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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #20 on: August 04, 2007, 07:38:29 am »
At this point, McD figgures he's got nothing left to lose, he's lost his chance at being a full captain, been demoted, lost his ship and crew, and had been chewed out for doing the right thing.


The instability is definitely coming across, then.  Now I'm wondering when he'll realize he's unstable. ;D
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #21 on: August 05, 2007, 05:49:11 am »
Sorry, more detail than action...

   Cerberus’s engine room was arranged in a ‘neat and tidy’ layout, covering a total of five decks, with auxiliary machinery rooms taking up spaces one deck above and below the main five. Unlike traditional warp core ships, Cerberus and her half-sister ships had the main warp intermix chamber in the forward most part of the expanse, utilizing all the space aft for computer panels and other equipment.
   The impulse drives were on the top two decks in the aft most section of the room. Just below those engines lay the three lifts; the one centerline was the two man engine room lift, and to either side were the normal ship’s turbo lifts. The Turbo lift system only stopped at the deck just below the impulse engines, the main engineering deck, and the deck immediately below that. The Two man lift traveled the whole height of the room, and just for redundancy, several ladders were spaced throughout.
   Sitting centerline, was the ship’s heart, the intermix chamber. On its forward most side was the ‘aftermarket’ warp plasma conduit for the third warp nacelle. This pipe extended forward for two meters then took a forty-five degree slow turn upwards towards the nacelle a few decks above. One hundred and twenty degrees to either side of this conduit were the standard issue port and starboard warp plasma conduits, making a straight line towards their respective engine pods, only beginning to turn after they reached the concealment of the ship’s bulkheads. All three of them connected to the warp core at its dilithium chamber, where matter and anti-matter met with the crystals and became useable plasma. A handful of smaller conduits entered and exited at points along the crystals’ chamber, providing cooling and warp plasma to power other ship’s systems.
   Around the warp core stood a circular railing with small monitoring panels placed equidistantly around the rail. There were three breaks in the thing, allowing personnel access to the core should that become required. Around the aftermost section of railing were two ‘offices’, the port side being reserved for the on watch Engineering Officer of the Watch (EOOW) and had room for at least one enlisted person; someone to run the ‘small stuff’. On the other side, was the engineer’s personal office; having control panels to completely control everything, and giving her all the important readings. Sub-important readings could also be easily accessed. Right now, the engineer was busy recording a highly detailed power usage report, listing every component that had been turned on or off in the last hour. It was a daunting task, and she was almost ready to call one of the on watch personnel to assist her when she saw the lift door softly and silently open.
   McCloud stared dumbly as Jones walked into the engine room. “Captain wants a power usage report,” Jones started without stopping her walk to McCloud’s console. “Every time anyone powered up or powered down a computer console in the last hour.”
   The engineer found her voice, “I’ve already started. I can use your help.” She moved her chair over and allowed the exec to stand next to her in the cramped space. “I thought that you were banned from here?”
   “Later, okay?” Jones replied. She glanced at what her friend had started and brought her own screen up to match. “You get power ups, and I’ll take power downs, that should cut our time in half.” McCloud didn’t say anything, but refocused her attention to the power-ups. They worked together in silence, waiting for an answer to pop out in front of them.

   “Sir,” Perkins announced, “picking up a low-level power signature on long range sensors.”
   “Source?” McDougal responded to him, quickly vacating the engineering station and taking his seat in the center of the bridge.
   “Reading is in our flight path, sir, we are closing fast. It does not appear to be moving.”
   “Helm, can you avoid it?”
   “Of course I can, sir!” the helmsman replied, obviously miffed that the CO would question his abilities. “We are about two hours ahead of schedule, sir, we can stop to investigate if you’d like.”
   McDougal pondered the thought. An unidentified power source, that just happened to be in their flight path, with just enough time available to stop and take a peak. “Take us to it, but keep us out at a safe distance.” The captain sighed. At least there will be something interesting to do on this trip.
   “Report from engineering, sir,” T’Sala said from behind him. He turned around and noticed that she had assumed the engineering panels. “They are about sixty percent complete with their research; Commander Jones says that so far there are at least seven computer consoles that have powered up and six that powered down within the specified time frames. One of them is in the Klingon ambassador’s quarters, sir.”
   “Report from security, sir,” Perkins interrupted her. “Three security guards were injured, one critically, attempting to break up a fight between the two Klingon guards. They have been restrained and separated; K’Tark has claimed diplomatic immunity and he will control them more closely. Report from sick bay, all three guards will survive.”
   Before McDougal could interject, Perkins kept going. “Now receiving updated telemetry on the unidentified object, sir. Power source is Romulan, from a War Bird class cruiser. Hull shape conforms to early War Bird designs… Sir it is possible that this ship has been adrift for almost one hundred years…”
   McDougal didn’t respond, just turned to face the view screen. Rowdy Klingons, injured men, and a derelict Romulan cruiser… Why me? “Maintain course to the War Bird, double the guards at the ambassador’s quarters, and put the ambassador on the line for me.”

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #22 on: August 05, 2007, 03:22:59 pm »
Cool....you're right about excitement coming now...
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #23 on: August 05, 2007, 10:12:06 pm »
Woot! I like warbirds! Other than the Scimatar [why a Romulan ship named for a human sword?], I like pretty much every Rom ship that has been seen on screen. They look cool, even the green ones.

Liked the engine room detail.

And if the point, as you say, was to show the CO as on the deep end, then point made. But that Admiral really should have done someting... But then maybe he's a lilly-liver...

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #24 on: August 06, 2007, 05:10:41 am »
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   “K’Tark is not answering our calls,” T’Sala said. “He says that he is composing an important document for transmission to the Klingon Empire and must not be disturbed. He adds that he will be more than happy to cooperate in any inquiry that you have as soon as he is finished.”
   “Wonderful,” McDougal replied to the status update.
   “No life readings on board that ship, sir,” Perkins quickly changed the subject. His hands danced across the panel like they were performing in a ballet, and at a speed that rivaled T’Sala’s. Cerberus had finally come to a complete stop close enough to scan the vessel without putting herself into real danger. “No power generation systems online, however, emergency power is operational and so is life support.” On the view screen, the larger ship tumbled slowly end over end, and gave its smaller guest a grand view of the giant eagle painted on its belly. “Reading no signs of warp capabilities, this ship was sublight only. The gravity in this sector is pulling on that ship in several directions simultaneously and almost equally; it should, however, drift eventually deeper into Federation, then Klingon space… If I continue a projected course, assuming no one stopped to move it, it should arrive in the WYN Star Cluster in about… three thousand years…”
   “Two thousand, eight hundred, ninety-seven,” T’Sala corrected him. “Sir, we are reading no damage to the ship; it is possible that the crew starved to death or abandoned this ship before setting it adrift. There is no indication of any bodies on board, however that does not exclude the possibility of long term decomposition. I believe that we may be able to restore enough of its own power systems, as there is fuel available for its impulse drives.”
   “And we can just as easily start it on the path we choose with a tractor beam and a push, lieutenant,” McDougal replied. He was more interested in the safety of his ship and crew, and yet his curiosity was pulling him toward the derelict.
   “Sir,” Perkins spoke with cause and alarm, “universal translator has detected and translated the ship’s name. Closest match is… Sir that ship is named Cerberus!”
   “Impossible!”
   “Actually, it translates out to be ‘Dog of Hell That Has Three Heads’…” T’Sala interjected. “It does not seem to conform to typical naming strategies of the era.”
   “Well,” McDougal said calmly. He folded his hands together and brought his index fingers to a point, which he brought to the tip of his nose. “I guess a further investigation is in order.” He poked blindly at the 1MC button on his chair. “XO to the bridge!”
   “Bridge, XO,” she replied, “I’m on my way already…” the door to the lift swished open, and the com line died as she walked onto the bridge. She swiftly walked to the forward port ‘aux’ console and sat. “I needed to use a bigger console, We’re almost done with compiling the power usage report.”
   “Negative, XO, I have a feeling that our Klingon friends are somehow involved with the com line static, I just don’t know how. I’m going to lead an away mission to the War Bird. You are to stay here and see what you can uncover with the Klingon. Perkins, Michaels, you’re with me. XO, the ship is yours.”
   “Sir,” Jones protested, “Change to regulations state that the commanding officer is no longer allowed to lead…”
   “Check the books, Miss Jones, it specifically calls out ‘dangerous situations’. I don’t foresee any danger on this one. I’ll contact you shortly.” He stood and walked with his helmsman towards the lift that Perkins was now holding for them. Almost as an after thought, he added, “Have Doc, Lieutenant O’Kelly and an off watch engineering technician meet us in transporter room one.” He stepped into the lift and smiled at her as the door shut.

   The transporter operator had admitted to not knowing the layout too well of the Romulan vessel, but McDougal couldn’t have been any more pleased by where they did materialize. He looked around the bridge and noticed that there was no real seating at any of the control stations. He and his party wore atmosphere masks, allowing them to breathe clean air in case Cerberus’s sensors lied to them and the Romulan ship’s air was toxic. Doc quickly brought out his medical tricorder and began to survey the air. McDougal walked to the main control stalk in the center of the bridge and attempted to identify the panels there. Engineer’s Mate Second Class Mitchell Walker walked beside his commander and set down the equipment he had brought with him. The EM2 opened one of his two cases and extracted two wire probes that he plugged into an open receptacle.
   “Air’s clean,” Doc stated matter-of-factly. “O’Kelly and I will search this deck for what remains of the crew.” Doc and the security chief turned and left the tiny bridge and headed aft.
   McDougal watched them go as he removed his breather. “Perkins, what do you make of all of this?” he asked.
   The young science officer took off his breather and started up his tricorder. “Almost seventy years old, sir. There hasn’t been any life here in at least fifty. The tric’ is beginning to translate some of the Romulan words on these panels…”
   “Sorry to interrupt you, sirs,” Walker started, “but I have finished interfacing with the ship’s mainframe. Everything should be accessible through this portable console here. I’d like to go to Engineering and do the same there, and see if I can’t get you some power.”
   McDougal nodded and watched him go too. Overall, the internal space onboard the Romulan ship was smaller than that on Cerberus, and he doubted that the young tech would get lost.
   “Sir,” Michaels chimed in, “If I can find the helm I can reprogram her to head to the nearest starbase, once we have the power to do so.”    Perkins looked up from his tricorder and pointed to one of the panels on the stalk, then continued his scan about the bridge.
   McDougal chuckled softly to himself. “All we really need to do is get this beast pointed in the right direction and download the ship’s logs. Star Fleet will probably donate it back to the Romulans anyhow.” He paused to stare out the tiny viewport at his own ship as the war bird slowly tilted around again.

   K’Tark ginned at Jones with a sharp, toothy smile. “I have control over my men, commander,” he said, almost apologetically. “We were partaking in an ancient ritual. Since I have no son of my own, I was testing these two to see who would be most worthy of the extremely honorable right.” Something about the massive Klingon’s expressions didn’t seem right to her, almost as if he was concealing something.
   “We just wanted to make sure that there wasn’t going to be any bloodshed on board,” she replied to him. “By the way, are you aware that you have two waiting messages from the High Council?” There wasn’t an easy way to dance around the spiny bush, so Jones just plowed through it. “Have you received any messages since you have been on board? There is a possibility that your room’s com lines have malfunctioned…”
   Sausage fingers rose into view on the main screen then fell with a loud slap as the Klingon began a deep belly chuckle. “I have known of those two messages, I chose not to read them yet. As for your other question, I am afraid that I must say that…” he stumbled on the words, choking down serious pain and presented himself as if nothing was wrong, “we have not received any other messages.”
   Jones sat in the command seat, puzzled at the thought. If not them then who? Was it really just static? Would they really tell us? “Is there anything else we can do for you, ambassador?”
   “I have written a message to my family that I wish to be sent off at once. There is nothing confidential so you can do your duty and scan it if you like,” he paused a moment to catch his breath. “Just be sure that it is sent within the next few minutes to my son…” The screen blanked and for a brief moment the bridge crew paused.
   “His message is standing by to be sent, sir,” T’Sala said from behind the XO.
   “Let me see it,” she sighed and stood, walking to the port aux station. “He’s trying to say something without being able to say it. He made mention of having no son and yet sending this to his son… It is all in Klingon and a mix between ancient dialects and current ones…” she started as the message displayed on her screen.
   “I think that there may be a secret message in it,” T’Sala said calmly. “I will assist you in trying to decipher it.”
   Twenty silent minutes passed on the bridge as the two worked on the translation and decryption of the ambassador’s message, when finally Jones had to take a break. She keyed for her captain’s com line and when he answered, she immediately began to fill him in on recent happenings.
   As soon as he was up to speed, she added, “we’ve managed to isolate the following words: ‘KLINGONS’ ‘ACCIDENTAL’ ‘OUR’ ‘GET’ ‘CAUSE’ ‘INNOCENT’ ‘A’ ‘WILL’ ‘FAULT’ ‘THE’ ‘WE’ ‘ARE’ ‘MASTERS’ ‘FOLLOWING’ ‘BOOM’ ‘NOT’ ‘SORRY’ ‘SHIP’ ‘OFF’ and ‘ORDERS’. Some of those repeat, but that is it so far. I can have more in depth results once we discover the order that these go in.”
   “Good work, XO,” McDougal’s voice replied. “We’re almost done over here, maybe ten more minutes and this ship will be underway on its own power again.
   “We should have more answers for you by then. Cerberus, out.”

   K’Tark could feel the build up within him. He watched as the two guards struggled against their restraints and envied them. They would die here, despite being compelled to find a population center before the end. He wasn’t so lucky, however, as his programming would force him to the main bridge, the control center. Eventually, he would no longer be able to resist the urge and he would go. But he would delay the end as long as he could. This ship and her crew were innocent and did not deserve to die. Hopefully his message would be figured out in time, and the three of them would die in the hard vacuum of space. It was a small price to pay to preserve the honor of the Klingon Empire.
   He was impressed with his ability to fool the device in his mind, deceiving it into allowing the message, telling the crew to either get off the ship or beam the Klingons away from the ship. He thought back to his encounter with the human woman, Jones. She could understand his words well, and this message should be simple for her. He sat down on his bed, and hoped beyond hope that they would get it all sorted out soon. The pressure built up inside him, just as the Masters had said it would. He knew he had less than ten minutes to live, and had done everything that he could to save them all.
   A random thought crossed his mind, almost too simple. He stood and walked to the closer of his two bodyguards. He would not be permitted to kill either of them, but he would be allowed to combat them, a fight that would call the guards outside into the quarters. It would be a fight that would not end until he was either stunned into submission or killed outright. Either way, all three of them would them be in the same area when the end came, and the damage to the ship would be minimized. With a grunt, he kicked the guard square in the groin. The guard screamed in surprise, and attempted to stand against his restraints. K’Tark continued his assault, even as the ships guards burst in.
   Phaser beams streaked into his hide, singing the skin beneath his armor and his clothing, but it wasn’t enough. K’Tark continued the assault, the only feeling he had was the growing urge to leave and make his way to the command center. He fought on, struggling to speak against his controller. “Just kill me,” he wanted to say, but what came out sounded like Klingon combat grunting. Finally, the fatal shot hit home, and his back-up programming kicked in.

   “We cracked the code, sir,” Jones’ voice cracked through the communicator he held in his hand. “It is the best that the computer could come up with given the words we had and the time, I'm reading it to you as it comes across, we haven't fully read it yet ourselves: ‘We were forced into this by our new Masters. The Klingon Empire takes no responsibility for this incident. Save yourselves, get off the ship and save the innocent, or beam…’” The line went to static, and McDougal tried frantically to call his ship. The war bird rotated itself again into view of Cerberus. He could see through the tiny port hole his ship as one large explosion erupted from behind the bridge module, burning bright orange as it was fueled by escaping atmosphere.
   “Oh my…” he managed as his jaw dropped. Cerberus now burned quietly in space, and there was nothing he could do.


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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #25 on: August 06, 2007, 07:48:59 am »
Klingons compelled with internal devices to act as suicide bombers?  Wild.

Might not've been the best choice though.  Clearly, a less stubborn race might've worked better. ;D
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #26 on: August 06, 2007, 12:01:14 pm »
Looks like they have to power up the Romulan ship after all
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #27 on: August 11, 2007, 03:37:09 pm »
Something short and sweet to keep you all in suspense:


   Jones righted herself from the deck, sharp pains from being flown across the bridge scratching at her mind. She stumbled in the ill lit room; made her way towards the source of the brightest light. Breathe she told herself, and realized that she had been holding her breath. Before she continued, she felt the pull of ever growing vacuum on her, and decided better of it. The light flickered in the waiting turbo lift car, its door jammed open by a relief helmsman, her lifeless body slowly being squished in half by the door. Jones made note that T’Sala had managed to survive, and was coming to her aid. A long hiss of escaping atmosphere grew louder as they approached the lift. They entered the car and shoved the body out onto the damaged bridge, allowing the car’s door to shut. The hissing stopped and was replaced by the whoosh of fresh air filling the tiny car. When she could breathe again, she simply ordered, “engineering,” and the car did nothing.
   T’Sala operated the control panel for the lift, programming a route manually for the car, bypassing damaged sections of the path. They had been fortunate that the car would move at all, and that it was largely undamaged, as a hull rupture had found itself at the top of the lift tube. The car had blocked the escape of precious air, and prevented explosive decompression on the bridge. Tardiness of the relief helmsman had saved their lives. Without much warning, the car finally began its wandering journey towards engineering; the slam of the emergency bulkhead above them was both felt and heard. “Emergency force fields are holding around the main breach,” T’Sala commented dryly, “however there is insufficient power to maintain them for long. Emergency bulkheads have shut in areas not protected by the fields.”
   Jones only nodded in reply. After many twists and turns, and a much longer lift ride than was usual, the car stopped and deposited them in the engine room. They were greeted by the computer’s voice, boldly stating, “ANTIMATTER CONTAINMENT FAILURE EMINENT.” Quickly, the duo entered into the busy fray of crew attempting to fix this new and very soon to be fatal problem.

   “I have minimal power available,” Walker’s voice came through over McDougal’s communicator. “I’m stabilizing the ship now; we won’t be spinning much longer. I should have us free to navigate in about ten minutes, sir
   “The sooner the better,” he calmly replied. “Keep me informed, McDougal, out.” He quietly closed the device and set it down on one of the panels.
   “Sir,” Perkins began, “I think there is now sufficient power to access the ship’s sensors.” He pointed at the panels as they returned to life. “And with luck, we’ll be able to better see what happened on Cerberus.” Perkins laughed a little. “Both of them, if you’d like, sir!”
   “No, Mister Perkins, ours will be just fine.”
   “Very well, then.” He walked over to the resurrected science and sensor station and began to poke at the controls with the help of his tricorder. Michaels offered him the temporary control panel, but Perkins refused him. A couple of moments passed, and now slightly angered he said, “I can’t read a lot about the ship, these sensors are too old and inefficient. Cerberus shows as off our bow, damaged and with minimal power. There is one massive hull breach where the ambassador’s quarters were, exposing three decks to vacuum; and two smaller breaches; one on the bridge and one on deck five forward. Sir, that one must have been caused by something not related to the main blast, its too far forward.”
   “I thought that the sensors weren’t that good?”
   “They’re not, best guess given that I also have a visual feed. Additional information coming in now; there are survivors on board, unable to determine how many, and life support is on emergency power. It looks like the blast tried to burn away our extra warp engine… wait… reading a power failure in the antimatter containment system, I think. If that is correct, they’ve less than a minute to stop it, or there’ll be another boom… and possibly another, they’ve drifted closer to us, we’re in the blast range.”



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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #28 on: August 12, 2007, 10:14:02 pm »
Dead body...pinched nearly in half in the turbolift door...the only way off the bridge for our heroes... I like it. I'm liking this tale better by the post.

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #29 on: August 15, 2007, 06:58:55 pm »
Thank you all for reading thus far. Special thanks to those who have commented, and even those who are awaiting a good place to put a comment. Speaking of which, after reading this, I suspect there will be many. Or not. Either way, here's another installment:

   It was either pure genius or just fate that had put the emergency bridge control systems into the engine room. While the engineers worked at restoring power, T’Sala and Jones worked on shutting down systems, rerouting bridge controls, and attempting to regain control of the now drifting vessel. The successive thumps from decks above signified the collapse of the emergency force fields and closure of the emergency bulkheads. “I’ve managed to reroute power from the field generators to the containment systems,” Jones said. “I’ve bought us maybe twenty minutes, tops.”
   “I’ve accessed thruster control,” T’Sala started, “I should have us stable in one minute. We will not be able to move after that.”
   Jones nodded in silence and turned towards the engineer’s office. After a few steps, she saw her friend’s motionless form slumped over her console. One of the technicians stopped her entry, stating, “EMAT’s come and gone. No one  is to touch her until we can get her to sick bay.” He pointed with a thin index finger. “Part of the panel shrapnel impaled her through the leg. Nicked the femoral, and lodged there.”
   The Emergency Medical Assistance Team was what small ships like Cerberus relied upon when there were less than six personnel in the medical staff. Made up from regular crew members, the individuals were trained in advanced field first aid and treatment. They were good, but no where near as good as a skilled surgeon. Jones walked up behind the unconscious engineer, and paused a brief moment to reflect on their close friendship. “The impulse engines are destroyed,” she said to her friend. “But the warp drive… the warp drive looks stable and we could restore it, restore power to the ship at least.” She paused and wiped a tear from her eye. “You and I are the only ones who can repair it, you know? We don’t have the time to wait on someone else who might not know what to do… You are not allowed to die without permission… and as your senior officer, you don’t have that permission.” She turned and grabbed a tool kit from a locker behind them and left the office, choking back sobs as she went.
   “T’Sala, I’m going to start repairs on the warp drive to get us some more power. I shouldn’t be more than ten minutes, and I’ll let you know when you can begin the restart procedure.”
   T’Sala raised an eyebrow at her, and watched her head towards a Jefferies tube. She turned towards an impulse engine operations panel and began to search for a way to begin repairs there, in case her XO failed.

   “Cerberus is stabilizing her approach,” Perkins relayed the information from his science panel. “They’ve also stabilized the antimatter containment fields, from what it looks like, they rerouted power from the force field emitters.”
   “Well that should buy them some time,” McDougal commented. “Options?”
   “At this point,” Michaels started, observing the status of the engine restart on his temporary panel, “not to many. We could try to dock with her…”
   “No good,” Perkins interrupted. “We lack three things, a docking point, a tractor beam, and a well operating control system. I’m not questioning your skills as a helmsman, but since we don’t have the first two…”
   “Wait,” McDougal interrupted him, “I thought that even though they were less functional, ships of this era still had tractor beams?”
   “Not this one, the Romulan Empire has always been a bit behind the times, and even if the technology had existed when this ship was operating, it never received the upgrade.”
   “I won’t argue that the ship sucks,” Michaels added, “but why couldn’t we try to dock anyway?”
   Perkins sighed and began to explain to him, “Optimal docking point for this ship to Cerberus is at one of the two saucer hard points. With a hull breach on deck five, and without the emergency force fields, we’d still be trapped on board. The other docking points are either not compatible or we just wouldn’t fit.”
   “What about transporters?” Michaels asked. “Oh, I forgot about the technology on board. Perhaps using a shuttlecraft?”
   As if on cue, McDougal’s communicator chirped for his attention. He quickly snatched up the device and activated it saying, “McDougal, here.”
   “Shawn,” Doc Johnson’s voice called over the device, “we’ve managed to tour the entire ship. We’ve detected no traces of humanoid remains. Wherever the crew went to, they left in a hurry. We found tons of personal belongings, nick-knacks, uniforms, rotted food… you name it, they left it.”
   “What about the shuttle bay, did you see any craft there?”
   “Bay was empty,” the security chief responded. “No signs of struggle or fighting anywhere on board, either.”
   “Very well; you two make your way to engineering and see what you can do to help, McDougal out.” He closed down his communicator and set it back upon its previous perch. He took a deep breath before continuing, “We need to find a way to either start moving Cerberus on her way to a repair facility, or start communicating with one.”
   “I won’t be able to run the communications system until more power is restored, let alone see if it still works,” Perkins added. The lights brightened and the distant hum of the impulse engines could be felt through the deckplates. “Guess I’ll start running that check.”
   

   I warned you about using Klingons. They’re too stubborn, thought the mind of O’Pellentyippt’k’l, the second of two of the Masters present in the small craft.
   They failed? thought the mind of P’T’sloonghtf, commander of the expedition. Impossible. The tiny, sleek craft remained motionless, near the extreme of its sensor range, and well outside of their target’s. We’ll have to finish them ourselves.
   I’ve asked this before, but why don’t we just give the Andromedans of this time our technology? It would be much simpler.
   We’ve been attacked every time we’ve encountered them. They don’t recognize us as their future selves. The only way for us to succeed is for the inhabitants of this galaxy to fall. You know that.
   Of course. O’Pellentyippt’k’l’s mind almost shrieked in alarm, There is another ship, Romulan. Now there’s a race stupid enough to carry out our plans. Wait, there are six humans on board.
   Curious developments, these are. They will all have to be destroyed. Move us in to closest safe attack range, slowly, I don’t want them to see us until it is too late.
   Neither vessel poses a threat to us in their current state. We can be in and out in five minutes!
   Mind your place! These are humans we are dealing with. They are crafty and devious. We will approach under stealth. There is no alternative.
   As you wish. Without further thought, the tiny ship began its slow approach to the stricken vessels, waiting to unleash it’s furious wrath upon them.

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #30 on: August 15, 2007, 08:40:09 pm »
Well...frak me. Andromedans are friggin everywhere, man... *looks under bed...*

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« Reply #31 on: August 16, 2007, 12:31:49 am »
Is that really so bad? *eyes something moving behind the guv*

Hehe All I can say is hang tight, its still gathering steam. Unfortunately, it had to be Andromedans as there wasn't much fun in a "random explosion while on a random patrol" set up to get done what I want to get done.   :-X :-X

OT - - I've kind of also been working on a different story at the same time, so that's why the delay. Its so different, in fact, that the only reference to ST:Anything will be what happens to be on the TV at one point.
 - - I've also been tossing around ideas and started laying the foundation for a sequel to this epic, but any info given about that would spoil this one. ;)

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #32 on: August 16, 2007, 11:59:14 am »
But what about  :2gun:?

I had the bizarre feeling it was the Andro's after the ambassador mentioned his Masters and said the Klingon Empire was not responsible.  That said, while I usually am not fond of the Andro's as bad guys, your setup seems different enough that it's hooked me. 

Liked the inclusion of the 'stubborn' line.  Whether that was on account of my comment or not, it still tickled me.

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #33 on: August 16, 2007, 12:55:45 pm »
Hi Czar, sorry for not getting to this before now, but you'll likely be glad of the omission by the time I'm done... lol. I'm going to go through this a post at a time as if I'd answered after each. As you should know from my critiques of the Guv if nothing else, I'm kinda... anal. Consider yourself warned.

So, to begin.

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He was greeted by what he recalled was his executive officer, but with so many new faces and names to learn, it could have easily been the engineer or some other officer.
Without knowing the details of his assignment to the ship, I would have thought he would familiarise himself with the service jackets of his senior crew at least. If he's been hurriedly or suddenly reassigned this line makes sense, but that is not explained in the story.
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He silently noticed that the bridge lacked a proper navigation or communications station.
One would assume that the Navigational functions are at Helm, and Communications are integrated into Tactical/Weapons as in TNG, but again this is not stated here, though it is in the next chapter.

I really liked the "cigar scene". A good, solid bit of character work there, giving us some backstory and personality.

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...We had known that the former CO would take shots at ships and stations across the Zone, using long lance drones…”
“How did he get away with that?” Jones asked. “Wouldn’t that have shown up in the supply logs?”
“He would have them added in secret, and logs altered. He was caught when one of our survey cruisers...
Why did he only get caught when another ship discovered what we has doing? What about the crew of the Apollo? There isn't a declared war if the UFP is working on détente. Why does the XO and senior crew let him fire weapons across the Klingon border? Why didn't they relieve him for conduct unbecoming a Starfleet officer, for trying to cause an interstellar war? The CMO should have forced him to undergo a psych eval at the very least.
This sticks in my craw.

In the crew introductions, I see a lot of good British names. Scottish and Irish specifically. ;D
I also like the use of the 'Master Circuit' pattern for com channels, and the changing of the watches, but you may be going slightly overboard (pun intended) with the protocols (announcing "Ship under way" and all that). Starfleet is more informal than that, even under hardass captains like Jellico. "You/I have the Conn" is the most formal I've heard it except for an actual change of command ceremony.
This ship does seem to be rather heavily armed. 8 phasers for a frigate? 3 photon tubes is what a War Destroyer has, but 8 phasers is heavy cruiser/battlecruiser ground. I was thinking Cerebus may have lots of defensive phasers, maybe even individually numbered Gatling phasers like an SFB FFE.

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“Low power,” Jones replied. “We don’t have enough to maintain your speed and charge everything.” She looked up from her panel and met his gaze. “You weren’t here for the trials, so I guess you didn’t know; we can’t maintain one hundred percent power for longer than ten, maybe fifteen minutes.”
Hmm... shouldn't the captain have been made aware of this before taking command? Usually there is some preparation, some familiarisation with a vessel involved in the selection and placing of a ship commander?
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Cerberus remained behind the warship, dwarfed by its massive size.
If you're going for an Okinawa-sized ship, you should know she's still 183m long, 77m wide and 5 decks thick. A D7 is 246m long and 160m wide, with about 11 or so decks. A D7 definitely outmasses the Oki, but she wouldn't really be "dwarfed". (See? Like I said, anal. ;D) Further, I agree a D7 would have put up more fight. After the Cerberus' second strike wiping out the D7's impulse, he still had full warp power, and a D7 has greater manoeuvrability than even a Battle Frigate, and 5 aft-firing Phaser 1s. Cerberus would have been at least slightly damaged, maybe moderately, as the D7 would have turned his full attention on the Cerberus at that point.
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“So now we are offering aid and comfort to the enemy? They were attacking innocent and mostly unarmed vessels. If I should have done anything different it would have been to beam their crew into space, then destroy the cruiser.”
This indicates a personal antipathy towards or even outright hatred of the Klingons - which is fair enough to have based on his past - but saying so to an Admiral indicates extreme imprudence and lack of judgement on his part too. That kind of remark is enough to get you busted from the Fleet, never mind a reprimand.
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Cerberus is a ship of war, not intended to carry the enemy
Wrong attitude for a Fred captain, but at least he kept it to himself this time. And the Federation doesn't build ships of war, or warships. They build starships, and ships that defend.
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Translated, the ships name is, roughly, 'Hell Hound'
Cerberus is the proper name of the Hound of Hades. It doesn't mean "hell hound".
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More 20th-century terminology. ST II uses "clear all moorings".

The spacedock doors stunt... If I were Admiral Baker - who I admit is typical of the politicised navy officers everywhere with his "we need to built peace" line that captains love to roll eyes at - I would send out a light cruiser or something to immediately relieve McDougal of command and court martial him. *shrugs*

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #34 on: August 16, 2007, 01:45:06 pm »
Andy could be a publisher with his mad-leet proofreading skillz  ;D  There's a reason why they call it "Andy-proofing"  :D


As for the future Andros...  Anyone know where I can find a story with dialog from "current" Andros?  Compare and contrast and all that.
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #35 on: August 16, 2007, 02:19:04 pm »
I will now do my 'poke Andy in the ribs' post, a long and valued Dyna Fanfic tradition.  This is to control Andy's anal tendencies in the same way he seeks to control our grammar and attention to niggling detail. ;D

Without knowing the details of his assignment to the ship, I would have thought he would familiarise himself with the service jackets of his senior crew at least. If he's been hurriedly or suddenly reassigned this line makes sense, but that is not explained in the story.

The first is a valid point.  The only counter-argument I can think of is that seeing a picture of someone and meeting them in person can be two very different things.  Well, that, and it's also possible that our protagonist just isn't that good with matching names and faces, an affliction I can sympathize with, and Czar did mention the 'so many to learn factor'...while I figure he would pay special attention to his XO and other senior officers it's still possible to not have anything near perfect recall of such details before having met the people in question.

I DID get the impression his assignment to the Cerebus was hasty.  I don't however, remember that being specifically mentioned.

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He silently noticed that the bridge lacked a proper navigation or communications station.

No reason to have the reason for such right there.  Having it in the next chapter is fine, and also shows the Captain learning how his ship works in more detail.

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I really liked the "cigar scene". A good, solid bit of character work there, giving us some backstory and personality.

Me too. ;)

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Why did he only get caught when another ship discovered what we has doing? What about the crew of the Apollo? There isn't a declared war if the UFP is working on détente. Why does the XO and senior crew let him fire weapons across the Klingon border? Why didn't they relieve him for conduct unbecoming a Starfleet officer, for trying to cause an interstellar war? The CMO should have forced him to undergo a psych eval at the very least.
This sticks in my craw.

This particular criticism is misplaced.  While, in a perfect world, your balances would counteract the Captain's checks, there was not enough information presented to make any assumptions about what happened.

We don't know the previous captains motives for firing, his method of hiding his actions from his crew or convincing them it was all okay, and we don't know that his crew didn't agree with his actions to begin with.  Hell, we don't even know that he wasn't acting under orders, and was then hung out to dry as a scapegoat when he carelessly allowed another Federation ship to see what he was doing.

There's plenty of scenarios that would allow this to happen.  It's actually less extreme than the actions of the USS Phoenix in the TNG episode 'The Wounded', and relatively typical using the real-world 'Cold War' as a guide.

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In the crew introductions, I see a lot of good British names. Scottish and Irish specifically. ;D
I also like the use of the 'Master Circuit' pattern for com channels, and the changing of the watches, but you may be going slightly overboard (pun intended) with the protocols (announcing "Ship under way" and all that). Starfleet is more informal than that, even under hardass captains like Jellico. "You/I have the Conn" is the most formal I've heard it except for an actual change of command ceremony.

Depictions of military protocol really depend on how the author wants to portray Starfleet.  While onscreen the organization is much more casual, that doesn't mean things can't be portrayed in a different light in other media.
 
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This ship does seem to be rather heavily armed. 8 phasers for a frigate? 3 photon tubes is what a War Destroyer has, but 8 phasers is heavy cruiser/battlecruiser ground. I was thinking Cerebus may have lots of defensive phasers, maybe even individually numbered Gatling phasers like an SFB FFE.

I actually sort of agree with this, but the fact is, the Cerebus has whatever the author says she has, and the reader DOES have some responsibility to go along with it even if it flies in the face of source material not written by the author of the particular story.

Example:  You're very fond of the whole 'warp drive in the nacelles' thing for ships prior to a certain date, and have no problem using it in your stories despite the fact that canon clearly shows the system has never operated that way.  You use the idea because you prefer it, and others have the same right.

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Hmm... shouldn't the captain have been made aware of this before taking command? Usually there is some preparation, some familiarisation with a vessel involved in the selection and placing of a ship commander?

Strongly agree.  That's sure as hell important enough to make sure the CO knows.  Why, imagine La'ra's reaction if someone didn't tell him something like that!  Or Ford's!

Or, God be merciful on the messenger who did finally tell him, Krenn's. ;D

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Cerberus remained behind the warship, dwarfed by its massive size.

Subjective.  The D7 is bigger, and to the crew of the Cerebus, 'dwarfed' might be an entirely appropriate word.

I've already said my own piece on the fight scene, so I won't comment any more on that.

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This indicates a personal antipathy towards or even outright hatred of the Klingons - which is fair enough to have based on his past - but saying so to an Admiral indicates extreme imprudence and lack of judgement on his part too. That kind of remark is enough to get you busted from the Fleet, never mind a reprimand.

I doubt one remark would get him busted from the fleet.  You're overstating things.

I do agree with the 'extreme imprudence and lack of judgement' part, but I've already commented on that as well.

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Wrong attitude for a Fred captain, but at least he kept it to himself this time. And the Federation doesn't build ships of war, or warships. They build starships, and ships that defend.

Depends on who's depicting the Federation.  Czar seems to stick closer to an SFB-style UFP, and their Starfleet is more militaristic than ST's.  In any case, this is the opinion of one character in the story, and while you are seeing it as the 'wrong attitude' for a Fed captain, that may very well be the point.

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Cerberus is the proper name of the Hound of Hades. It doesn't mean "hell hound".

No, but it might've seemed close enough to the person doing the translating, and simplifying the comparison would be natural.

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More 20th-century terminology. ST II uses "clear all moorings".

Author's perogative.  ST also uses warp-cores from the beginning. ;D

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The spacedock doors stunt... If I were Admiral Baker - who I admit is typical of the politicised navy officers everywhere with his "we need to built peace" line that captains love to roll eyes at - I would send out a light cruiser or something to immediately relieve McDougal of command and court martial him. *shrugs*

Stupid move on Baker's part, to do that, as if I were HIS CO, I'd put his ass in hock too for imperiling a Starfleet ship commiting a minor traffic violation.  Thus, it would be smart of him to let it go.

This opinion still doesn't change the fact I have serious problems with that whole scene.

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More later - if you can stand it. Czar, please take no offence at these comments. I'm not saying this to wind you up, but to help you get better. Just ask the Guv. I did this to him as well. :D

Take this part seriously, Czar.  Andy is trying to be helpful, and he does this to everyone.  He's just a Scot and has no tact or manners.  To say nothing of his bad hygeine and fondness for sheep.

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #36 on: August 16, 2007, 02:38:32 pm »
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Take this part seriously, Czar.  Andy is trying to be helpful, and he does this to everyone.  He's just a Scot and has no tact or manners.  To say nothing of his bad hygeine and fondness for sheep.
Oh, you total bastard!  :o  This, coming from a Suh-thu-ner! Oh pot, thou are black.  :angel:

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In between personal attacks and such (:P) Larry does make some good points. ;)  I'll bear that in mind for critiquing the rest of the story.
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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #37 on: August 16, 2007, 07:07:34 pm »
But what about  :2gun:?

Liked the inclusion of the 'stubborn' line.  Whether that was on account of my comment or not, it still tickled me.

Didn't see that smiley, but that too ;) ; and 'stubborn' was an inspiration from you.

Andy, La'ra did a good job covering for me in my absence, and I will only touch up on a few points, and possibly clarify:
 
The XO and Eng are same age, rank, gender, etc... When I was first posted to my ship, I could hardly find my way around, let alone determine who's face went with what name. To make matters worse, the Eng and the XO at that time(same rank and gender, similar age) actually looked alike. Only way to tell the two apart (for me, being new) was that the Eng looked like walking dead after a few days in port. Calling them by name was often a guess for me. I was going from personal experience with this.

As to Cerberus herself, see my production notes:

USS Cerberus, NX-12093
FFBX class (Frigate, Battle, Advanced)
3 PHOT FA 6 x PH-1; 2 FX; 2 LS; 2 RS 2 x PH-G; 1 LS; 1 RS Drone 2 GX*
SHIELDS: USE FFX OR XFF IN OP*
Warp 12+12+12* Imp 4* AWR 4* BTTY 4 (2 batteries at double charge)
Lab 2 C HULL 8 BR 2 AUX 1 EMER 1 TRAC 2 TRAN 2 SHUTTLE 2
DAM CON 6 EX DAM 6* SENSOR 6 5 4 3 2 1 SCANNER 0 1 2 4 5 6
MVMT COST: 1/2:1, TURN MODE:**
TBOMB/DUMMY:4/4
CREW SFB: USE FFX +1
CREW ST: SFBx10 + 2
MARINES SFB: USE FFX +2
MARINES ST: SFBx5 - 3

*PLAYTEST AND CHANGE AS REQUIRED, NOT TO POWERFUL NOW*
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I haven't done a lot of playtesting to tweak the power curve, and not having an SSD handy for FFB or FFX, I guessed at some things. I'll probably get some more comments about the curve, but its still being worked out.

D7D vs. FFBX:

Size matters not. It is hard to run this simulation for most desired effects without lots of SFB material that I am not currently in possesion of, not counting arranging for and playing it out. I did my best with SFC:OP and went from there. I used the assumption that this D7D was/is normally operating across the lines and wasn't full up on supplies, let alone focusing its attack on the two frigates it encountered. The focus of a convoy raid is to get in, do as much damage to the convoy as possible, and get out. Also, any D-series hull should be able to handle a mere frigate. BUT: My combat style focuses on the enemy's weakness, in this case, the #4 shield:

The protective shield faltered and failed, allowing the torpedoes unhindered access to the unprotected hull. Whether it was luck or a good tactical officer's targeting skills didn't matter, as the single overloaded weapon found its mark in the main impulse complex, causing massive eruptions of fire and escaping atmosphere. "Overload all torpedoes, all available power to shield one. Helm, stay with him, but let him open to three thousand." Cerberus remained behind the warship, dwarfed by its massive size. Four pinpoints of energy erupted from the now wounded combatant; drones sent to their next target. Without hesitation, Cerberus fired her defensive phasers, destroying the incoming missiles almost effortlessly. "Tactical, priority targets: warp, impulse and weapons, in that order."

    "Overload phasers, too, Miss T'Sala. Let's end this."

   The Klingon ship managed a small counter attack with its phasers, and began a vain attempt to shake its adversary.
I was attempting to convey that the smaller and "less capable" vessel had scored a very desirable series of hits. Alas, I should have mentioned that the other two "orbs of death" also impacted. 32 DPs without a shield = bad day for anyone. Diverting extra power to #1 shield along with the reduced speed of Cerberus should have indicated that there was some extra protection, even while O/L'ing torps, et al. Enough of this part though, its not the focus of the story.

Apollo

Ship of mystery and deceit! I didn't think it was a requirement to go into more detail about why or how, seeing that it was from McDougal's point of view. Would Command tell him why the ship would have those orders? Would Command even acknowledge such orders, had they actually been issued? Heck, wouldn't Command want to cover up this incident as best as possible? McDougal just didn't know exactly why or how, just that it happened. The old CO and most of those involved were relieved, those with a lesser knowledge or involvement were retained, only to sprout rumors and speculations about the incident. No more on this subject.

The DOORS of DOOM!

Can't a guy have a little fun with his writing? Conclusion to this infamous scene will eventually arrive. Towards the end. Which is a long way down the road...

WARP POWER LEVEL!

"Captain, I know you've only been assigned and on board for a few days, and we were going to tell you at the next staff meeting, but now that we're entering a totally unexpected and power intensive scenario, you should know..."

Going for the hastily assigned and not quite familiar with everything yet point of view.

Its the Federation, Jim, but not as we know it...

Depends on who's depicting the Federation. Czar seems to stick closer to an SFB-style UFP, and their Starfleet is more militaristic than ST's. In any case, this is the opinion of one character in the story, and while you are seeing it as the 'wrong attitude' for a Fed captain, that may very well be the point.


This is true. Now if I could just remember the quote that Janeway said about the TOS time period I'd be set. Something about space was bigger and more dangerous.

For a time period reference, I'm writing Pre-Operation Unity, Post General War... about Y192-194. I haven't set that in stone yet.

To sum up: the questions and comments, harsh or light or whatever you feel that they are, are desired. No offense was taken, nor was I miffed by anything.

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #38 on: August 16, 2007, 09:33:58 pm »
Holy Crap at the insane references to canon, quasi-canon and SFB rules!

Glad I'm only coming in on the tale of this conversation and not getting overly involved. My stand on all these should be reasonably well known. Write your story.

I myself am enjoying this tale, even over the spacedock door incident. If you say the ship has X-amount of guns, I'm right there with ya. The Frech mounted two 8" guns on the Surcouf-class subs in '35 and it worked. The only reason it didn't sink anything was the natural Frech propensity for being disinclined to do more than wave white flags at Germany during that time period [not quite tru, but to those other than the French, probably funny]. England had it's M-Class. It had a 12" gun! A 12-inch gun!!! The US Narwhal had two 6" guns, and it was VERY effective at what it did.

So I have no real technical quips over what you say a ship has. [this is also in response to when Endeavour eventually opens up with her Mark 4 phasers...which will one day happen]. 

I used to be the worst stickler for canon vs. noncanon, tech vs. what you see in an episode/book/story. It detracts from your ability to enjoy the tale if you're too worried about such things. Can it be pushed to beyond believable? Sure. Thus far, noe of us has gone any where near there. Though I am of the opinion the Cerberus/D-7 fight should have been longer... But then...I like me some long fight scenes...

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Re: Second Chances
« Reply #39 on: August 16, 2007, 10:00:19 pm »
This is exactly why I should never post responses in a hurry. I forget to mention things.

Like how I was attacking this problem as a whole. SFB rules are being used as guidelines, to get an idea for what can and can't be done. Canon is being used as reference material, who Kirk nailed with a phaser or his tally whacker not included, such that an overall feel can be attained. I'd honestly believe that if I wrote solely to canon or SFB alone, alot would be missing. By blending the two, I feel I can accomplish more with less.

Quasi-Canon is what is the result, ships slightly more capable than others of the era, battles that can be shortened or lengthened to fit the needs of the story... No one complained (that I recall) when General Lee was introduced with four nacelles... Its all about what can be done with what was done.

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P.S. One more thing: You never see formal watch turnovers in TV trek, or movies, or even in other stories. You won't find much more in this one. The reason being is that it is assumed to have happened before, and usually there isn't time to be formal. Example from the real world, US Navy: "Battle Stations Torpedo" watch turnovers usually occurred as a high five "I had it, you got it" deal, often seen in the shows. I can neither confirm nor deny that once or twice there wasn't even anyone to relieve when I arrived.
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