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Endeavour Story #9
« on: April 30, 2007, 11:04:17 pm »
Well, here's what went down after 'Home Base'. Hope this one generates some comment as well.

The name came to me while I was in the process of writing it. It wasn't till after that I noticed how pornographic it MIGHT sound to some baser individuals...such as myself... But it kinda fits, so I've left it intact.


Star Trek
The Carrot and the Long, Hard Stick
CH. 1





“Starship USS Endeavour arriving.”

Commodore Ford inclined his head at the annunciation that called out from the overhead PA system. The voice of nearly every Starfleet computer sounded the same, the voice of a woman dead now for over a century. The wife of an Admiral Roddenberry, or some such, Chevy believed.

The commodore stood beside his XO, Commander Benjamin Thomas, and his CMO, Doctor Andrea Keller. Beyond her were the two noncoms that had accompanied him to this base nearly a week prior, PO1 Dawayne Goodwin and Specialist First Class Kimberly McCoy. Andrea was today standing one place down the file from Ford. They did not wish to flaunt their dating status before the crew of the ship, even if the majority of the crew already knew. Ford was not a man to flash his private affairs in front of people, and Keller agreed whole-heartedly. So she rested between the two hulking blonde men of the ship’s compliment, entirely dwarfed by their combined mass. At least McCoy wasn’t taller than she…

Outside the long, rectangular docking compartment the officers stood within, the gigantic, silver-hulled form of the Excelsior-Class Endeavour slowed to a bare crawl and edged closer to the station’s docking arm. The ship was a massive construction, built as much to be a work of art as a functional space-going vessel. Her lines were sleek and sublime. Her skin was a puzzle of interlocking square and rectangular alloy panels, left unpainted to show the brilliance of her natural metallic glory. Her engine intercoolers and deflector dish glowed a soft blue color that contrasted against the plain hull, black painted trim and the speckling of interior lights. The brilliance of the azure light coming from the navigational deflector cooled to a ruddy yellow color as the system cycled down to a stand-by setting.

The giant ship came to a leisurely halt, firing her RCS thrusters to align with the docking mechanisms of the Starbase. The gathered officers and observers watched in silenced awe as the ship settled then pushed suddenly nearer. She sidled up to the docking arm that extended to greet her and there came a subtle thud from the heavy structure of the space station. With the clack and rattle of multiple interlocking clamps and power taps, Endeavour was docked to Starbase 23.

The main doors to the airlock reeled open as the recorded sound of a boson’s whistle piped out over the intercom. Ford and his companions stood at straight attention as the far doors parted to reveal Lieutenant Commanders Davenport and Tolin within the Endeavour’s own airlock. The two of them set off into a briskly paced walk, headed for the ship’s CO and party.

Davenport took the lead as the two quit the docking arm and stood at attention before the skipper.

“Permission to board Starbase.”

Ford shook his chief of operation’s hand.

“Granted, Sparky. Welcome aboard Starbase 23. Admiral Sharp sends his congratulations for the splendid handling of the affair with the Pang. He also wishes work would allow his time to come down here to greet you in person.”

Ronald shrugged. Tolin had stepped up close and personal next to the commander, showing her own not-quite-regulation relationship with Davenport. “I imagine Shiloah’s true nature has left the Admiral in quite a bind.”

“Yeah.” Ford turned to the remainder of his people and gave them a go-ahead nod. “Return to Endeavour and make ready for departure. XO, the ship is yours till I get there.”

“Aye, Cap’n.” Thomas replied with a meaty-faced grin. He motioned for the gathered crew to follow and led them down the gangway where a similar ceremony would doubtless take place as they boarded ship. Ford watched them go, then regarded his remaining officers.

“Sharp will make the time to speak with you about what happened. He’s been on the operations deck for nearly two solid days since Shiloah’s nature was discovered. I think he’s blaming himself for not having seen any signs.”

“What signs were there?” Ron asked as the three of them left the docking bay and headed down a long, straight hallway. “Both Banks and Gossport were consummate actors. We had no clue either of them were Klingon till it was almost too late.”

“True.” Chevy agreed. “But Sharp worked with Shiloah, or Brigadier Komar, for two years on Earth before Sharp recommended him for the post of Sector Commander here. That’s hard to get over.”

“Any clue how Komar got so far into Fleet ranks?”

“Intel believes that Komar took on the identity of a Starfleet Commander approximately ten years ago when his ship was boarded by the Klingons. The Klingons took that Shiloah’s ship, capturing the upper decks, and started heading her for Imperial space. The reports of the junior officers in engineering stated that Shiloah miraculously showed back up hours later, badly injured about the face, and led them to retake command. After that, they fought their way to the aid of ships warping to their rescue.”

“They think that’s where the swap took place?” Tolin asked, her voice a whisperish tone with the accent of her people’s northern continent. Ford nodded to her in response.

“Yeah. The real Shiloah had too many officers and men from his past that, when contacted, knew him and could describe what he’d looked like. Those people hadn’t seen him since the Klingon capture and he accepted another starship command soon after with a completely different crew. Intel also contacted Shiloah’s parents. They hadn’t seen anything more than a subspace transmission of him since the capture.”

“Seems like a pattern, then.”

“Yeah,” Ford paused as he considered a turn in the station’s corridors. He led them first to the left, then reconsidered and took them down the opposite hall. He was not completely familiar with the layout of this outpost. “I hate this place. Anyway, Intel is using those parameters to try and locate possible further Klingon infiltration within the ranks.”

“What about your yeoman?”

“Not nearly so sophisticated. He was just implanted within a personnel transfer between base and ship. They cooked him up a fraud data trail and a mediocre history and let him loose. He was just a good enough actor to make it work. I did him the biggest favor by selecting him as my yeoman.”

Xia Tolin shook her white maned head.

“And from there he had access to a Fleet Captain’s files and all the strategic data in your computer.” The group silenced as they entered an alcove bank full of turbolifts. They remained quiet among all the subordinates gathered there and waited till they could board a lift car alone.

“Yeah…well. Until I got promoted to Commodore, Fleet didn’t share too much data with me. The C in C was never fully convinced I belonged in command of an Excelsior to begin with.” Ford replied, then ordered the car to proceed to the ops level. The turboelevator hummed away as it took them up into the towering command structures of the armored space station.

Mister Davenport looked uneasily aside to the commodore, about to broach a question to which he dreaded the answer. “I see that the XO has been reinstated. Any fallout following the trial and his conduct?”

Ford shrugged, his expression darkening.

“Some. Admiral Nakamura felt Sharp out for the idea of bringing Thomas up on charges of conduct unbecoming and several other miscellaneous articles of B.S. Sharp overruled him. We’ve got too much going on in this sector to throw away a line officer with Ben’s record. Nakamura wasn’t happy ‘bout it, but then, he isn’t the Chief of Starfleet Operations. Sharp is. So Ben’s still with us.”

The lift ride was a short one. The silver doors parted and allowed them out on a wide command deck packed with consoles and duty stations. Operations consoles lined the raised outer circumference of the circular room. Steps led down into a railed-off section akin to a starship’s bridge where stood the wide, round Strategic Command console. Sharp stood among the officers surrounding the wide, grey table, pointing into the holographic displays of ships depicted there.

Something was afoot. There was a particular buzz of activity in the ops level that hadn’t been there just fifteen minutes prior. Ford led his silent entourage down into the command section. “Something up, Admiral?”

Jonathan Sharp glanced back at his junior flag officer. Stern worry framed his dark skinned face as his almond eyes studied the bald Commodore. “The Ya’wenn have attacked our task force. Two frigates, the Texas and the Rome where destroyed.”

“Destroyed!” Ford found that highly surprising. The encounters Endeavour had had with the Ya’wenn had displayed that people to have much inferior technology than Starfleet. But then, they had just recently been given photon torpedoes… “How many hostile ships?”

“Just one. A very large ship from the reports rendered b the Rome…just before we lost contact. I’ve ordered the Comanche to halt her search for cloaked ships so she can move into the area. The Le Resolute and the T’pol will arrive to back her up in three hours. Their orders are to draw the line and keep that ship from reaching the shipping lanes.”

Chevy looked down at the map depicted on the flat display of the StratCom console. The tabletop showed the area of the Tempest plasma storm near where Endeavour had encountered the Pang two days prior. “Do we think this might have been the ship that attacked the Pang?”

“We don’t know.” Sharp motioned and led Ford to an adjoining console that showed a visual image of the Ya’wenn warship in question. “But it could well be. She’s impressively armed and armored.”

Chevis looked upon the picture of the blocky, silver painted vessel. She was a stubby, blunt shaped design with huge warp nacelles slung beneath long, blunt wings portions. New torpedo launchers stood out from the familiar lines of the design, covered in rough designed armor. Multiple weapon projections studded the hull and a wicked looking nose jutted out from the bow like some kind of dark beast. Ford knew that ship.

“That’s Jarn’s flagship. He’s got some new toys and wants to show off to us.”

“I don’t know the extent of the rogue Klingons’ plans against us, but it’s quite obvious to me they want the Ya’wenn to cause as much disruption as possible in this sector.” Sharp said, looking Ford in the eye. Chevy nodded his agreement.

“Anything to draw our attention away. How much do we think the Klingons know about what we’ve uncovered?” He asked.

“Hard to say, Chevy. It all depends on how secure the C in C’s office really is.”

“Which, of course, he adamantly denies is infiltrated.” Ford added. He looked back upon the grizzly image of the Over Warden’s ship and the weapons it was pictured firing at another Federation frigate. “My orders?”

“I wanted you close, but now I need you out there to chase that ship back into the Tempest. Do whatever you have to do to ensure the safety of Federation traffic and assets in this area.”

Ford nodded to his friend and commanding admiral. He turned and locked eyes with his two officers, pointing them back to the turbolifts. “Sparky, Engines, return to the ship and get her squared away. There’s some special ordnance in Bay Five here on base that the Admiral has ordered be loaded into our magazines. Take care of that. And make sure that Gossport is escorted to station security. We’re leaving in less than an hour.”

“Aye, sir.”

Sharp looked with amusement at his subordinate as Davenport and Tolin stepped away.

“Engines?”

“Yeah. Thought she was deserving of Bornet’s old handle.” He replied, remembering a former chief engineer of a previous starship named Endeavour. Sharp stood totally straight, studying Ford with interest.

“Is there a reason you’re still here?”

Chevis nodded.

“I’m told there’s a Federation Ambassador en route to Earth, returning from Qo’noS. I was wondering what strings I’d have to pull to get his shuttle diverted to this sector and my ship.”

“You want an ambassador on your ship?”

“Yeah… Someone good at offering the proverbial carrot to aggressive nations. I’d like your authorization to make an overture to the Ya’wenn and try to curb all this conflict before something bigger gets started.”

The admiral looked impressed.

“You really think this Jarn will listen to you or our ambassador?”

“No. But I don’t think he’s a real leader among his people, no matter how much money and resources he has at his disposal.”

Jonathan Sharp considered the proposal then gave his ascent with a nod.

“I’ll do what I can to steer that shuttle this way, Commodore. If I can get the ambassador to agree to help you, I’ll have his craft meet Endeavour en route.”

“Thank you, Admiral.” Ford turned and was on his way. Sharp watched him go, proud of the officer he’d led up till now.
***


Well... those of you looking below will note that I have only posted one chapter...

This is because, at the moment, that Well of Inspiration I've been dipping out of since December '05 has temporarilly run dry. I can't say it was a bad run. I've completed 11 stories in just over a year, each with it's own main plotline and have advanced a pretty intricate sub-plot to the point where it begins to take shape for those reading it. Not too shabby, even if I say so myself.

Hopefully the spring will flow anew soon and I can get back under way. Till then...I'm enjoying doing other things. Till I go back to full time Trek writing, I'll be posting this story at a slower rate and allowing those who give a damn to post comments without having to set aside several days to read the whole thing.

Anyway, hope this tid-bit will be enjoyed. I'll post CH. 2 as soon as everyone checks in again.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #1 on: May 01, 2007, 02:34:09 am »
Very good opening, Guv.  Clarifies some little loose ends from the last story and establishes the current plotline/advances the overall 'through the whole series' story.

Loved the 'USS T'Pol'.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #2 on: May 01, 2007, 01:01:45 pm »
Yup, a nice little start. I was gratified to see this:

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Admiral Nakamura felt Sharp out for the idea of bringing Thomas up on charges of conduct unbecoming and several other miscellaneous articles of B.S. Sharp overruled him.

Shows you had either thought of this before I voiced all my objections, or took on board my objections as the reaction of unnamed miscellaneous Fleet officers. :D

Either way, I was very pleased to see it.

Not much else to go on, but I did like your description of the Endeavour. So, your Excelsior has black trim, and not the blue of the Excelsior or the teal of the Enterprise-B? I have a ship--hell, a whole fleet--you'd like to play with, then.

Oh, one more thing; the voice of the computer. Even though the tip of the hat to real life was nice, remember that Pike's Enterprise

1) Didn't have a talking computer
2) Did have an XO with the same voice as the TNG computer. :D

You could say that Number One became an Admiral and decided after the hodge-podge of computer voices over the years--female in TOS, different males and females in the movie series for different ships--she decided to implement a Fleet-wide computer voice. Hers.  ;)

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #3 on: May 01, 2007, 10:34:02 pm »
As to the attempt by Nakamura to indite Thomas, that was there originally, but your wording did inspire me, so I altered the original script slightly as a tip of the hat to you.

'Bout the computer voice, we don't KNOW Pike's Enterprise didn't have a talking computer. 13 years later it did, under Kirk, though that could still have been an upgrade. I can't remember a real instance of NX-01 having a talking computer... Though I did note a few faux pas where Archer answered the 'comm by just looking up and talking... and addressing the computer once in similar fashion as well. Mostly. it was just a nod to Roddenberry and Majel Barret.

I'm very glad you like this intro bit. And yes, I just had to use the USS T'Pol.

I'll leave this up for a week or so for others to get 'round to it. Then I'll post some more.

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #4 on: May 03, 2007, 08:52:05 am »
You could say that Number One became an Admiral and decided after the hodge-podge of computer voices over the years--female in TOS, different males and females in the movie series for different ships--she decided to implement a Fleet-wide computer voice. Hers.  ;)

For some reason, this made me think about what would happen if they went back and gave the original six movies the Lucas treatment. Replace all the old effects with CGI, and such... and also replace all the computer voices with Majel Barrett's.

Sorry, I know, random thought.
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« Reply #5 on: May 03, 2007, 08:53:44 am »
I can't remember a real instance of NX-01 having a talking computer... Though I did note a few faux pas where Archer answered the 'comm by just looking up and talking... and addressing the computer once in similar fashion as well. Mostly. it was just a nod to Roddenberry and Majel Barret.

That's the major thing I hated about Enterprise. They couldn't even stay internally consistent. ::)
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« Reply #6 on: May 03, 2007, 03:19:48 pm »
That's the major thing I hated about Enterprise. They couldn't even stay internally consistent. ::)

Heh.  If you're counting on Star Trek to be consistent in any incarnation, you'll be countin' for quite a while.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #7 on: May 03, 2007, 08:31:40 pm »
OH! Do not be a'dissin' my ENTERPRISE!

heh... Well, it is my favorite series, though only since I bought the DVD collection. Having it all before me, when I can watch it back to back and without commercials...makes a difference to me.

And no...only in fanfic will you find that anyone truely TRIES to maintain consistancy. TNG and DS9 made their attempt at it, but then, I have luke-warm feeling for them. TNG took all of the action out of Trek and brow beat anyone who objected. DS9 was too wishy-washy and grounded in space-fantasy with the prophets thing. Voyager...Trek for the sake of Trek. Enterprise tried to go it's own way and got railed for it by fans. Now we have no Trek, save the upcoming movie which will be equally railed by fans.

BTW. Kieran...did you actually like the chapter above?
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« Reply #8 on: May 05, 2007, 08:44:06 pm »
My bad, Guv. ;) Yeah, I liked it; I still think the best thing about your stories is the character interactions; they seem genuine without being forced. That's something I've always had trouble with, I think.
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« Reply #9 on: May 06, 2007, 09:36:01 pm »
Character interaction is what killed my last Endeavour series before it could get off the ground. By story #2 of that particular jaunt, I was tired of writing it.

Then something dawned on me late one night. The reason my stories way-back-when were so prolific and fun to write (though not necessarilly good...) was because I'd based all the main characters on people I knew and mimicked their interaction. And it worked so damn well. That night, I jumped out of bed and started revising the NCC-2007's crew roster. I took people I knew and that knew each other and began to think of how they would react and speak when put in a specific position. It was great. I wrote two chapters that one night before work.

Take it for what it's worth, but maybe you can make that kinda work for you. La'ra uses a similar method. He's the one who got me thinking along those lines.

Now, how bout CH. 2?




CH. 2





Captain’s Log, Stardate: 9709.2

USS Endeavour has set out to reinforce the area we know that Jarn’s ship has been lurking within near the Tempest plasma region. Captain Ramses of the Comanche has not yet been able to locate the Ya’wenn ship and it is possible that they have retreated back into their own space before our ships could reach them.

Admiral Sharp has reported his success in securing the help I requested. Perhaps with the ambassador’s help we can bring all this hostility to an end without further bloodshed. I only hope we can convince Ya’wenn leadership to listen to us over Jarn.
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Commodore Ford again found himself standing at attention as his party waited to welcome a newcomer aboard. This time, however, he stood within the mechanical confines of the main transporter room, just before the semi-enclosed control booth. His Chief Engineer, Commander Tolin manned the controls that were at this moment beaming the esteemed ambassador over from his long-range warp shuttle. The noise of the transporter buffer filled the chamber and brought the collected officers and honor guard to even stiffer attention as the alcove lit with a shining blue field of energy.

The energy solidified into a single shaft of light bearing a tall, regal silhouette within. The personage inside posed in relaxed dignity, bearing a single pack and what was likely a book tucked beneath one bent arm. Ford’s breath caught slightly in anticipation of meeting this man. There was not a person aboard who did not want to shake his hand.

Even Commander Thomas, beside Ford, could hide his exuberance. All those collected had donned their dress uniforms for the occasion and stood decked out in the darkest maroon colors with the broad, decorative piping that lined the uniform’s edges. Ford had elected not to wear all of his Service Injury Merits, stopping at a mere one.

At a nod from the CO, Petty Officer First Class Goodwin stepped up and let out a shrill blast of the electronic boson’s whistle to signal the arrival of their guest on board.
The transport field parted and faded away with the majority of the noise, leaving the respected form of Ambassador Spock standing on the foremost pad above them. With the customary single raised brow expression common to his Vulcan heritage, the Ambassador looked to the commodore and nodded politely. “Permission to come aboard?”

Ford edged close to the steps leading up to the arrival platform and made the Vulcan greeting gesture, his four fingers split into a V. “Granted. Vulcan honors us with your presence, Ambassador.”

Spock stepped down to an even keel with Ford, also raising the traditional gesture. He wore the traditional grey-black traveler’s robe his people seemed to favor.

“The honor is to serve, Commodore. Thank you.”

Ford swept a hand toward his throng of officers and crew.

“These are my command officers. Commander Ben Thomas, XO. Doctor Keller, Commander Davenport, Lieutenant Nechayev and in the control booth is our Chief Engineer, Commander Tolin.”

“I am honored.” Spock replied in his schooled method of speaking English.

“Shall we get you squared away, Ambassador?”

“Not as yet, Commodore. If you’d be so kind as to take care of my pack, I would like to be briefed on the situation as soon as possible. I understand that you established first contact with the Ya’wenn?”

Ford nodded as a junior noncom stepped up to take the Vulcan’s pack and book.  Then Ford led Spock out of the transporter room and down the honor guard flanked corridor outside it. “Yeah, if you could call it that. We were out to secure the release of Klingon nationals from their prison and the whole affair degenerated from there.”

“I’d be appreciative if you would convey me to your briefing lounge to study your tapes on the matter.” Spock replied, matching the shorter legged gait of the round CO. Ford nodded his response, looking back to see how Mister Davenport was tending to the dismissal of the guard and the collected officers. Thomas had fallen in behind their guest, still smiling to have a living legend of Fleet service among them.

“Have you had much contact with these people, Commodore?”

“More than anyone else, I’d say.”

“I see. Then I will need your help in preparing for the meeting when we can arrange it. How do you intend to find the ruling world of the Ya’wenn?”

“Hadn’t figured that one out, just yet, but I’m workin’ on it.”

“I see.”





The officer’s briefing lounge on A Deck was stone quiet as Ford and Ambassador Spock read over the files on the species with which they were about to contend. The task was no light matter. Little was really known about the governmental workings of the Ya’wenn’s political body.

Jarn, the only official Ford had dealt with, had a title that translated through the UT as a kind of warden. He ran a prison complex, which catered to various species other than his own. He commanded ships and apparently had the authority to broker deals with alien governments. How much of his authority proved to be legal, however, was up to speculation.

“One would hope,” commented Spock after more than an hour of quiet reading and watching tricorder video, “That the Ya’wenn government proves more scrupulous than Jarn’s example. To deal with a political entity that legitimizes the use of fraud, slave labor and wanton force to achieve its goals would prove most difficult.

Ford lowered his PADD and took a drink of iced tea.

“I’m hopin’ Jarn is the black sheep of the bunch. Maybe they tolerate him because of the money he makes them or maybe they don’t know the full extent of how he operates his business.”

Spock regarded the Endeavour CO with interest. Something in Ford had intrigued him.

“Admiral Sharp stated that you originated the idea to push for a peaceful resolution with the Ya’wenn.”

“Yeah.”

“I find this path odd, considering your normally militant approach to past situations. A commander of your reputation would normally deal with offending enemy ships in a direct manner, and only convey an ambassador when force fails to resolve the issue.” Spock leaned his head to the side inquisitively. Ford felt a bit of heat stain his face.

“Well, maybe the two extra arrowheads on my rank bar makes me think a little longer about things. Starfleet isn’t supposed to be the military. Our conflict with these people seems driven by a grudge borne by a man who’s had his pride stomped on…by me. At the time, I did what I thought was right. In hindsight, I don’t think I’d have done anything different. But it still seems like my responsibility. So I’ll deal with it before it costs any more lives.”

Spock raised both brows and leaned back in his seat at the head of the table, a place customarily claimed by Ford himself. “How many starships have we at our disposal?”

Chevis shrugged.

“We’re meeting up with the Comanche, T’pol and Le Resolute. The Yorktown, Shran, Eldridge, and Kiev can all reach us within twelve hours without seriously depleting the patrol force.”

“Then you should call upon all of them.”

Chevis stopped dead in his tracks. Spock looked back at him in all his Vulcan ernesty. This was not a plan Ford had expected. “Going in strapped, aren’t we?”

“Strapped?”

“Packing heat, expecting a fight.”

“That was not the intention of my suggestion, though not entirely outside the realm of possibility.”

“Then what?”

“A show of strength. We protect the lead ship, which bears the ambassador, and show that we mean to be heard. There will also be an unspoken threat toward those who fail to listen to our proposal.”

Ford grinned.

“It’s all for show… Been learning from those Klingons you’re dealing with, haven’t ya?”

“Some contamination is inevitable. I have been working on an armistice with the Empire for some time.” The elder Vulcan seemed to take his own decision under scrutiny. “It would be the height of naivete to assume Jarn will not attack us once he learns of our intentions. Likely, he will attack this ship regardless of our purpose. We cannot proceed without adequate protection.”

Ford stood up from the table. He had some captains to call up.

“I like the way you think, Ambassador. I’ll be on the bridge.”

“Very well. I shall retire to my cabin and further study your reports.”

“As you wish.”

The commodore turned and preceded the older man out the door. He nodded to one of the two guards manning the small security alcove outside the lounge and directed one of them to lead Spock to his guest cabin. It was easy to lose one’s way aboard an Excelsior-Class starship. He did not want the ambassador to suffer the mild embarrassment of having to ask for directions.

Upon emerging upon the Command Bridge, Chevis drew up to the Strategic Command console Commodore Shiloah had ordered installed. Ford hadn’t liked any change to his bridge, but given his new rank and the responsibilities therein, the console had proven its worth just in organizing the patrol routines for the many frigates under his command. Commander Davenport stood beside the console at the moment, his ever-present coffee mug in hand as he studied over the tactical situation outside their hull. The operations officer looked up at his approach.

“You and the ambassador come to a decision on our game plan, Skipper?”

“Yup.” Ford braced both palms on the console table and leaned in tiredly. “We’re going in with a show of force. Have comm send dispatch to the Yorktown to have her group form up with ours.”

“Aye, sir.” Ron turned briskly and went to the communications station. There he conferred with the young lieutenant Smith. Soon, Endeavour was calling in her cousins in preparation of entering the Tempest once again. Ford looked to the center seat where sat Mister Thomas.

“XO, our ETA to intercept point?”

“Seven hours, present speed.” Thomas replied mechanically. Ben wasn’t the most by-the-book individual to ever wear the Starfleet uniform. But occasionally he could rap out a report in the correct sounding manner. This always brought a wry grin out of Ford.

“Alright. I’m going below to change out of this monkey suit.” The commodore tugged at the base of his dress jacket for show. Ben chuckled at the skipper and looked him over with all of his campaign medals, braids and ribbons. The remainder of the bridge crew had gotten out of their own dress uniforms in the intervening time between the arrival of their passenger and resuming their posts.

Ben gave his skipper a wink.

“But you look so pretty in your dress, Cap’n.”

The commodore feigned a grimace.

“I better get out of it quick while my chastity is still certain.”

With a good-natured smile, the CO left the bridge for his quarters.
***



Hope this is as well recieved as the last! I look forward to reading your replies. Sometimes after a long day at work, it's the best thig to cheer me up. Along with listening to the day's broadcast of Paul Harvey on his site...

See ya soon!

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #10 on: May 08, 2007, 12:04:06 pm »
Although absent for a while i've been reading your latest work. And I'm mucho impressed. Great easy flowing dialogs lots of action without it taking over the plotline, naked women and last but not least: humour. Makes my day.


ps.: All you others who've posted their stories will receive credit due asap....
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #11 on: May 08, 2007, 12:52:58 pm »
Been too long since we've seen your leering skeletal visage, Grim!
"Dialogue from a play, Hamlet to Horatio: 'There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy.' Dialogue from a play written long before men took to the sky. There are more things in heaven and earth, and in the sky, than perhaps can be dreamt of. And somewhere in between heaven, the sky, the earth, lies the Twilight Zone."
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #12 on: May 08, 2007, 10:19:57 pm »
Thank you very much, Grim.

More to come soon.

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #13 on: May 14, 2007, 06:46:52 pm »
Only 2 replies? Oh well. 

R/L can be a bitch. That...or no one was impressed with Mister Spock beaming onto the Endeavour...

Either way... Here's some more story!


CH. 3





“Contact, Commodore. Distance one-point-seven AUs.” Came the smooth voice of the dark skinned Vulcan science officer. Relaxed in his command chair, Chevis Ford looked her way. He was now in his standard uniform, the slimming and professional maroon jacket and black pant with the short-collared command sweater beneath.

“Jarn’s ship, Lieutenant?”

“I believe so, sir.” The officer replied with confidence. She pressed a key to extend the main sensor scope from the left corner of her panel. “Its warp field profile matches the signature of the vessel we fought within the Tempest on Stardate: 9704.”

Ford stood from the conn to stretch his legs before what would likely become a combat encounter. His right hand came to rest on the butt of his phaser, holstered at his belt. He’d ordered all hands to arm with standard sidearms hours before. Rifle bearing guards manned their posts near each turbolift here on the command deck. The commodore took a long glance across the bridge, taking in the composure of his officers and noncoms. They were ready. Some looked to him, awaiting his next command. The rest watched their monitors for changes in their equipment and made final preparations for the mission ahead.

“Battlestations.” He called out.

The lighting dimmed by computer control at the sound of the order; red tracers highlighted the corners of the compartment. Unnecessary personnel filed off the bridge to the pulsing bark of the klaxon alarm. The sound of the comm officer’s young voice sounded over the intercom, adding to the urgency of the ship’s signals. “Battlestations, battlestations! This is a Red Alert. Set Condition One throughout the ship.”

Division commanders began to sound off over the comm system, barely audible as a chattering din from the communications console. Ford looked about at the collected men, watching them make the transition into soldiers. He glanced directly aft to the StratCom and Mister Thomas. The XO looked back to him, matching his expression, looking on expectantly. Whatever confidence one took with him into battle, one always wondered if it was going to be the final time.

“XO, signal the task force to take up Advance Deployment Position Sharp Seven. Also, confirm their battle preparedness.”

Ben nodded once, tapping a key on the StratCom’s face, and headed for the comm station. Ford turned back fully toward the bow, settling his eyes on the main screen. He looked outward into the fuzzy pink sheen of the plasma storm before his ship. His adversary was out there. Jarn waited in his battleship for the chance to strike down another Federation vessel. Maybe he even waited for Ford himself. Chevy found that thought satisfying, but foreboding as well.

“All decks report Red Alert Status, Commodore.” Lieutenant Smith reported from comm.  Ford gave him a thumbs-up. Jarn’s vessel was just barely visible as a tiny black dot in the lit visage of fiery space.

“Very well, Mister Smith.” Ford replied.

“All ships report ready, Skip.” Seconded Thomas. The big mountain of a man returned to the aft consoles and bent there in waiting. Ford slowly turned and made to join him. He immediately looked down onto the black 2-D display, which showed a graphic map of the surrounding space all about the Endeavour within five Astronomical Units. The glowing, swirling mass of roiling plasma of the Tempest Storm showed ahead and to the portside. Behind the Excelsior-Class starship, her current task force escorts; Comanche, Le Resolute and T’pol; followed their leader in a V formation. Deployment Pattern Sharp 7 called for the force command ship to lead from the head of the group. Ford felt this was the way any battle against his adversary should be fought.

He would lead, charge down Jarn’s throat. Jarn’s beef was with him. Ford would like nothing better than cutting him down personally. The dark feeling was not one becoming of a Starfleet officer. But he felt it none the less. He knew that if he did not put an end to Jarn’s aggression, it would continue. It would worsen. It had to end.
The portside lift doors opened at the aft of the bridge, allowing Ambassador Spock to enter. His hands were clasped before his robe, making him the picture of serenity. He looked every inch the negotiator that his newfound reputation made him out to be. He came to stand beside Ford while the commodore thought about tactics. Chevy looked up at him.

“Ambassador.”

“Commodore.” He returned the greeting. “You have found Jarn?”

“Indeed. He’s alone. No back up. We’re about to enter what we believe to be their accurate sensor range.” Ford pointed to the image of the small ship that his task group was closing in on at a speed of warp factor eight. The Vulcan nodded and looked back to the ship commander.

“What are your intentions for the Over Warden?”

“I don’t want to antagonize the Ya’wenn by destroying one of their biggest and heavily manned warships. But I don’t intend to allow Jarn to just walk away without punishment just so he can bushwhack us later.”

“You intend to capture him.”

“Indeed.”

The ambassador looked left to the main viewer forward. He gauged the silver-hulled craft and all of its armament. “Jarn’s ship carries four hundred men, according to your scans from your previous battle. He may have added more. How many security personnel does your group have?”

It was Thomas who answered.

“Endeavour carries one hundred and twenty security, and we outfitted with a full company of marines from 23. That gives us a total of two hundred fifty here. Comanche has her sixty men. Le Resolute has forty and T’pol has twelve. All together we’re packin’ three hundred and sixty-two riflemen.”

“Any idea as to the level of the Ya’wenn’s training?”

“From what we’ve seen,” said Ford, thinking back to their mission to Kovarn. “They’re not professional soldiers. Hired guns, thugs, maybe some mercenaries. I’ll bet on our men any day in a straight up fight.”

“I doubt any pitched battle will be equitable, Commodore.” Spock warned. “They will undoubtedly be ruthless in defense of their ship, sacrificing their own numbers to vent compartments of our men. They know the layout of their vessel more implicitly than we, and they won’t be setting their weapons to stun.”

“I know. But I’m not out to keep their ship. We’re only after Jarn. It’s a smash and grab operation.”

Spock’s brow shot up and he nodded. They didn’t need to hold that ship. They had only to take the Over Warden from it. Deprived of their commander, the Ya’wenn left commanding their vessel would likely give up any idea of pressing the attack against such a large force of ships.

Ford was smiling with a wicked streak of cruelty.

“This could also be our chance to discover where the Ya’wenn homeworld or capitol is. We’ll question the Warden under truth serum.” The thought of the medication would do to its recipient gave the Commodore much more pleasure than a Fleet psychiatrist might have liked.

Spock noted the obvious signs of Ford’s malice. He’d seen various examples of adversarial relationships between humanoids during his tenure in the service. The hatred hurled between James Kirk, his former captain and friend, and Kahn Noonien Sigh, a bio-engineered cast-of from a bygone era was quite fascinating. The two men would have hurled their own bleeding organs at one another had that been their only method of attack. Ford and Jarn might prove to be just such an example.

Ford went on watching the developing tactical situation beyond the ship’s hull. Jarn’s battleship sat unmoving before the super-hot gasses of the Tempest. He was possibly unaware of the danger bearing down upon him. He likely knew of the warp fields belonging to the starships, but without accurate sensor data on various classes of Federation ships, he was probably waiting to see what sort of ships were coming his way before making any decisions. He probably hoped a fat, juicy convoy of civilian ships was trucking toward him.

Jarn did not know that even Federation cargo ships had better sensors than his people possessed.

“We’re getting into their sensor range.” Thomas intoned.

Each man about the StratCom watched for computer rendered signs of activity from the warship. Moments passed, showing the horrible reaction time Jarn’s crew of misfits churned out. Ford grimaced at the thought of having to rely on such a gaggle of men. Given the adventures Endeavour had underwent in the last six years, she would have been floating debris with such a compliment running her.

“Now reading power increase from Jarn’s ship, Commodore.” Came from science. Ford looked over Surall’s way with a nod and looked back down to the icon on the screen. The ship remained rooted in place. Was Jarn unaware of the danger these ships were to him, or was he still ascertaining his data?

Two new numerical markers popped up beside the red icon of the Ya’wenn ship.

“Their shields have gone up…” Ford commented. “He’s powering weapons.”

“Incoming hail, Skipper.” Called out the comm officer. Both Spock and Ford shared the raising of an eyebrow. Ford turned to face the main viewer.

“Gutsy bastard. Put him on screen.”

The fiery spew of gas disappeared from the forward visual display and was replaced by the bridge of another starship. This time, no unnecessary furnishings adorned the control room of Jarn’s ship. No pillows or silken hanging made it a den of heathen comfort. Jarn had learned from his previous engagement with Endeavour. He’d ordered every creature comfort out of the chamber where he’d command during battle.

“Captain Ford,” graveled the harsh voice of the tall, muscular, grey skinned alien who resided in a command chair with high armrests. The chair still seemed very comfortable. Far be it for Jarn to resign himself to an uncomfortable seat… “A pleasure to see that you have gotten your ship back into one piece.”

Jarn was smiling in confidence.

Ford stepped closer to the viewer and his own command chair. He put his hands lightly atop the blue upholstered conn. “And yours, Warden. And it’s commodore, now.”

“Ah, you received a promotion, no doubt for surviving me the last time.”

“Actually, they gave me the promotion for a really good book report I did on fat, swarthy prison lords.” Ford responded with a huge grin, as though he were addressing a long time friend. His comment made Jarn’s brows knit despite the calm he projected. “I’m going to give you the chance to surrender your ship without a fight. I’d hate to have to embarrass you again.”

“That’s mighty humble of you, Commodore. I’m touched, but I’ll have to decline.”

“You don’t really think you can outfight us, do you?” Ford pushed him, hoping to keep the Warden inactive while his ship’s closed the distance.

Jarn looked anything but nervous, but he was a cool customer. One did not know what the alien was thinking when he kept his game face in check. Ford was having less success in baiting him than the commodore had imagined. But so long as he wasn’t issuing orders to depart or attack, Ford had the upper hand. The deployment he’d placed his ships in was designed to cut off any attack or retreat vector, so long as they were close enough to do so.

“I could outfight you on any given day, Ford.” The warden boasted. His jaw jutted in masculine defiance. He’d likely prefer a good brawl or melee between the two. He was much larger and younger than the commodore. “I’ve gotten new equipment to get around the toys at your disposal. You won’t best me again, I assure you. You should fear me…”

Ford’s expression was equally assured. His hands spread to take in all that he had in a gesture. “We take all comers here, Jarn. We’re ready when you are.”

The Over Warden just smiled in response, and then he was gone. Replacing him on the viewing screen was an image of his ship turning away from the approaching Starfleet vessels. Ford jumped down the level to his conn and slid into the seat. “All ahead flank!”

“Flank, aye!” Shouted Bronstien in enthusiastic response.

“He’s runnin’!” Thomas reported from the StratCom in his own gruff voice. There was laughter underneath the tone. “He’s haulin’ ass for the Tempest!”

Ford tapped the key on his left intercom panel.

“Engines! Give me maximum acceleration!”

“Aye!” Was Tolin’s reply over the speaker. The great warp engines of the ship roared to new levels of bass and tenor as the Endeavour responded with all that she had. She reached warp factor 9 within moments, pushing the other Fleet vessels to the ends of their design capacity. At warp 9.01, she began to leave her escorts behind.
Jarn’s ship leapt into warp speed, pushing her own drives to the brink of exploding. She was angled as far away from Endeavour as one could get and bore in on a specific point of the plasma storm before them. Endeavour vibrated like a washing machine spinning its clothes. They were slowly closing in on the silver warship before them. The commodore glanced down to the right hand tactical repeater on his armrest. They would over take the warden’s ship inside twelve seconds.

In eight seconds, however, Jarn would reach the first passing strings of the Tempest. Ford’s hands clenched on the chipped metal of the conn’s armrests. He was losing his chance to get that son of a bitch!

“Pour it on, Helm! Stand by tractor beams!”

Bronstien said nothing in reply. Nechayev acknowledged and began targeting the tractor emitters. Jarn’s ship suddenly enlarged within the magnification of the main screen, then began a wallowing turn to penetrate the outer membrane of the plasma storm. She pushed ahead at her best sublight velocity and faded from sight, passing into the wispy fields of roiling energy.

“sh*t!” Ford snapped off.

Spock rocked back on his heels. He’d been unaware of how engrossed he had actually been with the short chase, and Ford’s vehement outburst of profanity shocked him back to reality. Ford growled in animalistic fashion, slamming a fist down on the arm of the conn. He made Kirk seem reserved.

“Drop us out of warp and hold station!”

“We ain’t goin’ after them?” Thomas practically exclaimed the question. He leaned over the strategic station, hands bearing down hard on the metal edges of it. He couldn’t believe Ford’s sudden reserve. “We’ve got the better impulse engines!”

“Yeah, XO.” Ford breathed out as though he’d just finished a marathon. “But we left our escort behind and we’re nowhere near maneuverable enough to chase down a ship in that soup. Certainly not while trying to fight and beam in troops. And…we’ve got more ships comin’ that are dependin’ on us to lead ‘em to the Ya’wenn. So we let him go, for now.”

“So he can get us next time.”

“Maybe. He’ll have to get up pretty damn early in the morning to get anything over on us, Mister Thomas. For now, though, we wait. What’s the ETA of the rest of the task force?”
***

Perhaps this may wet the appetite.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #14 on: May 15, 2007, 03:42:25 pm »
Nice little segment there, Guv, but I feel the need to issue a few pointers. Sorry.  ;D

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One did not know what the alien was thinking when he kept his game face in check.

When you're keeping something "in check", you are holding that something back, restraining it, trying not to let it get out of control. "Game face" is obvious. So, you have two negatives making a positive here. It would have been better to say "...kept his game face in place" (which sounds silly with rhyming :) ) or "...kept his emotions in check".

I feel a pain, but I'm gonna say it anyway. You can say "ships" (without the apostrophe) if it is more than one ship (or chairs, or CDs). If something belongs to that ship, then we can go to the "ship's bridge". If we're on a videoconference, we can get feeds coming in from all the "ships' bridges". :D

And it's "whet" your appetite, as in with a knife. Bringing it to a keen edge. ;)

Oh, Thomas saying "riflemen". Would the huggy, clappy Freds call their marines that, especially as phaser rifles are Bad Medicine inside ships? Besides, with a full company, wouldn't there be a Heavy Weapons Squad and a Command Element?

My apologies Guv, but my Editor's Soul needed some release. Ah'm no' wantin' nor tryin' tae nark ye off.

Now, this line I love:

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The two men would have hurled their own bleeding organs at one another had that been their only method of attack.

What. An. Image.  :D

I like that Jarn is smart enough to run and fight another day. I actually find it possible that he timed his breakaway so that Ford would just miss cacthing him, just to get under Ford's skin--thought it might not be likely as Ford has been hiding Endeavour's true capabilities from Jarn.

Beyond that, there's not too much to comment on in Ch.2. Looking forward to more, though.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #15 on: May 15, 2007, 10:20:49 pm »
Some editors nitpicks still get past me. But it was a long story to edit. Forgive me.

In the US, Marines hold by the addage 'All Marines are riflemen.' My Starfleet runs on the same system. And yes, there would indeed be a Heavy Wep and Command Detail aboard, but as you'll never actually see any marines in this story, there was no need for unnecessary detail. And, so far as the Trek TNG tec manual's snarky explanations as to 'why' there were no rifles aboard Enterprise-D... They're stupid. You have rifles...you pack rifles. My idea is that Endeavour packs enough rifles in her standard armory package to arm 1/2 of the crew. With my Endeavour, that's 400 rifles. I also envision 3 good sized armories, FYI.

Glad you enjoyed this lil' tid bit.

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #16 on: May 18, 2007, 11:24:12 pm »
Luvin' it so far.  Tension in the confrontation and short pursuit was very good, but I think my favorite scene thus far is Spock's beam over.  He has that...brusqueness we've seen from Vulcans, but in a way that doesn't seem impolite or ill-mannered.  That's Spock to a T...logical, confident, but not arrogant the way his pointy-earred brethren often are.

It's also very cool to see Ford's sense of responsibility for the things that've been happening.  While for my money, Jarn is the real cause of the whole situation, most folk would have their own share of 'my fault' after all the strife, and Ford's reaction to that, and the way it fuels his resolve, is very believable.

Downsides?  The chase seemed resolved a bit quick.  Other than that, nothing much, save Andy's favorite target, grammar, but I'm the last person that can complain about that.... ;D

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #17 on: May 18, 2007, 11:38:09 pm »
Yeah, I try to keep my cool about it most times...

...but I'm 'bout up to my eyes with the grammar comments... Speak to my word processor. I don't write for the express purpose of turning out a word-perfect collection of grammar. If I could, I'd hook a f'ing maching to my f'ing head and suck the story out of it without all the innane typing. Faster...easier.

But I digress from the wonderful artifact I've been given above. After a minimal amount of cajoling and waving of carrots before La'ra, he has read and commented on this story in a single hour! This makes me happy in places you don't want me to describe...

Yeah, I agree that the chase seemed a bit quick. But there was little else I felt Ford could/would do about it. He kinda pissed away a good chance to get Jarn, and it'll come back to bite him. So, no regretts over how I wrote it. You'll see what I mean later on.

I'm glad someone mentioned Ford's reactions to events. Yeah, he feels responsible, espescially sinse he really believes that last, spitfeul torpedo he fired started most of this conflict up. And he hates to leave things unresolved.

thanks ever so much for the comments, y'all.

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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #18 on: May 18, 2007, 11:44:00 pm »
If I could, I'd hook a f'ing maching to my f'ing head and suck the story out of it without all the innane typing. Faster...easier.

That'd be especially good for those scenes you have in your head but can't quite describe fully the way you want too....there's a little, tiny moment from 'The Harrying' that STILL bugs me cuz when I read it, it doesn't quite sound like how I pictured it.

I am so OCD.
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Re: Endeavour Story #9
« Reply #19 on: May 21, 2007, 10:17:05 pm »
Another week, another chapter.

I hope this is entertaining for all. Read on, if you please.

CH. 4




In the next few hours, the bulk of Patrol Task Force 173 converged outside the glowing clouds of the Tempest plasma anomaly. Endeavour commanded a group now composed of a Miranda-Class heavy cruiser, a research cruiser of like class, a refit Constitution-Class heavy cruiser, a Chandley-Class light cruiser, and three Okinawa-Class frigates. They were a force to be reckoned with.

Ambassador Spock eyed the forming starships as they fell into narrow line behind Endeavour. Endeavour was leading the task group into the Tempest to begin their search for the Ya’wenn homeworld. Closest to the Excelsior-Class starship were two of the frigates, Kiev and Eldridge. The later was the older of the pair, refit so many times that her hull panels almost looked jagged. Just behind them and barely visible as the swirling gushers of plasma enfolded about them, was the research ship T’pol. That Miranda Class ship was the least heavily armed among them, bearing only six phaser banks and bearing a wide sensor pod atop her ‘roll-bar’. It was for this module that the ship was a part of the patrol group to begin with. She had the most powerful eyes in the group; even more so than Endeavour, which was the newer craft.
Spock’s eyes sought out the faint lines of the Chandley-Class Le Resolute. That cruiser was among the relatively small group of ships built to accompany the Mirandas as fleet ships before the advent of the Excelsior. They weren’t as heavily gunned as they Constitution-Class forebearers, but their greater maneuverability and newer shielding had proven their worth. Spock had seen only one other vessel of this class, and was particularly interested to look upon this one. She was a wide, flat built vessel, with a smaller saucer than either the older cruisers or the Excelsiors. Two huge, hump-like hulls adjoined to her rear, and from them sprouted her warp engine struts. The engines stretched out beneath the craft rather than above. Le Resolute was a beauty, and her skipper well versed in combat. He’d served in frigates most of his career till being promoted to full captain. He’d then been given a larger ship to command a number of patrol ships from.

Among the assembled ships, Yorktown was the oldest. She was among the few surviving and serving members of the original twelve Constitution-Class. Bearing the hull code NCC-1717, she was a relative of the old Enterprise, the ship on which Spock had served so many good years. In outward appearance, she looked as new as either of the Mirandas or the Chandley, but within her there was told a different story. Her structure would be scarred and stressed from years…decades of service to the Federation. Tons of older equipment stood cobbled together with newer devices. Little was left of her original format, but even the equipment from the retrofit received by the first twelve ships was over twenty years old now. Yorktown’s day was nearly ended.

Spock watched them all as they appeared and faded from view time and again. He thought of Ford and how the man approached the rangy animal of command. His style was one all his own. Kirk’s was a more regulated, though often flamboyant method. He’d met Sharp, seen him in action. Jon Sharp was a very by-the-book officer. Most of the good captains were. Ford, however, did not head decorum. Did not adhere to the normal methods. He was as unrestrained and foul-mouthed as many of those Spock had met in the later Twentieth Century. But his record showed long lists of successful missions and admirable tactics. He was unorthodox, but efficient.

The ambassador wondered how this play would work itself out. Would he be able to broker a working peace with these new aliens? Or would their gestures be rebuffed, their intentions ignored?

For a year now, Spock had been in the Federation Diplomatic Corps. His contributions to the Klingon Peace Initiative were solid, even though results had thus been lean. Diverting here at the behest of Admiral Sharp had been at first viewed as a welcome distraction offering a different view of his work. But after reading over the reports and watching the visual recordings of this Over Warden, Spock began to wonder if this task was going to take on a whole new life of its own. A whole new team might eventually be needed to resolve the conflict here were it to escalate further. Lives had been lost on both sides. But the Ya’wenn seemed quite eager to spill more blood, and seemed to have little remorse for their actions.

Spock had seen only one example of the Ya’wenn mindset. But Jarn had to be at least something of a model for the rest of them. Even the most debased beings were a product of their society. Or were they?

Spock was never one to judge an entire species on the acts of one of its members, or even a group of them. But the chivalric, detached way that Jarn viewed violence was akin to barbarism. The tricorder readings taken of the conditions of his mining installation spoke of that. The ambassador hoped that Ford could find the true rulers of these people. Jarn could not be dealt with. A man like to him would be equally useless. Only an open-minded body of more disciplined beings could be brought to end this dispute and reign their Over Warden in.

Lost in his thoughts though he was, Ambassador Spock still detected the faint sound of the lounge’s doors open. A slight footfall came from the bow entrance, but came no farther. Spock turned to look upon the owner of those light feet. Framed in the light squared within the doorframe was the young, dark skinned Vulcan lieutenant.
Surall eyed him in silence, half turned to leave, hesitating. Spock’s brows rose.

“Yes, Lieutenant?”

She swallowed. She must have been very taken aback to have found him here. This was the officer’s lounge on B Deck. The ship’s upper officers dined here and relaxed in the quiet atmosphere of the somberly decorated compartment. Plants lined the walls, and the bulkheads were toned in a very neutral brown.

“I apologize for disturbing your reflection, Ambassador.” She told him, completing her turn to leave. “I shall leave.”

“Not at all, Lieutenant,” Spock called after her before she could take a step. “I find myself longing for a like mind to converse with. I have known only the company of Klingons and humans for the majority of the year. Aside from my father, that is…”

Surall turned back toward him and stepped past the threshold of the door. It closed behind her, restoring the low light level of the room. Spock motioned to a small coffee table and sat on the couch closest to the window. Surall approached, clasping her slim but long fingered hands before her and sat primly across from the Ambassador.

Knowing he would have to jump-start any conversation with this woman, Spock began unabashedly. “You are young, like so many aboard Endeavour. When did you graduate, Lieutenant?”

“Class of ’89, Ambassador. I graduated with honors and the Vulcan Merit of Sciences.” She said matter-of-factly. She tried to mask it, but pride shown out beneath her veneer of stoicism. This amused the much older man.

“Ah, you have achieved quite prodigious rank for so short a time. My own experience in Starfleet was not so swift in ascension.”

“Likely it was a different time…” Surall offered, hopeful to impress him with her empathy.

“I was held back by my own lacking ambition. I was more interested in learning than in excelling among my peers. I held the rank of ensign up until Christopher Pike assumed command of Enterprise. It was he who compelled me to ‘climb the ladder’.”

Surall looked at him with sudden interest. She switched to Vulcan suddenly, though the lounge abounded with no other personnel to overhear them. “Did you ever find serving among so many humans…lonely?”

“At times, Lieutenant.” He replied in the same. “You feel alienated?”

“Quite often.”

“You find no comradery among your peers? You lead a large department of like minded officers.”

“They are excellent scientists, but their methods are…”

“Illogical?”

“Indeed.”

Spock leaned back, his expression one of realization. He understood what her problem was. “And this capacity for illogic bars you from interaction on a social level.”

“I…”

“You fear contamination.”

Surall’s eyes widened at the accusation, then narrowed. She was not biggot. But, then, that wasn’t what he was telling her, was it? He sat there across from her, studying her like a teacher might a pupil. This man had lived among humans for most of his life, shunning life on his homeworld to spend time among them. Serving with them, living with them. He was also half-human. Perhaps he understood both minds.

“Perhaps.” Was what she finally answered.

“You have elected to serve Starfleet, which is, at its heart, an Earth-based organization. They conceived of it, Starfleet headquarters is posted on their homeworld. Given this fact and the human proclivity for adventure, it is only natural that they dominate it in population. You knew you would serve with humans, and a variety of like-minded species, when you joined. You should not fear to be influenced by them. It is up to you what behavior you emulate. Their nature is, at heart, an accepting one. They would reach out to you if you allowed it.”

Surall looked to the deck as she listened to his sage-like tone. Perhaps he was correct. She need not feel alienated among her own peers, among her shipmates. But they were so utterly different. Starfleet Academy had been hard enough, but she had gotten by with focussing on her studies and excelling in her classes. She’d assumed that those she’d classed with were so illogical and undisciplined due to their youth. The instructors seemed well rooted. Upon getting her starship assignment, she had expected to meet more officers of their ilk. This had not been the case.

Could she learn to look past their illogic and their chaotic nature? Or would she eventually withdraw into herself and shun contact? She refused to consider leaving the service she’d fought so hard to get into. Even by Vulcan standards, the Starfleet entrance exam had been grueling. She’d often been baffled at the fact that so many of these undisciplined human beings could manage to enter the fleet.

Spock was watching her as she thought the matter over. Finally Surall nodded to him. She would have to try. She did not envy the idea of serving in this fleet without companions. Spock returned the nod with assurance. Surall would do well.

For now though, he remained in the mood for companionship of his own.

“Would you like to share a meal, Lieutenant? I have heard that your Chef Riker serves an excellent plomeek soup.” He stood, motioning palm-up to the door. She arose as well.

“Yes. He has also managed to modify it to be palatable to human taste. He serves it quite regularly.”

“Then I must sample his human version. I cannot imagine it being made suitable for a species that requires so much spice in their food.”

The two of them left the lounge together.





'It's a lot of hard work being a mean bastard...' --Captain Eric Finlander, CO USS Bedford (The Bedford Incident)

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