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Home Base: Story #5
« on: February 01, 2007, 06:16:36 pm »
Here's something more from Rog-Trek Land. This story lays down some small clues for a larger, developing story and also deals with something I've been hinting on for a few stories (which no one has commented on, and I'm assuming was missed). I also range a little into Character Development for Davenport, which will make La'ra happy.

Hopefully this won't seem to be as 'off' as it felt when writing it. I'm a bit out of my element with stories like this, so any and all abuse...er...critisism will be welcomed! :)   



                Star Trek
   Home Base
   CH. 1
   
   
   
   “I don’t know what you’re talking about, Doctor.”

   Doctor Andrea Keller narrowed her dark brown eyes at the captain. The right corner of her mouth curled into a shrewd grin and she stepped closer to the ship’s CO. Captain Chevis Ford was not the most private man she’d ever met. But he did like to hide his illness from the ship’s officers and pretend he was perfectly okay. As chief medical officer, however, Andrea was privy to information about him that the rest of the crew was not.

   “You may think you’re hiding it well, Captain, but it’s obvious to me that the Varness Syndrome is affecting you more severely.” She told him in a quiet voice. The two of them were alone in her small CMO office in the midst of sickbay and there was little chance of being overheard. She lowered her voice for Ford’s sake only. “You hardly do anything at all with your left arm and I can tell when the color drains from your face.”

   Fully dressed in his duty uniform, the ruddy faced captain sat back in the visitor’s chair he occupied and looked off into deep nothing. He was quiet awhile, then looked back at her soberly.

   “Yeah,” was all he said.

   “The medication is no longer working?”

   “Not as well. I take two pills instead of one and I still have bouts of pressure and erratic heart beat.” Ford’s demeanor shrank. He was not a terminally ill man. But admitting to this fallacy within his body seemed to chip away at his pride.

   Varness Syndrome was a nervous disorder brought on by the exposure of Theta Wave radiation. It could affect many portions of the anatomy, but was most noticeable when it afflicted the heart. The heart could no longer respond to nervous stimuli in a regulated manner. This could lead to blood pressure anomalies and even heart attack. Many victims of the syndrome simply believed they were having anxiety attacks until it was too late. Ford had been lucky to have been serving in Starfleet. After being subjected to intense radiation from a planetary antimatter reactor detonation, he and every member of his away team had been checked out. The likelihood of his developing the syndrome had been postulated even back then. Now he’d been living with it for twenty-three years.

   “Nervous degradation is the primary hardship of Varness, Captain. Have you considered the implantation of a cardio-regulator?”

   Ford smiled thinly.

   “It’s been suggested. I also know can happen to them when they’re subjected to EM pulses or even a Klingon stun blast. I’d effectively find myself relegated to ground duty or would have to retire from service.”

   Andrea turned her longhaired head half aside. “Not necessarily, sir.” Her soft Britain accent replied. “You could still serve as commanding officer…”

   “Not likely, Doctor. Fleet would strongly suggest my reassignment. I like it where I am.”

   Keller sat back I her own seat and considered her other option.

   “Well, there is another choice, now.”

   “Oh?”

   “It’s an adapted Denobulan treatment for similar nervous degeneration. They clone a replacement nerve cluster and transplant it for the damaged nerves. The operation is rather invasive, but shows to be very promising. Recovery time would likely be in the order of two months.”

   “Two months…” Ford thought the prospect over. Endeavour, damaged as she was, would be in dock for at least half that time for repairs to her warp drive. Thomas would be recovered from his own affliction before launch and could handle the ship till he returned.

   “What’s required to get this rolling?”

   “Just a genetic sample from the area in question. That in itself will be a tedious operation. Then the tissue is replicated and its growth accelerated. This takes approximately a week.”

   Ford looked off toward the fore bulkhead once more. His expression was cold, seemingly uncaring. “And the dangers?”

   “The danger comes from tissue rejection. There is no guarantee your body will accept the nerve cluster even if it is cloned from your own cells. This can be battled with drug therapy—“

   Ford scoffed a bit, still staring out into space.

   “Big operation and still more drugs…”

   “Possibly, sir.”

   Ford looked back to his CMO, focussing on her dark eyes with his own.

   “You’ve got my consent, Doc. This thing scares the hell out of me. Every time something happens on this ship, I feel like I have to fight just to keep breathing. That’s gonna lead to more trouble if I keep it up. We’ll do this transplant…and I want you handling the procedure.”

   Keller blinked. It was surprising to find out someone you barely knew trusted you with their very life… She swallowed before answering. “I’d be honored, Captain.”

   The boson’s whistle of the ship’s address rang out through the semi-darkened sickbay. “Captain, we’re passing the outer marker of Starbase 23’s approach.”

   
   
   
   
   Ford stood, feeling instantly the offbeat rhythm of the ship’s jury-rigged warp drivers. They were limping home, partially hobbled at the hands of the Gorn. Their journey from the plasma string region, labeled ‘The Tempest’ by the majority of the crew, had taken over a week to complete. It should have taken a mere two days.

   Ford looked back to the doctor and nodded to her once. He was glad to have her on board this ship. She was a steady woman with some iron nerves. She’d fought the Gorn aboard their own ship and taken care of one of his dearest friends when most doctors would have been at their wit’s end. She’s shown ingenuity in asking for help from Lieutenant Surall and the tactical officer to treat the bacterial strain in Thomas’s blood. Now he was nearly recovered. Chevis could think of no better person to have poking around inside his organs.

   The trip to the bridge was a short one. Ford kept a measured pace in front of the crew, but he walked a little faster than normal. The ship’s engines were rigged from one end of the nacelles to the other to maintain warp speed. They were running on pride alone. Ford could have just ordered his ship to fly out of the plasma region and wait at its edge for a space tow. But after some hours of consideration, Chevy found he couldn’t bring himself to pass that particular order. He’d chanced that the ship could limp home under her own power. They’d all come this far without Fleet assistance.

   The effect had been positive on ship’s moral. They were more confident that nothing could bring them down. The rhythm among the enlisted was that they were tough as nails and that their command crew would stop at nothing to get them all home. Ford was rather proud of that opinion.

   The doors parted before the captain as he stepped from the lift and onto the bridge. Two men were working forward just beneath the main viewer, replacing the last of the blood stained carpet which bore the final marks of their fight with the Gorn boarding party. The only sign left of that struggle was the small details of chipped console borders, scratches on the railing and bulkheads and the rough texture to some of the equipment which had been fixed. All of this just gave the main bridge more of a lived-in character. She was only six years old, but this ship had lived a life!

   Chevy made his way to the center seat, glancing at his First Officer who sat in the chair just right of the conn. Commander Benjamin Thomas, the towering hulk that he was, slunk in his blue seat and watched the star streaks on the main screen tiredly. He had been on restricted bridge duty for a couple of days now. Chevy caught his eye and grinned at him. Ben returned the smile, though his was less sincere. He was still battling the effects of the Theleron radiation used on him to cure his affliction.

   “Range from Twenty-Three?”

   “Four A.U.’s, Cap’n.” Came the response from helm. Lieutenant Johnathan Bronstien turned half way out of his seat next to ops to look at Ford. “We could go the rest of the way on impulse.”

   Ford considered it. It might be safer, but it was only a few more minutes of flight. They’d already traveled so many lightyears…

   “Steady as she goes, helmsman.”

   Johnathan smiled back and returned to his piloting. Beside him, Lieutenant Commander Ronald Davenport was also smiling a private little grin. He’d known the captain well enough to guess what the answer would have been. They were coming home under their own power. And they would limp all the way in at their best speed.

“Pre-approach scan, science officer.” Thomas called off with a hoarse voice.

   Lieutenant Surall bent over her station and met the rising scanner head that came up from her console. Blue light etched shapes across her face. “Two starships docked to the station outer ring. Both Okinawa-Class. They are the Saipan and the Rogers. One ship in waiting orbit ten thousand kilometers out, Miranda-Class. The USS Comanche. Seven assorted civilian vessels under Federation banner. One Klingon trade vessel docked on the inner ring. No other ships within short range scan.”

   “Entering inner marker range, Skipper.” Bronstien reported. There was a noticeable level of relief within the lieutenant’s voice. Most of the bridge hands likely shared it.

   “Reduce to one-quarter impulse.” Ford returned. At the press of the appropriate controls, the tenor of the engines changed to a more friendly pitch and the unfamiliar oscillations in the deck abated. Endeavour had got them here. “Comm, hail the station and request approach clearance.”

   On the port-aft side of the bridge, Lieutenant Noah Smith keyed open the general ship’s hail and plugged a command mic into his ear. “Starbase 23, this is the USS Endeavour. Request approach clearance and permission to dock, over.”

   The response came over the main speaker above. It was not the pleasant sounding voice of an experienced communications officer, but rather the scratchy voice of the commanding officer of the installation, Commodore Robert Shiloah. “Permission granted to approach. Follow standard protocol and lay off the station at ten thousand klicks. Once secure, begin powerdown and rig for towing to Repair Station Six. Captain Ford is to beam over immediately after his ship is secure.”

   The channel clicked as the signal terminated from the outpost. Quiet reigned on the bridge as officers looked back and forth between themselves. The commodore had been, without a doubt, curt…

   “Cheery fellow.” Bronstien commented from the helm, his being the first voice heard after the hail. A few chuckles broke out as the helmsman continued to bring them closer to the base. The station was just now coming into view on the main screen. It was a large, round monster with two concentric rings of docking berths encircling the whole armor plated thing.

   “He was quick to get on the horn with us. Didn’t even let his comm officer answer the hail.” Thomas said tentatively, looking at his friend to gauge his thoughts on the commodore’s motives. Ford looked back at him with an expression that said he’d rather arm wrestle a Klingon than go meet with the commander of that base.

   “Yeah. Like he was waiting on us… He doesn’t want us to dock…and he isn’t doing the customary meeting and ship inspection routine. He’s in a hurry.”

   “Not to mention a bad mood, by the sound of it.” Thomas voiced further.

   “Yeah…” Ford gave a shrug and stood from the conn. Aggravated bosses came with the territory of starship command. The captain moved to stand between the helm and ops consoles, watching the station enlarge and grow in detail. It was a rough skinned, ugly thing. Sarcasm oiled his words as he spoke aloud to himself. “Maybe he’s just having a bad day…”
'It's a lot of hard work being a mean bastard...' --Captain Eric Finlander, CO USS Bedford (The Bedford Incident)

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #1 on: February 01, 2007, 06:20:26 pm »

   
   
   
   
   CH. 2
   
   
   
   
   Commodore Shiloah wasn’t anywhere near the transporter room of Starbase 23 when Captain Ford beamed over. Chevis didn’t miss the slight in respect. He’d paused a moment, standing there in the alcove of the transporter, resisting the urge to gape. Even if his commander was aggravated with him, he should have been formally met once he’d beamed over. The station’s exec wasn’t even present to guide him.

   Ford’s eyes had sought those of the transporter chief, but the noncom had looked away the entire time. Was the man embarrassed at his CO’s behavior, or was it something directed at Ford? Without waiting to be welcomed aboard, the captain had stalked out of the room and marched down the corridor to the closest turbolift.

Now that he was in the commodore’s office on the operations deck, Ford was quite angry. The officers running the control room behind him had all averted their gaze. This told him that the commodore did not like Ford, and he probably complained openly about him in front of his men. Ford was used to not being well received. It didn’t bother him. But he at least liked to know why people didn’t like him.

“Reporting as ordered…” Ford told the blonde headed man who stood facing away from him behind his standard issue desk. The captain held off before adding, “…sir.”
Commodore turned around, the look on his weathered face not one a person could call friendly. He shot Chevis a look that made his blood grow hot. “Just what the hell is it you think you’re doing out there, Captain Ford?”

Ford stared with a stony face back at the man for a time. He was not sure how to take this. Where was this man’s animosity coming from? They had never even met before… He refrained from swallowing, looking the elder man right in the eye as he responded. “My job, sir.”

Ford remained standing perfectly in place and at attention before his superior officer. He didn’t know what he’d done to warrant this man’s wrath, but he’d be damned if he was going to allow his own anger to give the commodore something else to hate. He’d remain professional if it killed him.

“Your job?” Shiloah turned totally toward Chevis. He leaned down on his faux wood desk with clenched fists. “Since when is it your job to create interstellar incidents? You’ve nearly started two wars!”

Ford’s brows drew together in confusion. Intuition dawned on where this was going just as the commodore began again. “The incident concerning the Gorn is bad enough. Botching a rescue mission and getting into a shooting battle with one of their flagships shows you have a gross lack of judgement concerning how to carry out your sworn duties. And, even before this blunder, you botched the retrieval of Klingon nationals from a planet that interned them. You allowed the situation to degenerate into another shooting match, stole from the Ya’wenn, invaded their territorial lands, allowed a Klingon ship to invade our borders and then also encroach on Ya’wenn soil, and as a parting gift, assaulted a civilian loading platform! The Ya’wenn have retaliated against Starfleet! Two days ago, they destroyed the USS Rutledge while she was on patrol near the Klingon border! There were no survivors!”

Ford’s anger at this bellowing goof of a man morphed into cold hate aimed at Over Warden Jarn for the useless slaughter of Starfleet crewmen. In his unmanaged anger toward Ford, he’d attacked, or compelled his people to attack, a totally uninvolved starship out doing her duty. The Rutledge had been an old frigate of the type Ford’s old Gibbons had been. She was out dated, used for light duty and patrol activities along the Neutral Zone. Ford felt feint as his heart fell out of sync. He cursed not having brought his meds with him. Not that he’d have taken a pill in front of this bastard.

“My actions and decisions in the Ya’wenn territories—“

“Have no damned defense, Captain!” Shiloah spat the final word out as though it was revolting he should grant Ford the title. “Combined with your officer’s reports of flagrant disregard for procedure and decorum aboard a Starfleet ship, I would very much like to have you leave this compartment as a civilian! I have reports of your upper officers cursing like old Earth sailors and having no respect what-so-ever for protocol. They drink alcohol in heavy amounts and fraternize with the enlisted men, going so far as to gamble in games of chance---“

Ford nearly snarled.

“You’ve gone through my ship’s personal log entries!”

“You’re damn right, Captain. As a commodore—“

“You still don’t have the clearance to review the personal entries of me or my men. Only an admiral—“ Ford stepped in on the intolerable man. He felt the urgent need to strangle him, but kept his hands at his sides. He trembled with anger, and felt coldness seep into his extremities.

“Immaterial, Captain Ford.” The commodore turned away from him as though he were barely worth the time to speak to him. He sat slowly and measuredly into his regulation blue chair.  “We’re discussing your conduct, and that of the men under your command. Your actions have led to wanton bloodshed and has tarnished the relations of the Federation with two of its neighbors. I’ve considered your petition to formally protest the Gorn captain’s actions and found it without merit. You invaded their ship and refused to yield it back to them when they came for it—“

“We had no idea whether leaving that ship would lead to their eggs dying!”

Shiloah pounded his flimsy desktop and glowered beneath bushy eyebrows at the captain. “Exactly my point, Mister Ford! You didn’t know! And your bad decisions led to the deaths of many of your crew, not counting those aboard the Rutledge! Were it in my hands, I’d relieve you of command and turn Endeavour over to a more capable commanding officer.”

Ford’s face went cold. He forced a thin smile of vehemence onto his mouth.

“That’s not your decision to make.”

Shiloah shot a look back at Ford. He squinted for some reason. The captain did not know why.

“No, only the C in C and Chief of Starfleet Operations can select the CO’s for the Excelsior program. How you got there is quite beyond me. I plan to discuss your future very intently with Admiral Sharp today and find out just how you got in under his sensors. I find it hard to believe he would willingly emplace a man of your poor capabilities as commander of a moon shuttle, let alone a flagship. Rest assured, your time in the center seat is limited…”

Ford felt the world shift about him. He wasn’t sure why. He’d been holding his left arm stiffly straight for some time now, and only then became aware of it. He wanted to shout, more than he’d ever wanted to in his life. This man was assaulting him for decisions he’d made as captain. The commodore hadn’t been out there in space to witness any of those actions. Shiloah dared to question how he performed his duty? Based on what?

Ford’s heart raced. Pressure mounted in his chest and his legs felt like spaghetti. He needed to sit for a while, but the commodore’s office didn’t even have a visitor’s chair in it. He dragged breath after breath into lungs that seemed to rebel against him. This man had no right to berate him for his actions out in the field…




Commodore Shiloah blinked when all at once Ford’s face drained of color and his lips turned purple. The captain lurched forward. What the hell was happening to the man?
“What’s wrong with you, Captain?”

Then, all at once, Ford crumpled. He hit the carpeted deck with an adamantine thud.

Bob Shiloah stood like a shot and looked down on the maroon clad mass on the deck and gaped in shock. His hand jerked toward the desk intercom. “Medical emergency, Operations deck! Medical team to Commodore’s Office!”







Commander Thomas looked at the coverall-wearing engineer with a slight amount of shock. “You’re doin’ what?” He exclaimed.

“I’m under orders to begin retrofitting your bridge compartment to install a Strategic Command Console. We’ll be removing the aft bulkhead and moving the after sensor station to build a compartment for it.” Replied the confused looking little man. His hands were burdened with two heavy cases as though he’d meant to begin this job even before the ship reached the repair dock she was bound for. Thomas stopped him with a meaty hand.

“Hold up there, Hoss. I haven’t received any such orders concerning mods to the bridge. Or anywhere else on this ship.”

The tech cocked his head, still confused.

“The orders have been in our division for almost a week. Commodore Shiloah is having Endeavour refitted into his sector command ship for her new CO. That’s quite an honor.”

Ben Thomas refrained from grabbing the tech up by the front of his coverall.

“Captain Ford is skipper of Endeavour!”

“I’d heard he was being replaced… By Captain Ramses…”

Ben’s jaw jutted. Davenport’s hands quickly found purchase on the XO’s shoulders and slowly pulled him back before the tech got hurt. The chief of ops looked the little man in the eye. “Carry on, Specialist.”

Thomas turned around to glare down at Ronald. He was seething. His still bloodshot eyes narrowed as things started to sink in on him. Commodore Shiloah was pulling the rug out from under his friend. He was probably over there right now, giving Chevy the riot act over whatever displeased him. And then, he’d take Ford’s ship from him. Thomas didn’t know all the details, but he figured he knew enough.

“XO!” Came a shriek from the comm station. Smith was looking over at Thomas as though he’d been stabbed in the chest. “Word from the station! The Captain’s been rushed to sickbay! He’s had a heart attack!”

Thomas pulled free of Davenport with a jerk of a wide shoulder and made for the aft lifts. Anger exploded and stormed in his mind. “Have Doc Keller meet me in transporter room one! Ron, you have the bridge.”
'It's a lot of hard work being a mean bastard...' --Captain Eric Finlander, CO USS Bedford (The Bedford Incident)

'Jaken...are you pretending to be dead?' --Lord Sesshomaru, Inuyasha.

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #2 on: February 01, 2007, 06:26:24 pm »




CH. 3





“You don’t have clearance to go in there!”

Commander Ben Thomas ascended the final steps to Commodore Shiloah’s office, ignoring the attempts of the ensign who was trying to halt him. He kept eyes peeled for armed resistance, but these men had yet to grab up a weapon. They should have.

Ben found the commodore at his cheap little desk, looking out over the depths of space. He didn’t seem too overly affected that he’d just seen a man fall to the deck here in this very room not fifteen minutes prior. Ben doubted the man was heartbroke over it. He entered the office, then turned to key the entry panel lock. The door buzzed shut, leaving the worried ensign gawking on the other side of the glass.

Thomas centered his black, burning eyes on the man who was turning to see him for the first time. He stalked up to the slightly upraised platform the desk sat upon. “Basking in the defeat of someone you think is beneath ya’?”

“How’d you get in here?”

“Your security sucks!”

With his right hand, Ben reached across to his left and tore the small desk up from its mounting and hurled it across the office. With his left, he grabbed the shorter commodore from his seat and picked him up by his jacket. He slugged the greying officer full force in the gut, driving spit and wind from him.

Thomas spun the commodore around and hurled him face first into that transparent aluminum window he’d been gazing out of. The window vibrated in its frame with the impact and Commodore Shiloah fell bleeding to the floor.

“Ford fights like hell to get us all out of that storm alive and you treat him like a f*ckin’ dog! I’m gonna rip yer f*ckin’ head off, you pencil neck little sh*t!”

“Security!” Gasped the commodore just before Ben’s size fourteen boot landed in his stomach.

Ben bent and began to deliver a repetitious series of left-hand strikes to the right temple of the bleeding officer. The XO could hear the whir of the emergency alarm in operations behind him. He counted off the seconds, timing a punch with each one. 1,2,3,4…at seven, he stood and backed away from the inert form on the carpet. The doors behind parted and Thomas raised blood streaked hands.

“Don’t move!” Shouted trained security men in skirmish armor, brandishing type two pistols. They surrounded him, three men in front, two to the rear. One man bent to check Shiloah’s vitals. Ben smiled back at them with crazed glee.

“Hey, I’m all done.”









Author's Note: I rewrote this scene several times before finally deciding on how it should be done. In some drafts, I went a less violent way. Others I had the Commodore fight back. I decided on this final draft to show Thomas's root violence and the fact that sometimes...he doesn't think. At all. This is touched on some more later on.

I almost didn't include the scene at all because it is an obviously stupid thing for any officer, or grown man in general, to do. But violent crimes are committed everywhere all the time...and for as little good reason... This is just an example of one.
'It's a lot of hard work being a mean bastard...' --Captain Eric Finlander, CO USS Bedford (The Bedford Incident)

'Jaken...are you pretending to be dead?' --Lord Sesshomaru, Inuyasha.

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #3 on: February 01, 2007, 06:32:02 pm »





CH. 4





The next day…

The honor guard of seven Starfleet security personnel, each decked out in full skirmish armor and with pistols at the ready held across their breast, stood at rigid attention as the shuttle came to rest on Starbase 23’s main hanger deck. The loading door of the long vessel reeled down to touch the floor and prompted a uniformed CPO to sound off his boson’s whistle. All this was done to honor the man emerging from the shuttlecraft.

Admiral Jonathan K. Sharp II quickly strode down the lowered ramp and saluted the honor guard. With a stern eye, he looked every one of them over. They were a young collection of men and women. Fine officers and enlisted likely. But this display was wasted. He was not in the mood for pageantry. His eyes narrowed when they came upon Commander Elton Barrows, the station’s executive officer. The tall, slim individual stepped forward and offered the admiral his hand. Sharp shook it blandly.

“Welcome to Starbase 23, Admiral.”

“Dismiss the squad, Commander. I don’t have time for this.”

Barrows stammered in surprise. He should have guessed the admiral’s mood. He knew why Sharp was here. At last, he turned on the honor guard and gave them the hand signal to leave. They turned and filed out, leading the two higher officers from the hanger bay.

“Take me to the infirmary, Commander.”

“Aye, aye, sir.”




The infirmary section of the huge base station was no larger than the sickbay of any good size starship. Admiral Sharp felt the compulsion to remain rather quiet as he trod across the blue carpet to the intensive care ward. He hated sickbays, and always had. They were where a commander went when things had gone badly. They represented some kind of failure. Failure to overcome, failure to foresee or failure to come out on top…

Jon entered through twin transparent doors and forced himself to remain calm as he looked upon his friend. Captain Chevis Ford lay inert on the biobed closest to the center of the compartment. An array of diagnostic screens flanked him on three sides near his head. Each showed some graphical representation of his cardiovascular system. A myriad of readouts depicted various levels of cardiatric response.

Sharp was no doctor, but he knew that information presented in red was not good. His lips thinned down into an angry line. He closed in on the bio table.
One doctor among the med team attending the captain took note of the flag officer and turned to greet him. She was a slim red head whom he recognized from Endeavour’s personnel files. “Doctor Keller, I presume?” He greeted in a low, melodious voice.

“Indeed I am, Admiral. I can’t say I’ve had the pleasure…”

“Admiral Sharp.”

She looked him over. He was tall and chiseled, with a wide boned face and large, almond shaped eyes. His hair had thinned over the years, turning grey at the temples. He no longer sported a beard. It was too troublesome to mess with, and really just showed off more grey hair. Muscularly, he was a very strapped man, and well over six feet in height. His mocha colored skin showed few lines for all of his age, though, and he remained highly active despite all his time behind a desk.

“Sharp. Yes, you’re a personal friend of the Captain.”

“He served as my navigator and Number One for two decades. We’re reasonably acquainted.”

“Good. He can use some friends, I’m sure.”

“What’s his current condition, Doctor?”

Keller drew a breath as she looked back the captain’s way. The bald headed man lay face up, mouth parted as he drew breath steadily in sleep. Dark circles shown under his eyes. Keller looked back. “He’s stable, so far as it goes. His cardio-nervous cluster is severely damaged by the Varness Syndrome. His attack was stress induced. The heart simply could not function with the faulty input being transmitted through the nerves. I have him on total life support and am preparing to collect the genetic material necessary to begin cloning of replacement nerves for him.”

“That’s a very invasive series of operations, Miss Keller. Has he consented to this?”

“We actually discussed the entire procedure only a hour prior to his episode. He gave it and myself his utmost confidence. I see it as only proper to proceed as he saw fit.”
Jon simply nodded. “Very well, Doctor. You said his attack was stress induced. What was the direct cause?”

Andrea Keller seemed to consider how to best answer that question. Sharp found that telling in and of itself. “A number of factors could have led to it, Admiral. Worry over his condition, and the up coming procedure to correct it. Our harrowing journey through the plasma region, certainly… Plus mitigating factors dealing with…Starfleet chain of command…”

“Don’t mince words with me, Doctor. Say what you mean.”

Sharp’s presence was very domineering to say the least. When he spoke, you listened.

“I’m told he and the commodore argued in the commodore’s office immediately after the captain’s arrival here. The commodore looks to replace Captain Ford, and has gone so far as to order Captain Hiruul Ramses of the Comanche to come to Starbase 23 to be ready for transfer. Work is already underway to covert Endeavour into a sector command vessel. The rumor mill here already knows Captain Ford is on his way out. Shiloah makes no secret of his dislike for how our captain conducts ship affairs.”

“And what is your opinion of your captain?”

Andrea stopped in her verbal tracks.

“He’s unorthodox, but level headed and fair. He takes care of his men and risks all for them.”

“You like him?”

“I suppose so.”

Sharp seemed to think her words over and decide how best to proceed from there. He looked over his friend again, stepping around Keller to get closer to his bed. He squeezed Ford’s shoulder, turned, and left the intensive care ward. He did not go far, though, turning left for the recovery room.





Commodore Robert Shiloah looked up from the data pad in his hand when the doors to the recovery section parted. He’d thought that Admiral Sharp would come directly here upon arriving at Starbase, but he been very surprised to watch the man walk briskly past his door and go into the room housing Ford. Now, after some delay, Sharp was finally coming to see him.

Bob’s eyes were less swollen than they had been the day previous, after his senseless beating at the hands of the Endeavour exec. He forced a small smile for the admiral. It was not returned.

“What’s going on around here, Bob?” Jon Sharp asked, stopping at the foot of Shiloah’s biobed.

“That damn Ford has brought me a load of misery, Admiral. That’s what.”

“I hear his Number One broke your jaw, fractured your skull and four teeth.”

“And broke two ribs.” Robert looked uncertainly at the admiral before him. He’d expected Sharp to be different… to come in stating how he’d make sure Thomas and his captain were severely punished for their actions and handled correctly. He had the feeling this was not going to pan out… “I have that maniac cooling his heels in my brig till I can attend his formal court martial. That bastard is going to a penal colony on Boratis for this!”

“Who told you to begin selecting replacements for Endeavour’s CO billet?”

Shiloah caught with his next words in his throat. He’d been hoping to broach the subject to Sharp first, but he’d already been told. Some one on this station was far too loose lipped… “I’ve been reviewing officer’s logs from Endeavour… I was going to discuss Ford with you yesterday, before the attack… That ship is being grossly mishandled, and her operations are a laughing stock. I feel it to be in the Fleet’s best interests to relieve Ford of command and replace him with some one more…level headed.”

“Captain Ford was my own personal choice for command of Endeavour. Ben Thomas was his pick for executive officer. Both served aboard my second command.” The admiral did not voice that he believed himself to be a good judge of character. Shiloah was beginning to wonder what kind of battle he was about to find himself fighting. “And you didn’t wait to speak with me before getting the ball rolling on replacing Ford, did you, Commodore?”

Shiloah’s face tightened.

“Ford’s methods are a joke, Admiral! He has used the position given him to gallivant around the stars as though his ship and the areas we send him were his own personal playgrounds! The fact that I’m laying in this bed is testament to the way he runs his ship!”

Sharp remained unmoved.

“Commodore, the fact is that you had no authority to relieve or replace any member of the Endeavour crew. I’m going to personally review your records and the security images from your office on both incidents. Then I’m going to decide what steps are to be taken.”

Bob practically hopped out of his bed and pointed an accusatory finger at Sharp.

“Do you mean to imply that you would let these men off! One is guilty of assault and attempted murder! The other is at best guilty of being a questionable commanding officer, and at worst a murderer and war-monger!”

“That’s enough, Commodore!” Sharp came around the side of the biobed and leaned in close to the man within it. “Ford’s command technique and methods are up to my perusal and mine alone. There will be no transfer. Send the Comanche back out on her designated patrol route.” Sharp straightened and made ready to leave the room. He paused by the door, though, a ghost of a smile flashing upon his face. “And, Bob… If Commander Thomas had intended to murder you…You’d have been murdered. He doesn’t attempt such things. Good evening.”







“Admiral on the bridge!”

Commander Davenport swung the conn around at the sound of Smith’s voice. He was half way through the motion of standing when Sharp raised a hand to halt him. Sharp offered a tight grin.

“As you were, Ladies and Gentlemen.”

With the easy motions of a man very accustomed to maneuvering about on the deck of a bridge, Sharp came down the trio of steps to the command center. He spared the dismantled section of bulkhead behind the tactical console a glance as he came to a rest beside the center seat. “Renovations, Commander Davenport?”

“Commodore Shiloah’s plans to spruce up the bridge.” Ronald jibbed back. 

Shard refrained from further comment, noticing that they now had the ill-hidden attention of Starbase 23’s yard birds. “Commander, I need you in the ready room.”
Ron nodded his ascent, motioning for Bronstien to replace him at the conn. The two of them took their leave of the bridge and silently made for the aft compartment. Once safely within the confines of the captain’s office, Sharp waved a hand to the guest seat as he commandeered Ford’s synthetic leather chair.

“We have a few problems here at 23, Ronald.”

Davenport was in complete agreement.

“Yes we do, Admiral.”

Sharp looked up at the half-finished Excelsior-Class model on the end table near the far couch. He sighed. Reviewing the computer records and watching the security video from the station had left him in uneasy straights. “Firstly, Ford’s commission is not in danger here. But Shiloah is fully within his capacity to govern over this ship and make it his sector command vessel. And he has a grudge against Ford. This will lead to problems unless I either reassign Endeavour to another sector…or reassign Shiloah to another station. Neither of these instances are going to fly with the C in C. He isn’t concerned with inter-personal turbulence among his staff. They’re going to have to work with each other, and Shiloah is going to make sure that he commands this sector from this ship.”

Ron nodded his understanding and stayed quiet, waiting for the other shoe to drop.

“Commander Thomas’s situation, on the other hand, is a totally different problem.” The admiral went on. He centered a serious gaze on the commander. “You should have stopped him from leaving this ship.”

Ron looked to the desk with regret on his face.

“Well… I had hoped that he was just going to see about the captain… And I’d figured the Commodore’s security would have been better. I mean, how did he get all the way to the man’s office?”

Sharp hid a small smile. Thomas might have made it all the way there despite the station’s security, even if they had tried to halt him. But this situation held no humor to it. He’d attacked a junior flag officer with full witnesses without cause. He’d allowed his anger to get the better of him. It had led him into Shiloah’s office and compelled him to commits acts that now had him in the can.

“I’m glad Chevy is out cold.” Jonathan told Davenport. “Were he awake, he’d kill them both. I’ve seen the video evidence against Benjamin. He’s guilty of assault on a superior officer. He’ll get prison time.”

Ronald fidgeted uncomfortably.

“Thomas went through a lot during our time in the plasma field. For over a week, we expected the XO to die of his ailment. He spent the time during our trip back from the Tempest recuperating. He probably pushed himself too hard.”

“Stress doesn’t give him leave to do what he did.”

“I realize that, Admiral. But all that riding on him, and all that the captain did to get the ship out of there, and also get the shuttle crew back… Going through that and then having this commodore piss all over the captain. And try to strip his command from him. Ben snapped.”

Sharp took this inside in silence. While this may explain why Thomas would just go over there and beat an officer down, it did not justify it. Nor did it help to rectify the fallout of what he’d done. Suddenly he looked up, sidling the chief of ops with a questioning look.

“The ‘Tempest’?”

Ron smiled a bit.

“What the enlisted hands started calling the plasma storm region.”

The admiral grunted in reply and went back to his own thoughts. There was no good way to handle any of the problems facing him today. Sharp’s silent repose was broken by the intercom’s whistle.

“Admiral Sharp,” came Lieutenant Smith’s voice from overhead. “Incoming hail from the Comanche.”

The admiral keyed the deck computer on and waited for the monitor to flip open. The angular, light brown-skinned face of Captain Hiruul Ramses appeared with what Sharp knew was his customary, cocky grin. The man always seemed to be in the best mood. He centered his shining eye on Jon and raised his left brow in nearly Vulcan style. “Admiral Sharp, good to see you again,” he greeted.

“Hiruul. What’s on your mind?”

The ethnic Egyptian became semi-serious and leaned in toward his own office comm.

“Just wanted you to know I only accepted Commodore Shiloah’s offer to come to 23 so my crew could get some leave time. We’ve been on patrol for five months. I never intended to accept command of Endeavour.”

Jonathan edged close to the desk, suddenly interested.

“You knew he wanted to transfer Ford?”

Ramses nodded, an almost imperceptible movement.

“He said the former skipper was on his way out and hinted to see if I was interested. I just played along for the leave time. I’m quite happy here on the Comanche, as I’m sure the commodore is very well aware…”

Sharp leaned all the way back in his chair and smiled darkly.

“Thank you, Captain. Take your ship to New Plymouth colony after you patrol the Ya’wenn border zone. Get a week worth of leave on me. I’ll file the orders tonight to make it official. Sharp out.”

The gazes of both officers met as the subspace signal ended. Captain Ramses in all his wit had just given them a clue as to how long Shiloah had been playing this game. His aggravation with Ford wasn’t just over Starfleet policy or command capacity. Shiloah wanted Endeavour as his command ship, and he was making sure he was going to get her. He’d known Hiruul wouldn’t take up the center seat. With Ford decommissioned, Shiloah would have ‘no other choice’ but to command the ship personally. He’d just been hoping that Sharp would take his side against Ford and make it all official. A dirty scheme if it were all true.

“If this is what it looks like,” Davenport murmured. “Then Shiloah deserved a good beatin’.”

“Maybe. But Shiloah will push this as far as he can. And he’ll make Ford’s command a living hell for him. I don’t know how much I can help with any of this… Chevy may have to weather it out.” Resolution solidified Sharp’s expression. “But I can damn sure take the commodore to task for his underhanded dealings.”
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #4 on: February 01, 2007, 06:35:34 pm »







CH. 5





Later that day…

“He opened fire on a civilian loading dock! Who knows how many he killed!”

Sharp retorted in complete calm. He’d usurped the commodore of his office chair. Shiloah was now standing just where Ford had been when he’d had his attack. “And in so doing, delayed the armament of the ships which were later hunting Endeavour. Had they come upon him before the Klingons hauled the ship to a safe harbor, Endeavour would have been destroyed.”

“He couldn’t have known all that at the time. And his ship wouldn’t have been crippled had he not engaged in a needless battle with the Gorn, a direct result of his bad command decisions!”

Sharp did not respond immediately. He chose merely to look in stony silence at the round-bodied commodore for a period of time. He did not intend to sit here arguing with this man. He had been in the Fleet for far too long to play games such as this. Shiloah would follow his directives one way or the other.

“I’m not debating the issue with you, Bob. Ford’s commission is not in question. He is Endeavour’s skipper. End of discussion. You’re just going to have to find a way of working with him. I am not, however, going to over look any further attempts to sabotage his command.”

“Sabotage—“ Shiloah looked stunned. Perhaps he was merely surprised Sharp had discovered what he’d tried to do. Sharp went on.

“This is the pattern I’ve been able to uncover, Commodore: You reviewed the complete log entries submitted by the Endeavour as she exited the plasma phenomena. You decided Ford’s records gave you enough lee to convince me of the need to relieve him of his command. You want Endeavour as your flagship in this sector, rather than the two frigates assigned to Starbase. This is acceptable and fully within your capacity as sector commander, save that Ford isn’t a commander who’ll bow gracefully to you. You order Comanche here, hinting that Ford is about to be relieved. You’re relatively sure Ramses won’t accept the commission, but even if he does, you believe you’ll get along with him better than Ford, because he observes normal decorum aboard ship. All that’s left is presenting Endeavour’s circumstances to me and compelling me to give you the high level authority to assign a new CO. Except that you don’t know that a weekly report is made to my office, submitted by each Excelsior in the field.

“I take a personal interest in their operations, and know quite well what Ford has been doing. I also know what to expect when I see those reports. I assigned Ford command of Endeavour because he does not conform to the general mold of a Starfleet captain. His ideas represent a fresh perspective on how to handle the changing problems of our civilization. He’s not the trail blazer Kirk was, nor is he the stodgy, rule quoting disciplinarian that some are…” Sharp let the last hang on the air for a moment. “He is a crew- minded commander whose crew affectionately label ‘skipper’. He’s the one I know I can hand a near impossible mission and rely on him to accomplish it and bring his ship back home in one piece…just as he did in the Tempest Region this last month.”

Shiloah dropped the shocked look after a moment of Sharp’s monologue. He knew he’d been defeated. The admiral wasn’t sure how much had been correct in his theory about the commodore’s intentions, but he’d been close. He sat there, looking in silence at the sector commander, wondering if there was something more he should know. Jon’s old ‘sixth sense’ was chirping out a warning, and about what he had no idea.

“Well, then, Admiral…” Robert began, voice down an octave along with his mood. “Since we know where you stand on the command structure of Endeavour, I’ll just turn my attention to the matter of bringing my attacker to justice. Unless you intend to ignore his actions as well.”

“I’ll ignore nothing, Commodore. I will be officiating at Commander Thomas’s Court-Martial. His attack on your person was unjust.” Sharp stopped. That Sixth Sense was niggling at the back of his mind, much more strongly. He’d learned years ago to make us of its clues. “For now, he’ll cool his heels in the brig and undergo psychiatric examination—“

“Psyche eval!” Shiloah advanced in anger, jabbing that finger at Sharp again. “You have got to be joking! He was totally within what serves for his right mind when he barged in here and attacked me! His record is one long list of battery and beatings! Only now he’s switched to targeting line officers!”

“Shut up, Bob.” The admiral stood aloft from his captured seat and came to stand within a foot of the junior flag officer. “When I’m satisfied that there was no mental fatigue guiding the commander’s actions, then the trial will go forward. Till then, and during the trial, you’ll disassociate yourself from the proceedings. You’ll have nothing to do with it beyond giving your testimony before the board. Understood.”

Hate and anger seethed behind the commodore’s grey eyes. But he nodded.

Saying nothing more, Admiral Sharp stepped past Shiloah and exited the office.




Later…

Commander Ben Thomas swung his feet to the deck and stood at attention when Admiral Sharp rounded the corner to stand before the entry of his cell. Sharp’s jacket front lay open, a sign of tiredness from the long hours he was pulling. Thomas had heard the admiral had been here for three days now. It was one of the few details given him during his imprisonment down here in the bowels of this station. If he had been here that long and was only now coming down here to bawl him out, then Sharp was busy indeed.

Before the senior officer could speak, Ben took a step closer to the brig force field.

“How’s Chevy?”

Sharp cocked an eyebrow.

“He’ll be fine. He managed through the harvesting procedure very well and remains on life support while the new nervous cluster is being cloned.”

“He’s on life support? I thought it was just a heart attack.”

The admiral’s countenance softened a touch. All Ben wanted to hear about was the fate of his friend. “Yes… Doctor Keller says that the nerves are so deteriorated that the safest method of keeping him is to put his heart on full, mechanical support. That also means keeping him unconscious… A man with Chevy’s mentality isn’t going to want to be awake for that…”

“No…” Thomas sighed out, “No he wouldn’t. Now you’d like to know what the f*ck I was thinkin’ when I stomped into Shiloah’s office.”

“I was interested to know.”

“Nothin’. I wasn’t thinking a damn thing, Admiral.”

Sharp looked ready to deck the Endeavour exec.

“You’re damn right you weren’t.”

Ben slouched, tired as he had ever been. He stumbled a bit, still feeling the effects of the radiation he’d taken. He resorted to sitting on the bed and looked back to Sharp. “I was angry over what was going on. That yard dick told he heard Chev was being replaced by Ramses. They were setting the ship up to be the commodore’s ride. And then I hear the cap’n’s had a heart attack… All I could think was that smug bastard had gave it to him. Chevy was havin’ a hard time with his syndrome, I knew that. But he was managing it. Then, out of the blue, wham!

“We get all the hard jobs, that’s what we’re out there for…” Ben went on, lost in the telling. “We clean up the big messes, fight out the hard fights. We might not have made it out of that region. We lost our warp drive to a bunch of guys the Federation’s been trying to make friends with, get hunted by some ass-backward rejects from a prison planet, and nearly lose a bunch of officers just trying to find a way out of that damn place. And Chevy was up on his feet seeing that everything came together. Making sure the ship made it home and his people kept her going. He fought off four enemy ships with a hobbled vessel. And this starbase runnin’ prick pisses on him…on all of us…trying to take away what Chevy earned. I wanted to kill his ass!”

Sharp took his customary time in making his response. He stood gazing down at the commander, measuring as he studied the younger man. “There’s very little I can do for you at this point…you understand that, don’t you?”

“Yeah…”

“Commodore Shiloah has an ax to grind, and he’s going to lean on you as much as he can. He can’t sit on the board of inquiry, but he’ll use all his influence to make sure you remain in confinement for so long as he can manage. I won’t be able to convince him to go easy on you, and I won’t likely be able to get you any kind of leniency from the court. You’ll serve time. On the hardest labor planet they can find for you.”

Thomas made an expansive motion, one that told he’d given up hope, but not a shrug.

“My own mistake, Admiral. In hind-sight… If I had known that f*ck hadn’t given Chevy the heart attack… I’d still beat his ass down for pissin’ on my friend. I just would’a waited till I found him on leave some where…and finished the job.”

Sharp cast upon him a baleful glare, his mouth drooping into and angry scowl.

“Is Shiloah right about you, Mister Thomas? Are you just an animal?”

Ben looked to the steel grey deck, as though examining himself from afar. He suddenly seemed very small sitting in the middle of the small, pastel adorned brig chamber on its lone rack. He looked back up, oblivious to the guards standing at the security post behind Sharp. His eyes glistened with the strain of the past weeks and the knowledge that his moment of thoughtless brutality had ruined the rest of his life. He looked Jonathan in the eye.

“Maybe I am.”
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #5 on: February 01, 2007, 06:42:40 pm »





CH. 6





Two days later…

“Status report, Commander?”

Lieutenant Commander Xia Tolin turned away from the dissected bank of EPS converters with an expression that said she was ready to put the diagnostic module in her hand through someone’s face. Her look did not soften much when her eyes befell the smirking visage of the chief of operations. Her antennae were bent at right angles to display her anger.

“Heavy workload?”

Xia looked at him sideways, her shoulders slumping as tiredness took over. Her little blue antennae sagged and her face softened. She’s been at the task of tearing out stressed and blown EPS conduits for five days now, ever since their arrival at starbase. Her crew was mostly off duty at this time of day. She kept on working. Her blue face was smudged with black grease and her maroon coverall was torn where it’d snagged on something in her rigors.

“You have no idea, Commander.” She answered back.

Ron came closer, an easy smile donning his lips.

“I don’t know, I seem to remember something about working on this ship a time or two…” He had, after all, been chief engineer before she had. Only a few months back, in fact. Tolin returned the smile, though hers was less empowered.

“Our warp travel back from the Tempest caused EPS back-flow through nine tenths of the ship’s systems. It would have been much easier on the systems to just call for a tow.”

Ron shrugged slightly.

“Maybe, but the captain wanted to come home under our own power. There’s just something inglorious about being towed home. Especially to the bastard that runs this outpost…”

Tolin was not privy to many of the lurid details involving the attempted change of command. But she nodded in response rather than pry for answers. She was not unfamiliar with over bearing superior officers. Davenport, however, could not be counted among those individuals. He was among the officers that made serving in Starfleet a joy.

“I hear we’re going to be hosting the commodore as his command ship.” She mentioned, turning back to her work amid the strewn components on the deck.

“Yeah, well, I hope not. He’s already tried to oust the captain. Lord knows what it’ll be like with him lording over us 24/7. Or 33/5 in your planet’s time…” Ron ended his comment with a slight grin. At last he found it returned. Xia looked cute with that grease on her blue face.

Tolin half glanced back at the human commander as she knelt by a pile of singed wave-guides. “Do you still want that status report, Commander.” She inquired lightly in her whisperish voice.

The other shrugged.

“Not really. I just came down here to roust you off this deck and get some dinner in you.”

Xia turned the rest of the way back toward him, still crouching over the floor. “I’m a mess.”

“Well, you can shower, engineer. There’s no rush. You’re not even supposed to be on duty.”

Xia shrugged.

“What else is there to do with myself? The commodore has not granted any leave time. I may as well keep on trying to get Endeavour out of here as soon as we can.”
Davenport closed in and knelt down beside her. Xia found the commander’s easy manner intriguing. She was used to the hard, duty minded men of her own species. She was one of only three Andorians presently assigned to the ship. She had never been so separated from her people. But people like Ronald made this less unpleasant. She liked being with him, even more than visiting the other Andorian officer from the science division.

“There’s plenty to do on a ship this size.” Ron offered. “Have you ever tried the ship’s forward lounge?”

Tolin found the idea appealing. The lounge was much visited by enlisted and junior officers alike. The captain had converted one of the four formal dining rooms aboard ship into a place where his crew could shrug off their rank pins for an hour or two and just be people. “I hear it’s pretty relaxed in there,” there was a pseudo-pensive note in her voice.

Ron’s head bobbled.

“Yeah, Whisker’s in a laid back place for a starship lounge. But it isn’t officer’s country, either. I imagine it’s one of the things Commodore Shiloah doesn’t like about us, but we leave rank at the door when we go in there…except for the cap’n himself… He’s always the cap’n.”

Tolin stood along with the ops chief. She took a moment to cast him a coy glance.

“Would your asking me to Whisker’s be what you humans consider a date?”

Davenport’s eyes shot wide.

“Well, no… Not that I’d mind that…”

Xia smiled wickedly and brushed close to him as she passed.

“Give me ten to shower and I’ll see you there.”

Ron watched her go, enjoying the aft profile of her form. He hadn’t meant for her to believe he was asking her out of personal interest. But, then, if given the time, he might have considered it. He was single after all. And she didn’t seem adverse to the idea. With a happy look on his face, the chief of operations strode down the corridor to the nearest turbolift.






Admiral Sharp halted in front of the commodore’s desk and handed over the data PADD he’d been carrying. He noted that Shiloah had not gotten out of his seat when he’d entered, and also wasn’t even toying with the notion of offering him the office’s only seat. He chose to ignore it.

“These are the ship’s I’ve redeployed from Sector 12 and the Artus Reach. You’ll have seven additional vessels to patrol the Ya’wenn sector before Comanche ends her patrol.”

“Good to know we can have so many ships here to clean up the mess, Admiral.” Shiloah’s response was just ambiguous enough to skate by without pointing a finger at Sharp or Ford. But the admiral knew it’d been implied. His jaw worked in veiled anger.

Robert Shiloah looked back at him with a bland expression. Sharp resolved not to rise to the bait. But this man was walking on thin ice. His indiscretion with the powers of his position could get him in quite a lot of hot water should Jon decide to push the matter through. But he probably also realized just how counterproductive formal charges might prove.

“These ships will be under your supervision as sector commander. I’ve found you some seasoned commanders to keep our local shipping safe. The Ya’wenn have less advanced weapon and defensive technology. I don’t expect they’ll persist against our forces once they come against direct opposition. Endeavour’s combat logs showed that they retreat rather than suffer total losses.”

“I’ll bet they do, Admiral.” Shiloah hid a shadow of a smile that crossed his face. “Thank you, sir.”

Sharp eyed him coldly. “Commodore, you’re being just coy enough to avoid angering me, but only just. Don’t push it. Citation for abuse of command authority will look very badly on your record.”

Shiloah continued to hold Sharp’s gaze, but did not push further. Satisfied for the time being, Jonathan turned slowly around to leave. Normally he would brief a sector commander further on the steps being taken to safe guard near by ships during an emergency such as this. But, given the lack of cooperation he was likely to receive from Shiloah, Sharp figured he would just manage the situation himself and let the commodore play catch-up.

Stepping down the series of steps from the commodore’s office, Jon’s gaze fell upon a familiar looking brown skinned man. He fought for a second to recognize him. He wore the white-shouldered uniform of the enlisted corps, and bore the notation on his rank pin as belonging to the Endeavour.

This was Endeavour’s senior yeoman, SPO Devon Gossport. What was Ford’s yeoman doing on Starbase 23? He turned to catch the man who was passing him to enter the command office.

“Mister Gossport. What are you doing here?”

Devon turned and gave the admiral an easy smile, probably the most genuine, good-natured grin Sharp had received in days. “Oh, I’m sorry, sir. I almost missed you! I’m delivering the daily status report to the commodore’s office on Endeavour’s progress. Shiloah says he likes stuff like this hand delivered.”

“I see.” Sharp held the other’s gaze for a moment longer. The chief yeoman would be among those chosen for such a duty. Why, then, was his Sixth-Sense shouting so loudly at him…? “Carry on, Senior.”

“Aye, sir.”





Xia Tolin was actually quite enjoying her time at Whisker’s with Ron. Ron was not the militant sort of man she might have looked for among her own species. Nor was he one of the driven scientists that always caught her attention among Starfleet officers. He was an easy going, soft-spoken man who did his duty and enjoyed serving on a space vessel.

The two of them had been talking for nearly two hours, sharing why they’d each joined the Starfleet. For Ron it was the exhilaration and adventure of living among the stars. For Xia, it was the chance to help safe guard her world and work with warp driven vessels. And none was more advanced than the Endeavour.

“You could have protected Andoria with the Andorian Guard,” Davenport was pointing out conversationally, nursing a heady beer. “Why Starfleet over your own people’s service?”

Xia shrugged, a gesture she’d picked up from serving with humans. “Since Andoria no longer considers herself an Empire like she did a hundred years ago, there’s less emphasis on the military aspect of our fleet. We’re not fighting the Vulcans anymore. We’re nearly in the center of a vast Federation, and the Starfleet takes on most of the defensive role. Our ships are fewer and they don’t mass huge compliments. There’s not nearly as much opportunity in the Andorian fleet. If I’d joined, I’d likely be guarding a command post with a rifle in hand on one of the moons.”

“Ah, I didn’t know the Guard had scaled back so much. In the Academy, they just went over the military history of your fleet and its interstellar wars.”

Another shrug as Xia looked out one of the forward viewports at the dull brown metal repair dock that surrounded the ship like some kind of scaffold. There was a certain anticipation when thinking about a ship holed up in a space dock, awaiting her chance to go back out and do her job. “They do all right. But without a real threat, the people want their money spent elsewhere.”

“True.”

Tolin took a sip of the human wine sitting before her. She’d tried various drinks from many worlds, but only Terran wines had gotten her pallet. She still preferred Andorian ale, but given her company tonight, she felt a human drink would enhance the mood. “Tell me, Commander. Why is this compartment called ‘Whisker’s’? It’s general designation would be Deck Eight Forward.”

“Captain said that sounded stupid. It’s named for the stuffed catfish that’s mounted on the wall past the bar.” Ron pointed aft to the polished wooden plaque bearing the three-foot long fish under the fiberglass fishing pole. “Cap’n and Mister Thomas brought Whiskers back from a fishing trip four years back.”

“Fishing…I’m surprised your planetary government hasn’t outlawed that yet.”

Ron ‘harrumphed’ his thought of the idea.

“They’ve tried. Someone’s been trying ever since the Twentieth Century. They got rid of hunting. You have to hunt on colonies that transported game animals before the law went into effect. But fishing still seems safe for now…”

Xia lowered her drink to the table and looked sideways at Ron. He could talk about just about anything. Their winding conversation this evening had kept her entertained much better than she might have judged. She was beginning to size him up. “Your planet is so strange, Commander.”

“You can call me Ron.”

She’d been waiting for that.

“Okay…Ron. You may still call me commander.”

Davenport’s brows arched humorously high. Tolin could not help but laugh.

“Joking, Ron. Call me Xia.”

“Do you folks really have three other marriage partners?”

A playful smile formed on her lips.

“Why? Wondering how many men you’d have to share the bed with?”

Xia was delighted with the red blush that colored Davenport’s face. Humans turned such interesting colors when their emotions altered. She laughed aloud. “Oh, don’t be so shy. You asked. Yes…our marriages can include four people. Two males, two females. Some live together, some do not, and in various combinations. But we’re not special in that aspect. Denobulans have three mates each. Each man has three wives, and they each have three husbands and so on. Worse yet, they have a mating season!”

“Three wives!” Ron could not imagine how such could be managed. All those combinations of married people. “Family get togethers must be a bitch!”

The boson whistle called out through the dimly lit room and the collected officers and crew within looked ‘skyward’. Smith’s voice rang out. “Engineer Tolin, voice signal from Commodore Shiloah’s office!”

Tolin cast an off glance at Ron as she stood and moved to the closest wall comm. Ron sat watching. He did not have a good feeling about the call. Xia pressed the waiting yellow touch pad.

“Engineer Tolin, sir.”

“Commander, your engineering gang’s report shows you to be more than twelve hours behind my schedule!” The high-pitched voice shot at her. “I want to know the reason for this.”

Tolin was grateful there was no visual relay on this terminal. The look that passed over her face would not endear her to the commodore. “Sir, our EPS array is extensively damaged by the unregulated pulses our rigged warp coils generated. Many must be replaced.”

“It is my understanding these arrays are still functional?”

“For the time being, Commodore—“

“Then replace only those modules connected to the equipment necessary to get your ship functional. All other modules can be replaced once you’re under way!”

Tolin’s deep blue eyes narrowed in anger.

“Yes, sir!”

“Get your men back on schedule! I expect an updated report in the next ten hours.”

The signal ended and Xia stepped back from the bulkhead, disgusted. Most within the compartment had heard the commodore’s shouting. They stared unabashedly while Tolin fought to reign in her anger. Davenport stood, turning to look at the collected crew within the large lounge.

“Alright, folks. Commander Tolin needs help in engineering. Lets give her all the effort we can and spare her as much time as we can to help get us the hell out of here.”
As a group, the whole of them stood or abandoned the area they were relaxing in and began to file toward the exit. Resolution showed on their faces. They worked as a cohesive unit. And they would stand by their chief engineer to fend off the spiteful sector commander. The deck steward manning the lounge watched them go, a mournful look on his face as he shook his head.
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #6 on: February 01, 2007, 06:48:22 pm »





CH. 7





Flag Officer’s Log, Stardate: 9705.8
Fleet Admiral Sharp recording.


I am nearly at wit’s end in my dealings with Commodore Shiloah. He complains of Captain Ford’s ineptitudes, but flagrantly flouts his own lack of respect for me in every meeting. I can not bring him to task given the current state of affairs out near the Ya’wenn border. I need every line and junior flag officer I can muster to deal with the escalating situation.

Another vessel, the freighter Minnesota, was attacked by Ya’wenn escort vessels. The Comanche responded and drove them back into the Tempest storm, but the Minnesota’s casualties were severe. Comanche is housing the survivors till further reinforcements arrive and relieve her of her station.

I have taken direct regional command of the situation. I feel I must do this till I figure out a way to ensure that no officer conflict occurs that might further enrage what is happening out here. I have advised the C in C of the entire situation. His advice to me was to do what I think is right. A lot of help that was…
Captain Ford has come through his final surgery, and recovers in 23’s infirmary. He’s conscious, but only partially. I plan to see him in the coming hours. I know what he’ll ask me when I tell him what’s been happening. But I’m between a rock and a supernova. Commander Thomas did neither himself nor his captain any favors with his decision to assault Shiloah.







Ford blinked blearily as he deciphered all that Sharp had told him.

“And…there’s nothing we can do for him?”

Jonathan shook his head sadly.

“No. He’s dug himself a pretty deep hole, Captain. I can’t hold Shiloah’s power abuse over his head without his bringing your logs up as supporting evidence. The C in C and I support your actions and the way you lead your command, but an independent panel may not. If he convinces them to relieve you of your command, then he’s vindicated, and we still have no leverage to help Thomas. He wins entirely. But I have called in a Fleet psyche specialist. Maybe he can prove some kind of stress related avenue to get Ben out of serving hard time.”

“So he gives up and loses his career?” Ford’s voice was still hoarse. But at least he wasn’t tied to banks of machinery and trailing lines and tubes to all four corners of the room. He was pale, but then, he’d never had that much color…

“He gave that up when he went aboard Starbase 23 with intent to assault a flag officer.”

Ford looked away. He’d awakened from frightful sickness and surgery to find that his world was nearly turned on its end. But he still retained his command. It would be wrong without Ben Thomas at his side as he had been for the last decade, but it was more than he’d expected.

He still had to contend with Shiloah and his grudge, though.

“What am I supposed to do about the commodore? He’s gonna do everything in his power to get me relieved.” Chevis asked. His hand was unconsciously rubbing the area he’d been cut open to implant the cloned nerve cluster.

Sharp suddenly looked pleased with himself.

“I’ve been thinking about that…”

The admiral’s dark, weathered hand left his pocket and produced a small box. He handed it to Ford, who abandoned his incision to take it. The captain opened the little container and made a doubtful face. “You sure you wanna give me a weapon this powerful, Admiral? I can cause a lot of damage with this.”

“You can also do a lot of good, Chevy. Use it well.”

The two settled into a quiet reverie within the lonely confines of the darkened recovery ward. Ford was out of the woods, both physically and figuratively speaking. There were still plenty of trials left to contend with, however.







Three days later…

Lieutenant Commander Ronald Davis looked tiredly over the altered shape of the main bridge. The dockhands were busy clearing up their tools and making ready to disembark. Endeavour remained unable to leave Starbase, but all the work on the bridge was complete. Now the aft section of the bridge sported a squat, silver Strategic Command console, built into a recessed alcove full of status boards. The tactical console and aft sensor stations had been moved, now flanking either side of the conn, with the weapons station starboard. The flow of the compartment was altered, the view totally alien.

Davenport wasn’t sure if he liked the changes. He certainly didn’t like what it represented. They’d have to put up with that loud-mouthed commodore commanding the sector from this very bridge. It was almost enough to make Ron crave a transfer.

The yard birds filed toward the aft lifts, and Davenport turned the conn away from them. He was sullen over the affair, and did not want to watch them go. They were just Starfleet techs, but they represented a man he’d rather not think about. He heard their turbolifts depart and breathed a small sigh.

Ron was looking forward to another belated dinner engagement with Miss Tolin. They had only this morning gotten the ship’s progress back to the commodore’s expected schedule. Both commanders would rather have all the EPS modules pulled and repaired, but at least he’d not be breathing down their necks over it. They lacked another seven days for full warp coil repair. Till then, the engineering staff could enjoy pulling only single and double shifts, rather than triple.

This also gave he and Xia a bit of time to spend together.

Another whisper of an approaching turbo elevator sounded from behind. Ron mentally grumbled that some member of the dock yard crew must have forgotten some tool or another and was coming back to look for it. He was just completing that thought when the doors parted, unseen, and Smith’s voice sounded off: “Commodore on the bridge!”

‘Great’, Davenport thought as he stood at attention, ‘Goddamn Shiloah doesn’t even bother telling us he’s coming!’ The commander turned and immediately gaped at what he saw.

Still a bit pale from his surgery, Commodore Chevis D. Ford stood smiling within the open threshold of the lift car. He looked straight to Davenport. “I didn’t see anyone near the airlock I docked at, so…Permission to come aboard?”

Ron found his gape resolving into a bright smile as he advanced to shake Ford’s hand.

“Permission granted, sir!”

“God!” Noah Smith sighed aloud from comm, shaking his own head. “I’m so glad we won’t have that dickhead aboard!”

Chevis smiled even wider at that and looked to the new console arrangement behind his command chair. “See we’ve had some renovations.”

“You want it pulled out of here?” Ron offered, climbing out of the lowered command center to show him the consoles. “Those yard birds have got to still be here.”
Ford moved amid the stations, looking them over. He lingered near the StratCom console. Finally he shrugged. “Think I’ll keep ‘em.”

“Very good, sir…Commodore.”

Chevy looked toward the inactive viewer at the bow. Between him and it, Lieutenant Bronstien sat at ops, looking back with happy relief as well. “Y’all can still call me skipper.”

“Aye, aye, Skipper.” Johnathan replied, turning back to the console he was manning.

“Who’s had my dog while I was gone?”

Bronstien replied.

“That’d be me, Skip.”

“Yeah…well I’ll have him back now. You can bring him to my ready room when your shift ends.” Ford glanced sideways at Ron. “I do still have a ready room, don’t I Mister Davenport?”

“You bet ya, Skipper. Wouldn’t let ‘em take it. Though they did try to take your chair.”

“My leather chair?”

“Your command chair.”

Chevis looked around Ron to ensure that his swept-back, blue seat remained where it was supposed to be. As always, it was still there. “The bastards.”
“I had ‘em take the new model down to Aux. Con. since we stole that one for you to replace your first chair.”

“Good. Till further notice, you are hereby assigned as acting executive officer till I figure out how to get Mister Thomas back. We’ll meet in an hour to go over the Comanche’s patrol logs and combat reports. I’ve ordered additional crews from the station to quicken repairs, and we’re gonna pull those faulty EPS modules Tolin reported. We just won’t tell Shiloah.”

“Aye, Skipper.”

“Carry on.”

With a data PADD in hand, Ford nodded to all those looking his way and turned for the foyer leading to his office. He left the bridge, wiping imaginary dust off his brand new, gold commodore rank pins. He had a lot of work to do.






Later…

Commander Ben Thomas was smiling in spite of himself.

“Well, howdy, Commodore!”

Chevis didn’t return the smile, but he wasn’t exactly scowling either. His expression was a disappointed one. There was nothing he could do for his friend. “I’m sorry you’re in there, Ben.”

Thomas shrugged. He’d mostly recovered from his procedure. Ford was still off-colored from his own. “I’m not.”

“You’re too damn hot headed… What the hell were you thinkin? I can take care of myself.”

“Like I told Sharp. I wasn’t thinkin’.”

“You’ve f*cked your career.”

“Shiloah ain’t no saint, Chev. I can turn this around.”

“Not from the brig.”

“That Starfleet counselor is coming tomorrow. I might get out by reason of stress. Either way, I’m at home with what I did. No one f*cks with my friends. You’re my family, Cap’n.”

The sentiment was not lost on Ford, but he could not fathom Thomas being so damn reckless. Both of them had done audacious acts before, but nothing like this. “Dammit, Ben! I need you! I need your help, especially now! I have to deal with the Ya’wenn threat and fend off that damn commodore and I will probably have to find a new XO!”

Ben’s mien fell, his shoulders melting.

“I—I’m sorry I let ya down, Chev. I thought he had you by the balls…”

“My command was never in danger. Not with Sharp watchin’ my back. I need you to watch my back out in the field. Now I have to rely on someone else.” Ford made a mock dismissive gesture. “I can’t berate you showing me friendship. But you f*cked up.”

Ben repeated something he’d only said to Chevis once before.

“I’m sorry, man.”

Chevy kept eyeing his friend. He was so frustrated to have his XO taken from him. Ben deserved to be in there. There was no question about it. But he didn’t want his friend and ally punished, knowing it meant the loss of a great career. Ben had done a great deal of good in his decades of Fleet service. Now, none of that mattered. He’d damn near killed his superior officer.

“Dammit, Ben.” Was the only thing else Ford could say. He gave his friend an apologetic look before he retreated from the brig space.

Thomas watched him go, the true severity and stupidity of what he’d done sinking in on his for the first time.







Epilogue





Over Warden Jarn could not help but show his interest in the human looking man before him. He wore the uniform of a Klingon, like the aliens he’d had locked away for so many years. The aliens who’d rebelled on him. The ones who’d brought Ford here.

“So,” he rumbled, voice like a thunderstorm, “Captain…Rell was it?”

“Yes.” The Klingon mewled in response, far too much subdued humor in his tone to be trustworthy. “Captain Rell.”

Damn but the man looked human. Where were the bumps on his head? Why did he have hair atop his skull when even the soldiers accompanying him did not? He had the bushy facial hair that his kinsmen possessed. But that is where the similarities ended. What kind of game was this?

“And what the frell do you want, Captain. Your Dath’mar has already shot up my world and downed several of my ships while I was away. You wouldn’t be down here on the surface if it was battle you were after…”

Captain Rell amusedly studied the lush surroundings of Jarn’s ‘offices’. Nudity was represented in various examples and species about the colorful furnishings. Smoke from herb-burning pipes drifted at chest level through the dimness. Soft, nonsensical music flittered just beneath the level one could make it out. Rell seemed to drink the ambiance in.

“We’re here,” he replied finally, “to help you, Over Warden.”

“Help me?” Jarn grunted his opinion of that idea. “I very well doubt it. Your kind has no interest in me or mine, besides bloodshed.”

“You are very mistaken, Warden.” Rell said back, his silken voice almost putting Jarn at ease. Almost… “Myself and my men are not connected with the doings of Dath’mar and the criminals he commands. Indeed, we are his enemy.”

“Enemy, huh?” Jarn turned his back on the tall, wiry Klingon. He was confident his riflemen could take the devil down if he tried anything. He went to lounge in the plush seat behind his oaken desk. “I doubt that very much.”

“Then proof is what you need. I offer you one hundred photonic torpedoes, and the design data on how to build more.” Rell inclined his head to one of the three men with him. Like Ford before them, these aliens had shuttled down with an arsenal of weaponry. But Jarn had these covered with even more weapons.

The tall, musky smelling warrior dropped a pad on Jarn’s desk. Jarn suspiciously picked it up and keyed it on. He could not believe his eyes. He sat up in his chair. “These are the same kind of missiles Endeavour has… And the script says they are Starfleet weapons!”

“Yes. Those are schematics for the Starfleet MK VI ADCAP torpedo. And, as I mentioned, I’ve brought you one hundred more for immediate deployment.”

Jarn narrowed his eyes.

“And just why are you doing this?”

Rell had a small light of delight shining in his black eyes.

“Suffice it to say, Over Warden, that we share a common enemy. The Federation Starfleet. Now, this is what we ask in return…”



THE END
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #7 on: February 03, 2007, 07:18:40 pm »
Um, one response in regard to that epilogue.

Oh sh*t...





Wow, Guv. What a story. I'm thoroughly impressed. Is it my imagination though, or is Chevy's (possibly former) XO there more reckless than he was before the infection and treatment? Like maybe there was some damage to the area of the brain that deals with impulse control?
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #8 on: February 04, 2007, 09:22:23 pm »
I like, Guv. it seems like I'm missing out on a good bit of background, so I'm going to have to go back and refresh myself on some of your previous stuff, but I'm definitely not complaining. I kinda like the interaction between your senior crew; they're a little more familiar with each other than regulations might dictate, but the interaction is natural and the familiarity doesn't seem forced. Officers on a Navy ship on extended deployment aren't going to use parade ground formality with each other, so why should Starfleet?

Good ending too. Looking forward to seeing further developments with Jarn and his Klingon benefactors. All in all, a very nice story, Guv. Looking forward to your next one.
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #9 on: February 04, 2007, 09:44:41 pm »
Woot! Thank you both!

To your wonderings Josh, Thomas is a complete hothead. While his nervous system wasn't exactly DAMAGED by the infection, the infection did serve to wear him down to where his inhibitions were nearly gone. Where you or I may be cranky after having the flu, though, this massive infection helped Thomas lean toward homicidal rage, something he would normally control just fine. None of this is stated, but it is kinda implied.

Kieran, the other stories are posted somewhere on this board. Not hard to find. Some of the back story, I have to admit, comes from way back, from the OLD stories I hand wrote in the 7th--11th grade ('92-'96). So everybody will be playing catch up to understand how the captain and his XO act around one another...

I wrote...maybe about 25 of those old Endeavour stories, ranging from 6 to 30 pages long on notebook paper. Those were out there, to be sure, and very much a learning experience in my writing. Some refferences from those stories make it to these, even though the only people who will recognize them are me and La'ra... I don't consider any of those old tales as 'official' in my 'timeline', but I do borrow from them for ideas I thought were good then and are usable now.

One of those ideas will be the focal point in the next story, in fact.

Either of y'all have gripes, nit picks or anything I missed or just got wrong?

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #10 on: February 04, 2007, 09:48:48 pm »
Complete change of gears from your other stories, and that's a very good thing.  They're finally home, but sort of like someone getting off work and returning to a house full of screaming kids, they're finding it's not all they'd hoped it'd be. ;D

Bad Things:  The only major negative I can come up with is that the Commodore seems a bit too...erm...well, he might be a little too much of a prick to be completely believable.  That said...I know both of us have ample experience with people who're probably just like him.

Good things:  Continues your overall chain of character development quite well, and, oddly, it's very fast paced.  A lot of 'back at the barn' stories seem to slow down from more adventurous tales, but this one, if anything, moves along at a faster clip than the ones preceding.  Davenport continues to be my favorite character for reasons discussed, but the doctor is growing on me.  The scene where Ford tells her he'll agree to the experimental procedure, but only if she performs it, gave me another warm fuzzy.  She started out not seeming as much of the 'family' as some of the other members of the crew, but that's certainly changed by this point.

But the biggest thing I like about 'Home Base' is the fact that through the whole thing, you almost (not quite, but almost) convinced me Thomas was going to get off scot free by the end of the story.  The Star Trek ending loomed. 

I kept not wanting it to happen because it'd do damage to the ol' suspension of disbelief.  I knew you weren't going to cop out and end the story on an overall 'big smiley face', but the way you worked it impressed me, since you almost tricked me into thinking a quickie escape was going to happen.  It doesn't REALLY sink in that the consequences of Thomas' violent outburst haven't really even started yet until the end of the story when he realizes it himself.

Little things I liked:  Seeing Sharp again.  Davenport's 'shipboard romance'.  Noah's 'dickhead' outburst.  The continuing saga of the command chair.  Seeing Rell (been waiting on him).
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #11 on: February 04, 2007, 10:33:42 pm »
Bad Things:  The only major negative I can come up with is that the Commodore seems a bit too...erm...well, he might be a little too much of a prick to be completely believable.  That said...I know both of us have ample experience with people who're probably just like him.



Moo-ah-ah!

There's actually a reason for that...

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #12 on: February 06, 2007, 04:58:52 pm »
Guv, I am actually regretting telling you to post your story all at once. You know why? 'Cause now there is so freakin much brilliant stuff to comment on in the one go that I'll not get it all!

 :notworthy: :thumbsup: :pirate: :popcorn: :rwoot: :goodpost:

Okay, now that the stupid smileys are done, let me just say how stonkingly great this story was: This was a stonkingly great story!


Great Lines:

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“Cheery fellow.” Bronstien commented from the helm
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Sarcasm oiled his words as he spoke aloud to himself. “Maybe he’s just having a bad day…”
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Lord knows what it’ll be like with him lording over us 24/7. Or 33/5 in your planet’s time…” Ron ended his comment with a slight grin.
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“You can call me Ron.”

She’d been waiting for that.

“Okay…Ron. You may still call me commander.”
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“Do you folks really have three other marriage partners?”

A playful smile formed on her lips.

“Why? Wondering how many men you’d have to share the bed with?”
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“I’m so glad we won’t have that dickhead aboard!”
- Severely unprofessional, but fitting.

Nitpicks:

"Moral" is a conviction or value. "Morale" is a person's mood.
Hey! Starbase 23 is an asteroid starbase!  ;D
Captain Ramses goes from a Miranda to an Excelsior? That's a hell of a promotion! Even if the commodore didn't intend for him to take it, the offer would still have to be made in good faith.

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How big is the Ya'wenn nation? Is the Overlord just commandant of a prison mining colony outpost, or is that planet the entirety of the Ya'ween stellar empire? Even so, if they are still only a few dozen solar systems, how can they expect to beat the Federation? Is it just that the ya`ween don't know how big the Feds are? What are the Overlord's ultimate goals? Mere revenge against Ford, by proxy if necessary?
The Epilogue was chilling. The return of the Flatheads, as Larry would say.  :D You said "photonic" torpedoes. Are they really the same as photon torpedoes--which you suggest by calling them Mk VIs? The phase pistols and cannons are not the same as phasers.


General Impressions

I liked how Ford is putting up with meds instead of having a procedure that'll cure him so that he doesn't get grounded. And no, I hadn't realised Ford was ill. Not that I remember, anyway. Good moment bringing the Doctor into the Endeavour family.
Ford's impression of the base crew, that everyone didn't want to be seen smiling or even looking at their CO's Public Enemy #1. It gave me the impression that if someone had been seen to do that, their career or work environment would have suffered as a result. I liked how the commodore's legitimate beefs with the results of Ford's actions was undermined by his pedantic approach to Starfleet protocol and officer-enlisted relations.
The fact of an officer like Ben still in the Service scared me. He was thinking clearly enough to commit the assault, stepping back before the security guards got in so he wouldn't be shot, but possibly operating in diminished capacity that blinded him to the consequences of his actions.
Larry said that the commodore seemed too much of a prick to be believable, but I didn't find so. I thought you wrote him as a prick, but one who was not stereotypically eeeevil or even just an petty empire builder. He strikes me as being believably "can't stand Ford, want him GONE!" without making him someone you automatically hate for that sole reason. Put it another way: there are no "boo! hiss!" pantomime catcalls for this character when he appears on-stage. For me, at least.
Part of what I liked about your characterisation of him was when Sharp goes to see him in the infirmary, and he's automatically expecting Sharp to be on his side, but realises early on that Ford isn't. What makes this scene remarkable for me is that he doesn't immediately go into villanous, "if you're not with me, then you're against me and one of my arch enemy's sycophants! I must hate and destroy you too!" mode. You present him as a different person, not just a cardboard bad guy. He's being a bit underhanded in trying to oust Ford, but bureaucrats do that, don't they? *grin*
The captain of the Commanche. Nice characterisation.
The hints of a commodore's spy amongst the Endeavour crew.
Good "date" scene. Looks like dating Andorians is catching on.  ;)
The fact that everyone in Whiskers--"Where every-booody forgets your raaaank..."  ;D--gets up to help Xia defeat the commodore's demoralising effect.
The last scene between Ben and Ford, and that it only matters to Ben what Ford thinks of his actions. Only fact that he's disappointed and let down the man that needed him does it finally sink in that what he did was of no use to anyone, not even who he did it for.

Well, we wanted your stories in one go. What do you think of my comments all in one go?  ;D
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #13 on: February 06, 2007, 08:42:14 pm »
 :woot:

HELZ YEAH!!!

I espescially like that Thomas being in the fleet 'scares' you! That's exaclty the kind of reaction I was hoping for.

As for the amount of stuff to comment on, you did damned well, my friend! And I love them all in one whack.

I'm just blown away that no one noticed in the previous episodes that Ford was having problems, though. I mentioned him getting flushed, light headed...needing his meds, everything. But no one ever commented on it. I tried not to just zero-in on it, but I placed hints in at least 2 episodes. Somehow, though, it gives me Jollies that it got missed. Like the rest of the tale was engrossing enough that, like the Endeavour crew, y'all missed it too.

As to the nits: I'm not sure where the 'moral-morale' issue comes from, but it's likely just a misspelling or an 'auto-correct' thing done by my spell checker. I hate that thing.

My use of SB 23 is odd, really. In rough drafts, I switched between calling it 23 and 22. When I noticed, I decided I liked 23, but didn't really think about WHY it had a familiar sounding ring to it... After I'd already posted a story where I'd established it WAS 23, THEN I realized "Oh, yeah, That's ANDY's base...ooops..." Decided not to change it as an homage to your station. I wanted it to be one of those 'last chance for beer and gas' stations.

Ramses going from a cruiser to what I consider a battleship is a bit better than Ford's promotion from a science ship to a frigate THEN to a battleship. But then, Picard went from commanding a worn out, 80+ year old CA to (evidently) 15+ years of desk jockeying to a BB. Then, when he lets his XO and counselor get that one shot down by a worn out BoP, they give him a brand spanking new Soveriegn...  I mimick Trek in the nonsensical way they over promote.

What I love: Your character impressions of Shiloah.
La'ra's impression of him kinda surprised me, but I don't think he quite knows WHAT to think of him yet. I poked at him some more, but he says he doesn't want to think too hard on him till he sees more.

I worked hard not to make him the 'cardboard' villian you mention. I don't like 2 dimensional characters. Everyone has a back story, I just have to get to them.

I'm glad you like Rell. I decided that despite the implication that forehead reconstruction exists, Rell doesn't want it. He is as he was made. He and Ramses are both from our most recent RPGs. Can you guess who in the world Ramses is based on...?

Anywho, must move on. Thanks for posting and the great comments.

Before I go tonite, did any one just...like the Thomas beating Shiloah scene...maybe in some primal 'I wish I could do that to X-person" kind of way?

And what is the verdict on the all-at-once posting? Good, bad?

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #14 on: February 09, 2007, 09:04:37 pm »
Glad you liked my comments, Guv. Feedback is always appreciated.

Still want you to keep posting in one go. Makes it harder to read (in one go) because you have to set aside a lot of time for it, plus at least that again (for me) to comment as I did above.

I didn't get a thrill reading the beat-down scene. Like I said, someone like Thomas scares me. That aside, I didn't hate the Commodore. If it had been someone I hated, like David Weber likes to do in his Honorverse series, I do get those thrills and satisfaction. But because I just saw Shiloah as an arsehole instead of a nasty bastard, I don't like it. It was brutal and ugly--but that was your point (I assume).

Ford's illness does ring a bell now that you've shown it, but as you said I was too engrossed in the story to really absorb it enough to remember it later.

Thanks for the homage, but I'm sure Rear-Admiral Sanek would appreciated his base remaining as he left it.  :D

Looking forward to the next one.

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #15 on: February 09, 2007, 09:30:25 pm »
Yeah, definitely keep posting 'em all at once.

And I'll admit to liking Thomas' beating down Shiloah, though what was in the front of my brain was 'Oh man...that's so stupid of him'.
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #16 on: February 09, 2007, 10:28:29 pm »
Very much, indeed. Very stupid of him.  I think you'll like where it all leads to, though in a few episodes. My court-room scenes still need work. I admit to having no 'Law and Order'-writing skills. Plus, it was hard to do any kind of court drama when the case is sooo cut and dry and the perpetrator isn't the sort to deny what he did was wrong.

Anywho, hope no one thinks that was a spoiler, cause, really, it wasn't.

The beating was supposed to be just that. Perhaps my violent side is too...well engrossed in what it likes to see. A scene like that certainly wouldn't make it into any Trek we'll ever see.

I'm very happy to continue posting all at once and will continue to do so on the first of each month. Next up is #6, 'Halvor Prime'. It was an odd one to write, though very fun as well. Just the name alone will tip La'ra off as to where the story will head, but I've thrown some newness into it that may surprise even him.

And as to David Weber stories...

I liked 'On Basilisk Station'. That was it for my Honor-loving. Everything else seemed much too contrived to tell exactly the tale and get the fights he wanted to happen.

But, then, I'm picky.

I shall see y'all all soon.

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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #17 on: February 09, 2007, 11:11:00 pm »
I liked 'On Basilisk Station'. That was it for my Honor-loving. Everything else seemed much too contrived to tell exactly the tale and get the fights he wanted to happen.

The fights he wanted to happen, the way he wanted them to happen. IE:  Honor's force is bloodied terribly but wins the day largely due to her genius no matter how competent the admiral against her or or how ridiculously against her the odds are (to the point that intelligent, highly competent adversaries start acting like utter morons when in battle against her).  Quite frankly, he did that enough that by the last few books, I started rooting for the Havenites.

Of course, turning her into a genetically engineered munchkin worthy of the person we're travelling to visit next Wednesday didn't help.
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #18 on: February 10, 2007, 08:19:01 pm »
Funny, I never saw it that way. I always saw her as winning because she never did quite what the enemy expected and she never gave up, not even when she surrendered. It wasn't that the competent commanders acted like morons, it was that they were simply outclassed. Competent vs. brilliant. Excellent plans vs. someone who likes nothing better than to throw a monkey wrench into excellent plans. People trying to play their strengths against the weaknesses of someone thoroughly away of her own capabilities, the capabilities of those under her command, and the capabilities of her ships and materiel. I also found Nimitz as engaging a character as Honor herself. I just wonder what might be done about the damage to his telepathic faculties...
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Re: Home Base: Story #5
« Reply #19 on: February 10, 2007, 11:58:08 pm »
I was almost amazed by the post above...then I remembered. Josh liked 'Dreadnought' and 'Battlestations'.  ;D

Just kiddin' though. I don't like books where I know from the point of opening the cover what I'm about to read, almost vebatum. The first Weber novel didn't seem to fit the mold, but then, it was probably the one that set the mold. I hate 'Mary Sue' characters and those that are 'best at everything'. I can't read Louis L'amour for the very reason. Honor is just another example. Nor can I read a Micheal Stackpole space fight scene. You know exactly what's gonna happen.

Hopefully I'm not guilty of either of these sins. Though La'ra has recently pointed out that my recent Endeavour fights (not including 'No Good Deed...') have all been Endeavour versus multiple enemy... Gonna have to change that up some later on...

Though, I agree with one thing... Nimitz was probably the best character of the series that I've read.

Anywho...

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