobile metal. His black eyes leveled on Ford’s brown orbs. The human’s eyes were objects of concentrated hate. Jarn’s belied only fear. Ford’s smile widened.
The phaser in the commodore’s hand rose to hip level, aiming right between Jarn’s eyes. The Ya’wenn criminal’s eyes widened, jaw slack in horror. “No! Ford! NO!! Don’t Captain! Don’t do it!! NOOO!!!”
“Chevy!”
Ford’s eyes darted back up the rise he’d traipsed down to reach this spot. Andrea was coming. He could hear her, all but running as she sensed the danger here. Ford looked back down to his victim, teeth grinding and mouth twisting into a mess as he debated vaporizing every last trace of the bastard’s existence.
Andrea couldn’t see that. She was smart enough to know what would have happened. Jarn obviously had no weapon. He was pinned, helpless. He could do nothing to offer offense from his current position. And the single fact that he would if given the chance was not enough to justify killing him here. Even if Keller could live with it and understand, the commodore wouldn’t force her to.
“f*ck!” Ford kicked a rock at the cringing Ya’wenn prisoner and holstered his pistol. He did it just a moment too late to avoid being seen. Andrea faltered several steps and halted, staring down the hill to her beau. Ford looked back at her, expression dark. Then he looked away, his chance stolen.
Doctor Keller returned to a slow trot and came to a rest next to the Over Warden. She was already scanning the prisoner, but still looking back to Ford with suspicion and confusion. She looked up to Bronstien. The helmsman just shrugged back.
“He’s badly injured, Chevy! Help me get this girder off him!”
Ford glared back, a look that stung the doctor visibly. Then he looked back up the hill to the helmsman. “Bronstien, get down here and guard the Doctor! I’ll go find someone who gives a damn…”
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Any way, this CH. 2 suffered many attacks of revision and rewriting. Much of it actually just wound up right back the way I originally concieved it, though. Hope it doesn't read as butchered. Having been the one who worked on it from beginning to now...I remember all of what I HAD written and how it COULD'VE wound up...and I just wonder if it flows right. I think it does, but...*shrugs*
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