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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #40 on: November 19, 2007, 10:39:23 pm »
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CH. 7





Commodore Chevy Ford’s world was spinning when the transport cycle finally released he and his party. The first thing to leap into his mind was the realization that his people hadn’t been brought back up to the ship. They were still on terrestrial property. The second was the lack of Mister Smith and Goodwin from their group. Wherever the two of them had ended up, they weren’t within sight in the street he and Surall had beamed into.

The third and final thing to dawn upon the flags officer was the fact that he was, indeed, standing in the center of a very busy road…

“Sir!”

Surall was already in motion, throwing her bulk into the commodore’s back and propelling himself and her out of the path of an on-rushing truck. The vehicle squalled its wheels and locked up its brakes, swerving in an attempt to miss the two of them. The truck skidded up onto a sidewalk; people dashed swiftly out of its way. Ford watched from the other side of the street, gaping at the sight of angry Jobian beginning to point his way.

“We’d better get the hell outta here!” He told his science officer.

“It is highly likely our transport was observed by many in the area.” Surall told him as they two of them turned and took off in a dead run for the alleyway. They charged out of the sight of the on-lookers behind them. A conscientious citizen attempted to bar their escape from the accident they’d caused. This earned him only a body check from the Vulcan woman and a kick in the face when he still tried to tie up Ford’s feet.

The two officers tore down the first left they came to and continued out of harm’s way. Only then did they start to hear the sirens sounding in the distance. Air raid alarms! This town was under attack too!

“Are we still in the same province?” He asked Surall as they came to a rest at the end of a final alley. Surall boldly took her tricorder out from its pocket and made a scan, heedless of witnesses. The few in the area paid them little heed anyway.

“We are within one hundred kilometers of the rocket range. Same country. There are two bombers en route, ETA: seven minutes.”

Ford flipped open his comm.

“Ford to Endeavour, come in!”

“Slik here, Commodore. Are you uninjured?”

Ford’s mind’s eye flashed back to the hood of that truck, earlier.

“Fine. What the hell happened?”

“There was a gamma ray surge in your area during transport. We had to abort half the signals.”

“Can you try again?” There had to be some reason the crew hadn’t already tried to bring them back up. He hoped it wasn’t a permanent reason.

“Negative, Commodore. In trying to stabilize your signal, we damaged the entire EPS grid leading to the transporter system. We have tried to power the cargo unit with no success.”

Now the pair of aliens had drawn attention. Men and women were pointing at the two of them, most with angry faces. These might have just come from the scene of the previous accident. Panicked by the sirens and the general commotion, now they’d centered their anxieties on the strangers. Strangers with odd devices who spoke on high tech radios…

Ford placed a hand over the antennae grid of his communicator set.

“We gotta go!”

Both the Starfleet officers turned and ran away from the massing Jobians. Shouts followed them up the street even as vehicles began to fire up along the sides of the road. Chevy just hoped none of them had a gun…





Commander Davenport was still fingering his left ear when he arrived back on the bridge. The majority of his alien wares were gone, save for the basic vestments of the clothing. His Starfleet jacket was tucked beneath his right arm as he came to a halt on the starboard bow of the control center.

“Report!”

Lt. Commander Slik turned away from the engineering console where he was assessing a damage control board. “Transporters inoperable, XO. Commodore Ford and the science officer remain planetside.”

To accentuate the report, Mister Smith emerged from the opposite turbolift alone. He frowned Ronald’s direction and then made to sit at the communications station. Ron stepped forward and descended into the sunken command section just forward of the helm. Mister Bronstien looked up searchingly at his approach.

“Any word from the Skipper?”

Slik seemed unsure how to answer. He was likely unfamiliar with the term the ship used for their CO. He finally nodded once, turning away from the engineering panel. “The…Skipper… was beamed down into one of the surrounding settlements south of the rocket base. This city is also in danger of an immediate attack. He reported his status as uninjured before he was forced to end contact.”

“Forced? What’s going on?”

“As nearly as we can determine…the Skipper and Lieutenant are having to evade pursuit on the planet surface.”

“Why!”

“Unknown.”

The XO’s eyes glanced to the repair board behind the Gorn officer.

“Estimated time to repair?”

“Indeterminate. The entire EPS array within the transporter matrix has been overloaded. Commander Tolin’s crews are on it, but have yet to render an estimate. Damage seems extensive…”

Ron tapped at both his ears. The damage to his eardrums was repaired, but he still heard after echoes of every syllable. It made listening difficult. He looked again to Bronstien. The kid looked back at him with a certain anticipation…yearning. The Skipper was in trouble and he wanted to do something more than sit on his butt on the bridge high above.

“Mister Bronstien, get down to the hanger decks and see about a shuttle with a transporter. Get the Skipper and Surall back home!”

“Aye, sir!”

Unencumbered by any difficulty with his prosthetic legs, the helmsman rendered his seat to the man at ops and headed for the lift Davenport had just vacated. Ronald felt a slight tingle of dizziness and headed for the conn. He sat there, wondering just how much more could go wrong today.




Doctor Andrea Keller looked up to the two nurses who were talking just outside her office. Had she just heard what she believed she had? The doctor closed the medkit she’d been preparing and strode hurriedly out of her office to catch up with her two subordinates.

“Nurse Tyler, could you repeat what you were just saying,” The British medical officer requested.

The tall, blonde nurse turned and regarded her senior with a curious glance.

“Doctor?”

“What you were just telling Nurse Genkins… About the transporters…”

Tyler came to sudden recognition and nodded. She knew why the CMO was asking.

“The transporters are down. They were trying to beam up our landing party from the surface when a radiation surge scrambled their signals. I was telling Genkins that we need to get anti-rad treatments and the transport trauma field kit—“

“You mentioned names, Nurse…”

“Yes, ma’am. Lieutenant Surall and Commodore Ford were the two they lost. They’re stuck on the planet—“

Keller did not remain to listen to more. She turned away, desensitized and feeling all over numb. The sudden thought that the Commodore, her former lover…was lost on an alien world. Lost on a planet just starting a nuclear war…

Confused and unsettled, the CMO stepped back into her office and out of the sight of her subordinates. All she could think about was him...the fact that he might not be coming back once again.





Johnathan Bronstien walked quickly, if stiffly, out onto the main deck of the dorsal shuttle bay. He glanced about till his brown eyes caught sight of the hanger chief, SCPO Karver. Karver was a large man in his late forties. He’d been in the fleet a good long while, and knew auxiliary craft inside and out. The helmsman made a beeline for him.

“Senior! I need a shuttle with a transporter.”

The balding man turned his direction. The look on his face told the officer he was not going to be in luck today. “No can do, sir. At least not till I fuel one. Only the cargo shuttles and the recon ship have transporters, and most of those are down for maintenance.”

“How long on the easiest?”

“I could get you the Patricia in a half hour. She’s in hanger four and is totally intact. Or I can give you Sanchez in an hour and some change. He’s in hanger one, but we’ve been pulling the plasma regulators per the XO’s order. Take a bit to put him back together.”

Bronstien shook his head. He pointed out to the portside main door.

“I’m gonna be out that motherf*ckin’ door in two minutes.”

“Then you can have either the Burton or one of the pods.”

“I’ll take the Burton. Get her ready.”

“Him, sir. Skipper named him after his Dad.”

“Him, it, whatever. Get it ready.”
***





A minute and fifty-one seconds later found Lieutenant Bronstien’s ship passing through the semi-luminous field of energy that held the atmosphere inside the shuttle bay. John applied full impulse power and angled his craft down for the blue and green world below him before he’d even cleared the bulk of the lower saucer hub. The pilot had strapped himself into his seat in preparation for turbulence.

“Shuttle Burton, this is the bridge.” Lieutenant Smith’s voice came loudly over the comm channel. “Coordinates coming through on estimated whereabouts of the Skipper and Surall. Life readings indeterminate. There’s too much radiation to lock in on his transponder, but that should clear when you get closer.”

“I’m pretty sure he’ll see me coming down.” Bronstien responded. This mission was so very against the Prime Directive of non-interference. There would be no hiding this shuttle once it swooped over that town down there. The general populous would see them very clearly. Hopefully they’d take the advanced craft for an enemy vehicle and attribute it to enemy activity rather than alien incursion.

The Burton buffeted upon striking the atmosphere. Johnathan lessened his velocity to a more controlled speed. He had to make it to the Skipper intact. Burning up or crashing on entry would do no one any good. The bow flared to a dull red color as friction built due to his oblique angle of insertion. A tap of two controls brought up the shields. Most of the friction and heat build were abated, but the turbulence increased as air was now being forced to take a wider path around the shuttle.

The planet under John’s craft flattened from a hemisphere to a long, wide horizon of immense proportion. The vibration from the hull began to slacken and the ship sank beneath a grey layer of high level clouds. Just before he lost visibility, a great flash of light caught John’s eye far to starboard.

The Jobians were still nuking the hell out of themselves.

He just hoped he could reach the Commodore and science officer before they wound up among the rising casualty toll.






Ford watched from the hilltop he and Surall had been forced up to just outside the Jobian township. Their pursuers had all but forgotten them, looking back at the on-coming bombers just as the Starfleet officers were. The first of the supersonic craft was slowing; it’s bay doors reeling apart at the bottom of the huge, silver fuselage.
Lieutenant Surall didn’t need her tricorder to know what was coming. “They are preparing to deploy, Skipper.”

Ford looked behind. Cover was slim. The bulk of this hill would provide some relief from the burst, given its distance from the apparent target. It would also stop flying debris. Radiation and thermal effects, however, would likely kill them anyway. “Is there any cover at all?” He asked above the roar of jet engines.

The science officer popped out the scanning head of her tricorder and turned westward with it. Neither could hear the signal emanations of the tiny machine for all the sound from those approaching planes. “There is a shelter of some kind built into the side of this hill. One hundred forty meters, bearing 357.”

“Let’s go!”

The two picked back up into a dead out run. They did not see the first bomber begin its preparatory dive that would assist in getting its payload away quickly. Ford had forgotten his normal lack of physical conditioning. He was running off straight adrenaline. Surall out paced him easily, though, her own form very fit and half his weight and age. They ducked low hanging branches and dashed around tree trunks on their way to where the Vulcan had indicated.

“There, Commodore!” Surall pointed to a wooden building built into the slope of the surrounding embankment. They redoubled their speed. Ford could not help but notice a band of civilians huddled into the doorway of their home about fifty yards west of the hill they traveled across. The family had heard the sound of the incoming bombers and were worriedly scanning the skies. Their structure would not protect them from the blast, let alone the after affects of a nuclear detonation. Ford drew to a halt.

“Those people are gonna be toast!”

Surall considered reminding her CO of the Prime Directive. This would accomplish little, and helping a family with children, to her, far outweighed any conscientious objection General Order One might invoke for the situation. She lowered her tricorder and began to wave with the commodore to them.

The family, three adults and four children, stared back in confusion. One of the women pointed out to the pair of them in and looked back to the others. The children were crying now. The male who seemed to be in charge glared back in obvious mistrust, an obstinate expression glued to his face.

Ford drew his communicator and set its controls to its loudest speaker enhancement.

“If you stay in that house, you’ll be killed!” He shouted over the loudspeaker. “That hillside shed is the only shelter here!”

Snapping his comm shut, Ford took off again, clearing the ground in long strides right behind his lieutenant. This seemed to convince the huddled family. First the eldest female snatched up the two smallest kids and took off after the alien visitors. This compelled the elder man to reassess his earlier sentiments against seeking help. He gave a wave to the remainder of his clan and they began to trek up the slope to catch up with the others.

The sounds of engines suddenly took on a baser note. The first of the two bombers passed over the hilltop, gaining altitude on a steep incline as it struggled to accelerate. Ford watched the craft zoom higher, seeming to barely move due to its size. It bay doors were reeling closed.

The ground shook as though a hammer had struck at their feet. Several of the Jobian family members fell and had to scramble back to their feet. The sky was alight in a hellish glow. Then the overpressure wave hit…

The top of the hill was shorn off in a blast of force indescribable. Trees took flight with the concussion that ripped them free of the ground. The very air became unbreathable, filled with debris and burning hot grit. Were it not for the hill, Ford, Surall and their Jobian charges would have already died. The impact zone had been extremely close.

A torrent of hot wind was tearing at the landscape as Surall reached the shed and tore the door open. She turned to grab at the commodore, guessing his next intent, but he’d already stopped short to help the approaching family. They crammed the seven aliens into the compact, wooden interior of the building, then pressed themselves in flush, pulling the heavy door to.

The next blast erupted just after that…




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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #41 on: November 19, 2007, 10:42:38 pm »
CH. 7 [pt. 2]


“Shuttle Burton,” Commander Davenport’s voice came through the open comm channel. “Be advised that Jobian radar has detected your approach. Eight craft are on an intersect vector.”

Johnathan cursed slightly as he lowered his ship to hug the flowing terrain more closely. He was over two hundred kilometers from the town the landing party showed to be within. He could already tell from the flashes in the day sky that the town had been nuked. He glanced to his sensor panel to ensure that Ford and Surall’s transponders were still transmitting. Thus far, they showed intact.

The pilot’s mind slued back to the current problem.

“Armament and disposition of fighters?”

“They are supersonic interceptors, armed with conventional missiles and automatic cannon. Neither present a danger to your shields, but I want you to evade contact if possible.”

Bronstien glanced aside to his tactical monitor. Eight blips were approaching from his one o’clock. Evading these interceptors would be nigh impossible if he were to maintain his drive toward the commodore. He’d have to turn about completely and lose them, then return and hope no one else got wind of him. All of this would leave members of his crew exposed to radiation and further attack. They may not be alive by the time he got to them. Orders be damned, he was going to get them home.
“Understood,” He answered simply. It would be better to beg forgiveness than to beg permission. He pushed the throttle past the atmospheric limit.

The Burton was a Type I shuttle, grand for space maneuvering. He was decent in atmosphere and among the most lithe in Endeavour’s hangers. But any boxy space courier was ill made for any kind of high-speed planetary flight. The best Bronstien could hope for while in atmo would be Mach 1.2. Those approaching fighters showed to be coming in on him at well over Mach 1.3 Primitive they may have been, but the Jobians held the advantage in speed for the time being.

Could they maintain it, though? Ancient Earth fighters were rated for supersonic speeds as well, but were only capable of maintaining them for a matter of minutes till fuel exhaustion. The Burton was under no such restraint. John watched the fighters move steadily closer.

“Shuttle Burton, you are close to being sighted!” Ronald’s voice projected loudly. Bronstien grimaced despite himself.

“Understood, Endeavour. Was hoping a low profile would confuse their radar. Any other path is gonna endanger the Skipper.” He explained back, choosing his words carefully to disarm the Commander.

There was a pause from the other end. The helm officer could only imagine the hell he’d pay upon return to the ship. “Understood, Burton. Continue on course.”

Momentarily pleased that he’d allayed the ire of his XO, Bronstien looked back to the sensor screens. The alien craft were almost within view. They’d be ducking beneath the clouds any second  now…

An alarm system began to blare for attention. Two missiles shot out from beneath a cloudbank and angled in on a direct course for his vessel. The helmsman’s first instinct was to ignore them. He was already beginning a maneuver to bank clear of the primitive weapons, then he noticed their size and warhead details on his monitor. A tiny weapon with rudimentary tracking control and abysmal range capabilities. Its warhead massed only twenty pounds...

Johnathan pressed on along his course. The fighters continued in on him, following the paths of their missiles. The weapons themselves slashed in and struck almost at once on the Burton’s starboard quarter.

The shuttle bucked twice in quick succession with the impact and small detonations of the missiles. Small drain alarms sounded from the deflector control panel, followed by green indicators. No damage. Bronstien smirked and looked out ahead, paying little further attention to his pursuers.

Another volley of missiles was forthcoming as the aliens loosed nearly their entire armament upon the seemingly invulnerable machine plowing across their skies. More than ten new weapons roared straight in on the shuttle and angled in on him. John watched them with a wary eye, hands hovering over the RCS controls in case he lost helm control.

This time, the Burton was nearly knocked clean out of the sky by the detonations, one after another, of eleven striking weapons. A few of the missiles missed entirely and sped on past. The Burton bobbled and dropped low. Tree limbs cracked and scraped by against the shields. But the hearty little ship kept on flying at his full atmospheric velocity.

John angled the bow back up over the horizon and groped for altitude. The primitive fighter vessels fell into line behind the still moving, undamaged craft and began to fire short bursts of heavy caliber cannon shells into his after shields. The shielding flared and contorted under the concussive hits, but still showed no strain. The fighters were staying hot on his tail. He glanced down at the topographical display near his helm control.

The Burton was less than fifty KM from the town bearing his crewmates. Those fighters would still be on him by the time he got there. He’d have to lower his shields when he reached the area, to get his passengers aboard. Those ships would be able to strafe him with impunity. The landing party would be vulnerable. In his hurry to reach them, John may well have further endangered his people…

“Endeavour, Burton! Those fighters are gonna be all over me when I make planet fall.” Perhaps, John admitted, he should have heeded Ron’s call and avoided those craft.
“It’s going to get worse, son.” Davenport returned. “More aircraft are inbound to your position. They were already heading in to intercept the bombers, so I looks like you were in for a fight any way you handled it. You need to evade those fighters and get the Skipper’s team out ASAP!”

“Copy that, Endeavour. Request weapons free.”

Bronstien didn’t believe he could outrun these ships and lead them away in time to evade another flight of interceptors. He’d have to make short work of them. This ship could do it.

“Negative on that, Burton!” Ron sounded vehement. “Weapons safe, repeat, weapons safe! Do not open fire. Those craft cannot hurt you!”

“But they can hurt our people!”

“Weapons safe, Lieutenant! Or I’ll order you back to the ship!”

Johnathan inwardly cursed. He had to bring those planes down. If he couldn’t drop them, what could he do to knock them out of the sky? He searched his frantic mind for a way. The incessant rattle of machine gun fire tattled at the aft shields. He could imagine what those guns could do to the CO and science officer if they were caught in the open.

John’s eye caught sight of a red outlined craft on his sensor board, which was suddenly beginning to lose altitude above him. One of the fighters had edged lethally close. Now it was dropping like a rock... What the hell was the pilot planning?

John realized only too late how far these men were willing to go to protect their land and peoples. The fighter crashed directly into the aft quarter of the shuttle and exploded with at least half its fuel capacity intact. Burton plunged like a stone into the forest below and tore through the boughs of thirty odd trees as Bronstien fought near-futilely against inertia and his controls to keep his ship up. A hard hit cracked the edge of his view port.

The shields were down!

“Endeavour! Endeavour! Shields down, I have damage!” Bronstien piped off like an alarm klaxon once he brought the shuttle up over the canopy of green once more. “Generator blown!”

Struggling like a heavyweight contender, John strove for every meter of altitude he could gain. His hands flew about the panels arrayed about him. He tried to restore his defenses, but only received banks of red flashers in response. More alarms began to call as cannon rounded pinged off his naked hull.

“Endeavour! I’m taking more fire!”

“Weapons free, Shuttle Burton!” Ron’s decision was like an avenging voice from heaven. “Defend yourself and retrieve the landing party!”

John banked the shuttle back the way he’d come, swinging his bow port to starboard randomly as he fought his way clear. His right hand tapped in commands, activating phasers and targeting systems. He set the phasers for pulse fire. Hopefully the aliens would recount his gunnery as tracer fire after the fact.

Johnathan killed his velocity, putting his craft into a full hover mode, and checked over his status indicators. Damage was minimal, but there would be little chance of restoring shields. The generator had blown two circuits, and even if he though he could reroute the power flow, it would take him an hour. Burton’s thrusters were undamaged. He was still in adequate fighting condition.

A roar passed close by the shuttle, and the lieutenant winced at the flash of aircraft blasting past him overhead. John watched their trajectory and refired his engines. As he bore on once more for the Jobian town, the fighter aircraft banked in two groups and turned to come back at him. He began to lock his phasers on the leader of the larger group.

The Burton surged ahead just over the tops of green oaks. The group of four planes cut their afterburners and began to spit drooping chains of machinegun fire toward Bronstien. The shots went mostly astray, their unassisted targeting poor and inefficient. John bore toward them, coming left in a nimble turn, just as the pilots might expect. Another chatter of gunfire bounded off the hull and the main viewport before the pilot. John flinched at the impact. It cracked his port, but could not penetrate.
John returned fire.

A short burst of phaser fire lashed out, spitting from one emitter, then another in intermittent pattern. Four lances of energy pierced the onrushing fighter jet and slit it in two. The pilot tumbled from the larger portion and deployed his parachute.

The remaining three ships maintained their course, still firing long bursts of cannon fire. Alarms began to cry out as the more sensitive sensor modules and RCS thruster quads took a couple of hits. Bronstien cursed and lashed out at his aggressors once again, dropping another whom fell on fire into the forest below. The Burton slashed by the remaining two fighter vehicles and kept on toward the landing party.

The smaller group of three fighters that had split off to Johnathan’s right had circled back and were even now closing on the shuttle’s aft. More gunfire rattled across the reinforced alloy flesh of the auxiliary craft. Another thruster quad showed inoperative as the charging vessels passed by and banked away. John followed the two with split away to starboard. He drew a bead on them, one after another, and put a burst of fire into each. The first cracked into small portions and spun away in different directions. John didn’t see the pilot bail out. The second craft simply burst into flame and began to roll over and over. The pilot tried to make egress, but could only get his canopy open and fail ineffectually before his ship hit the dirt.

Bronstien rightened his bearing back for his destination. The fighters were keeping further behind now. There were only three left, two pacing him from a kilometer aft, and a single other who was still heading away. John increased speed to the highest velocity his maneuvering jets could maintain. With three quads now inoperative, his maximum safe speed was halved. He could solve this by engaging the impulse drive, but even the least power from the main engines this low in an atmosphere would likely send him plummeting to the deck. There were reasons one didn’t fly a craft with an irregular hull that fast while planetside.

John began to pass over the rural surroundings of the small town. Great, blossoming mushroom clouds grew skyward and a corona of expanding energy still flowed over the landscape, knocking down buildings. The Burton crashed through the pressure wave, bucking hard as he hit. The closing fightercraft turned away from the detonation. They’d done all they could and were unwilling to endure hard rads from ground zero.

John slowed to a crawl, trying not to look over the carnage spreading about his craft. He had a signal on the transponder frequency he was scanning. Tracking it amid the rads and the heavy EM interference however, would take him some time.





Chevis Ford tried to clamp his hands over his ears against the clamor of screaming within the small space he and the other survivors were crammed into. The electromagnetic surge from the two bursts had all but fried his personal equipment, including the UT circuit of his communicator. The babble of the Jobian family was as unintelligible as it was excruciating. Surall herself had closed her eyes and was tuning the world out.

The blasts had not injured the survivors huddled into the hillside shed. But the increasing radiation and heat were already taking their toll. The babble of the natives was quickly turning into fright fueled screams of pain. Ford’s flesh was crawling, burning and itching with the rads he’d already sustained. There was little light in the shed. He could not see much of the visible effects of their increasing injuries. He didn’t want to. Both he and Surall would need serious radiation treatment upon returning to the ship.

Another roar overtook the cringing survivors. Ford wondered in growing panic if yet another bomber had come for them. Were more bombs about to fall on them? He could still hear the blast of winds from the first two.

“Commodore Ford!” Came a thunderous voice from beyond the heavy wooden door. It was Bronstien! “I’m here to evacuate you! The Burton is landed just outside your cover. Six meters! I’ll open the hatch when I see you!”

Ford turned amid the pressing mass of bodies and looked to his science officer. She looked back at him, concern for their charges obvious on her normally impassive face. Her dark eyes looked back at him, wide but steady. She knew what he was asking her. And she did not argue with him over the point. The family had fallen silent at the sound of the booming, alien voice and unfamiliar language from outside.

“Let’s get ‘em on board, Lieutenant!”

Surall fought her way to the back of the family and spread her arms wide to compel them forward. Ford threw open the heavy door, showing the natives the spectacle of the destroyed visage of their homes and the large alien vessel sitting in the middle of it all. Ford grabbed the smallest of the walking children and charged out into the open, sure that the mother would follow the evil man bearing away with her child. She did. The rest bustled along, shoved unceremoniously out into the hellish scene and toward the shuttle. Even in his hurry, Ford could make out all the damage and scratches in the hull. The Burton had had to fight his way down here.

The main, aft hatch reeled down to the ground long enough for the two officers to pack the family of Jobians into the ship. Surprisingly, the elders were so amazed and dumbstruck they offered little more than confused resistance. Soon, the door was pulling back up into its mount. Johnathan, his human face making the natives shrink away, looked back from the cockpit section.

“Everyone okay?”

Surall looked the natives over and glanced back from her stooping position aft. “Radiation burns and severe absorption. The after effects will be showing soon.”

John turned back to his controls as he began to lift them away from the surface. “I’ll put sickbay on the alert.”

Ford, bleary eyed and now feeling sick to his stomach, struggled forward and bent beneath the low bulkhead separating the aft compartment from the fore section. His instinct told him to take the ops position at the pilot’s side. But practicality and common sense overrode this impression. He was soaked with hard radiation. He’d affect Bronstien, possibly causing injury. The amputee had been through enough in the last few months. He remained aft during the trip back to Endeavour.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #42 on: November 21, 2007, 11:01:16 pm »


Ford is officially on Top Ten Coolest CO's Ever status. Way to take the PD, wrap it up nicely and flip it ye olde Double Duece. Just freaking awesome.

I do hope that in one of the next issues of this story there is some explination as to why the shiny red button was pushed. It seems to me like a "what if" scenario in which USSR decided to nuke USA just before the first moon shot, possibly to keep USA from being able to take all the glory.

I read this and I think back to one of my favorite scenes in Atomic Cafe; the scenario is that USSR invaded southern California and the US Army decided that the only way to get rid of the Communists is to detonate an A-bomb. Since this is a simulation, the test is in the desert and not the pleasant township of L.A. Bomb is supposed to go off and army troops (all grunts!) are supposed to go in and clear the area. Ye Olde A-Bomb goes off, and cut to cut scene 1, instructor describes the types of radiation to the soon to be almost nuked troops, Alpha, Beta, Gamma and Neutron. Next comes cut scene 2, a cutesy animation describing how Alpha radiation interacts with the human body that obviously is unavailable to our kinda doomed troops. Basically it says that Alpha particles are most harmful when inhaled or ingested, since they can be blocked by normal, every day skin. Cut back to the bomb and the shockwave, and each troop shown in this part (yeah, you guessed it) is staring at the blast, mouth wide open. Somewhere in this they show a reporter asking the troops if they kept their mouth shut or not, each answered that they got a mouthful of dirt. Now, after all that explaining, I have to ask, did our heros have their mouths shut?

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P.S. Find a copy of Atomic Cafe and watch it. Brings new meaning to microwaved bacon in one scene. Even has the "duck *SWOOSH* and cover" song...

And I'll leave you with these quotes from the film, found on imdb:

Army information film: When not close enough to be killed, the atomic bomb is one of the most beautiful sights in the world.

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Civil defense film: Be sure to include tranquilizers to ease the strain and monotony of life in a fallout shelter. A bottle of 100 should be sufficient for a family of four. Tranquilizers are not a narcotic, and are not habit-forming.


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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #43 on: November 22, 2007, 08:27:03 pm »
Reason for the war was pretty simple so far as it goes, and all the clues are there. The southern nation decided to put a nuclear armed missile platform in space during their little 'test launch'. The northern nation found out and, being beyong Earth-nation-paranoid, they started their nuclear war. No the whole scenario isn't perfect and it likely wouldn't really happen this way...but then, I was aiming to mimic 50's and 60's WWIII stuff, so I intentionally didn't over-think it.

Glad you like Ford's way of command. He understands the necessity for the PD as much as the best commanders. He just isn't going to lose his people over it. Nor is he going to let folk die when he can stop it. I had another way for the shuttle scene to go, but it wasn't quite 'Ford'.

Original Scene: Bronstien lands the shuttle outside the hill and Ford opens the door, giving the scared natives a real good view of the craft as its rear hatch eases down. Surall wastes no time entering the ship, but Ford hesitates. He climbs onto the ramp and halts, looking back to the open shed and the aliens within. They stare back. The mother almost takes a step toward the ship, showing that she knows it to be salvation for her and her family. Ford pauses, looks back into the shuttle to Bronstien, who waves him in. Ford looks back, almost deciding to close the hatch. But then he waves the family on board.

I thought that the scene would be rather heart-grabbing, but in the end...I decided that Ford, knowing he could EASILY save some lives, wouldn't even think about it. He'd just do it. Period. So the scene wound up as shorter [which my aching fingers thanked me for...].

More thoughts before I wrap this one up?

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #44 on: November 23, 2007, 07:22:54 pm »
Guess I'll finish this'n off.

I hope it has been thoroughly enjoyed by all!




Epilogue





Shuttle Burton settled on the foredeck of the hanger bay and began to power down. A large crew of men and women were waiting with medical equipment and hover gurneys for the injured people within the ship. The door slowly descended to the deck with a thud. Confused, wide-eyed Jobians were the first to shuffle down to the outside, looking to and from with amazed fear.

Doctor Andrea Keller moved forward, waving her nurses and techs to the waiting patients. “Begin inoculation against gamma rays. Get Bronstien too. Let’s get the crew and passengers covered by the radiation field and move them to decon.”

Her people knew their jobs. They paid no attention to the fearful stares of the aliens who weren’t supposed to be here. They weren’t concerned for the Prime Directive, which told them not to interfere with primitive societies. They only cared for saving lives and caring for the injured. They began to inject inoculations into the visitors’ veins and ushered them inside the waiting containment field about the hovering gurneys. The aliens chattered amid themselves. Some pushed away from their benefactors, but were convinced to cooperate.

Keller saw that they were being handled effectively, then turned her attention back to the shuttle standing before her. Her own fear compelled her closer. She mounted the lowered ramp tentatively, peering in. Bronstien was coming her way, flanked by the science officer. They both paused a second before her. Surall was impassive, though she seemed uncomfortable. She was probably feeling sick from the rad poisoning. Both stepped past her, Bronstien doing so with a hard stare.

Ford was getting up from the bench lining the port bulkhead. His eyes were downcast as she approached. He didn’t notice her till he was standing fully and looking down at her. The doctor’s mouth dropped open…quivered. Feelings welled up within her, unwanted and unwelcome.

She hadn’t realized the level of her worry till she’d laid eyes on him. She’d feared for Ford’s life from the moment she’d heard about the nuclear strikes below. He’d come close to dying again.

“Chevy…”

“Chevy?” He repeated. He stared at her. Bronstien and Surall spared a look back their way, then discretely stepped out of sight. Andrea stepped in closer to the commodore on impulse, almost against her own will.

“I…”

“Worried about me?” He asked with a soft smile. His entire face morphed around his wide grins.

“Yes!”

“Me too.” His smile faded as uncertainty tainted his eyes. “I’m fine.”

Andrea rushed the final step into his arms and grabbed hold fiercely. Regardless of the rads she was absorbing, she clung to him, hugging him tightly as tears slid down her cheeks. Had she really believed he was in that much danger? She didn’t know. This eruption of emotion had blindsided her. She felt like letting go and crying aloud. Her hands grabbed at the flesh of his back. His own hands folded around the contours of her back as his breathing subsided and mellowed. They stood in tight embrace for some time.

Ford’s hand found hers, pulled the hypo free of her grip. He pressed the spray to his neck to inoculate himself. Then he pressed it to Keller’s arm as she looked back up at him with a giggle. Chevis smiled on, warm and happy. “To keep us from dropping dead.” He explained.

Andrea laughed a bit, and pressed close into him again. She didn’t know what their future would bring them, or whether this was a good idea at all…but she knew she was happy right there, in Ford’s arms. They remained for a time before heading for Sickbay.
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The commodore sat at his desk within the much safer confines of his ready room. The surgical alterations that had allowed him to move freely among the aliens below was long gone. Their Jobian guests had been sedated and beamed down into a small hamlet far south of the warzone still raging on their world.

Endeavour remained in orbit, studying what might be the death of two separate nations. These people were exploring the road Earth had long since turned away from. Some civic and xenohistorical intel could be gleaned from the happenings below. Ford was no longer interested.

The flag officer reflected on the mission to the Jobian world. He had tried to relieve the crew with a non-combat mission of exploration and study. It had almost cost him and Surall their lives. Surall, after treatment for radiation sickness and burns, had returned to duty and silently began cataloguing the goings-on of the peoples below. Even now, her eyes were glued to her sensors on the bridge.

Ford shook his head as he mulled over everything that had happened. He had often wondered if he bore a curse. Days like this pressed home the theory. However, Keller’s actions upon his return home had given him doubt about the curse.

He didn’t know if their relationship was back on the road, or if this was simply an example of feminine confusion under stress and worry. Either way, it showed her feelings for him. There was still hope. Ford looked away from the sweating glass of tea that sat on his black desk. He toyed with the thought of making his log entry. What words would put this day into context? Telling the fleet what had happened would be the easy part. The rest… That would bear more thought.

The hatch opened from the security foyer aft of the bridge. Lieutenant Bronstien stepped in and stood at attention while the door slid shut. Ford looked up at him with a fond eye. “At ease, LT. What’s on your mind?”

“Was wondering if you’re alright, sir.”

Chevy waved the young officer to a free seat. He pushed the tray bearing a tea pitcher and two empty glasses closer to the boy who held up an abstaining hand. “I guess so, Johnathan. Just goes to show you, even the most peaceful mission can go awry.”

“Indeed.” The kid agreed, using one of the words Ford himself liked so much. “So what’s next on our agenda?”

“No clue, yet. Beyond returning to a patrol route.”

“Is our life ever gonna get easier?”

Ford looked back soberly. Did the whole crew’s opinion map his own this closely? Was morale falling below his ability to improve? He could see ample reason to feel poorly about all that had happened in this sector. He had to start building his men up, and he had to start here, right now.

“Yeah, Lieutenant. We’ve had a rough spell, but I’ve seen others just as bad. You’ve read the files on the Hawking?”

“Aye. The ship you and Thomas brought back from Klingon space after six years of being lost. I’ve read it over. You went through some hell.”

Ford nodded.

“We went through a long, very arduous trial keeping that ship intact. We made it back. That ship is still in service, so are most of the people who served on her. Save for our battle with Jarn in the Tempest, what I went through during that time was more trying than what we’ve faced here. Our…trials… shape us into the people we will become.”

Bronstien smiled at the sentiment.

“I’m just worried we’re gonna become dead people. When I joined, I never thought I’d lose my legs. A ship, maybe, but not likely. But some of what we’ve been through is just plain crazy. Will we have to go through this sh*t the rest of our lives?”

Chevy shrugged. “Fleet life is…interesting, Lieutenant. We play a dangerous game, and it might be the death of us. But the rewards of Starfleet service…the experiences…if your lucky, are more than worth the risk. You worried you made the wrong choice in puttin’ on that uniform?”

Johnathan looked down at the red uniform and black trousers he wore. When he looked up, his face was sternly hopeful. “No. I’m good. It just seems like a lot to go through all the time.”

“It’ll get better, son. All in good time. The dark only rules till the light returns.”

The two men continued to converse, sharing a moment of friendship as their ship, their home, continued to revolve around a strife torn planet full of people thinking much the same thoughts.

END.


This here's the original ending. I'm toying with the idea of adding some of the Czar's concerns later, but for now, this is the finiahed product.

Lemme know what y'all think.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #45 on: November 23, 2007, 10:41:29 pm »


Ooh! First one here!

Glad to see that my suspicions of Andrea and Chevy weren't too far off. It'll take time for them to get to where they once were, but if they want it, its there for them.

Also glad to see you didn't go the wiped memory route for your guests. Might inspire one of the younglings to start a peace movement leading this people eventually to touch the stars.

Is there a curse? You betcha there is. Its called "someone is writing your life, and so long as that person keeps writing, bad, strange, wonderful and crazy things are bound to happen." Poor Ford doesn't realize that with a few keystrokes, he could have a *insert terminal condition here*. Seriously though, traveling the stars is trouble enough as it is with all the species and phenomena and other things out there. It can't all be open space and bacteria samples; human loving aliens and peaceable Klingons.
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Chevy shrugged. “Fleet life is…interesting, Lieutenant. We play a dangerous game, and it might be the death of us. But the rewards of Starfleet service…the experiences…if your lucky, are more than worth the risk. You worried you made the wrong choice in puttin’ on that uniform?”

Johnathan looked down at the red uniform and black trousers he wore. When he looked up, his face was sternly hopeful. “No. I’m good. It just seems like a lot to go through all the time.”

“It’ll get better, son. All in good time. The dark only rules till the light returns.”
That just says it all.

Not much more to say on this wrap up. The story as a whole is excellent. If you ever get bored with Endy stories, you could always do a spin off based on the aftermath of this nuclear war, perhaps focused on the family that was rescued? Or not.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #46 on: November 24, 2007, 10:22:24 pm »
I'm rather entertained by how much these aliens amuse you, Czar. And flattered. I may have the Endeavour return to Jobia and see what sort of seed has been sewn there... :angel:

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #47 on: November 27, 2007, 02:11:38 am »
If our crew does return and the Jobians have made something of the pieces left behind, perhaps that will finally be a moral boost. Or a friendly competition with another crew or something.

Still, I enjoyed the read immensly and I can't wait to see more. So guv, GIMME MORE masterpieces.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #48 on: November 27, 2007, 07:08:27 pm »
Thank you! I shall wait a few to post #15, which I finished Andy-Proofing (TM) last night. I hope to see a couple more review and opinions on this one before I move along. Maybe a Larry's Big Ol' Review (TM) or an Andy-ism (C).

More to come soon!

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #49 on: November 28, 2007, 12:02:12 am »
Forget having the Endy come there.  Send another ship 100 years later to see how they recovered from their WWIII experience on Jobia.  Fun story. 
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #50 on: November 28, 2007, 04:33:35 pm »
More commentary. My time is short right now, so though I have critiqued your full story, I'll likely only get through Ch4 here.

First, the Nitpick. Now, I know your comments about editing, but I'm only letting you off with typos and mispelled words. Wrong word choice is free fire!

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Surall risked unveiling her scanner entirely and passed it about the space before her to attenuate the detection grid.
Attenuate: reduced especially in thickness, density, or force. I think you mean "unmask" or "boost" or such like here.

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“Begin a new scan of the artificial satellites in orbit of Jobia, Mister Slik. Look for any kind of weapon system, active or inert. Determine its nature, and also evaluate for threat to the Endeavour.”
Good reaction to an unexpected threat. I was kinda wondering if the satellites should be scanned for this as a matter of course, though.

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Ford closed the antennae and resumed watching...
Foes his tricoder have more than one? 'Antennae' is the plural of antenna. Latin plurals like this include nebulae and supernovae. And FYI, the plural of 'phenomenon' is 'phenomena'. ;D

A nice continuation. I liked Surall's contemplation of the subverting influence of paranoia and emotion in general; very Vulcan, it seemed to me.

Yup, times's up. More later tonight maybe, tomorrow for sure.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #51 on: November 28, 2007, 07:34:31 pm »
As always, you border just on the brink of insulting with the grammar help. It is apprieciated, however...

BUT...Attenuate...

When one attenuates a device, such as a radio reciever [or in this case a tricorder], one is narrowing down the bandwidth it is recieving from. I learned this from my Dad who worked on radios for a pawn shop for a time back in the 60's and 70's. AH-HA!

And no...Ford's comm 'Foesn't' have two Anntena...  :laugh:

Am looking forward to more Andy-Smacking.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #52 on: December 21, 2007, 12:06:49 pm »
I'm surprised that Chevy didn't echo Kirk's sentiment that "Risk is our business." It certainly fits all the crap they've been through. Still, perhaps the line has been overused.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #53 on: January 07, 2008, 11:33:24 pm »
As promised (if horrendously late), here are the rest of my comments from Ch5 onwards.

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“Degradation is at 30%. Reset through the buffer and cross circuit to initiator circuit B.”
Classic Spock line! Love it!

Chapter 6 is a helluva exciting chapter! All complimentary comments seconded! I decided to avoid the nitpicky comments, as I waited too long.

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Surall was already in motion, throwing her bulk into the commodore’s back and propelling himself and her out of the path of an on-rushing truck.
Helluva way to reappear, but what a great reappearance.

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Now the pair of aliens had drawn attention. Men and women were pointing at the two of them, most with angry faces. These might have just come from the scene of the previous accident. Panicked by the sirens and the general commotion, now they’d centered their anxieties on the strangers. Strangers with odd devices who spoke on high tech radios…
This scene is classic 60s "they're all after me" paranoia a la Invasion of the Body Snatchers, with everyone pointing at them. Great scene!

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Ronald felt a slight tingle of dizziness and headed for the conn. He sat there, wondering just how much more could go wrong today.
Never wonder that! You'll always get an answer... *grin*

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“Him, sir. Skipper named him after his Dad.”

“Him, it, whatever. Get it ready.”
Love this line too. Entirely appropriate, I thought. It of course reminded me of my conversations with Larry about Klingon ships using the male pronoun, like the Russians they were an analogy for.  ;D

Still don't know where your dorsal shuttlebay is on the Endeavour. I'm having trouble picturing where it is and from your description it seems to be on the upper surface of the saucer. Excelsior doesn't have one there that I'm aware of.
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before he’d even cleared the bulk of the lower saucer hub.
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It bay doors were reeling closed.
Wrong word there, I'm thinking. "Reeling" implies (to me) that the motion is out of control. I know it also means reeling in as if on a reel, but that usage has been shifted slightly to imply it's a bit of a fight - reeling that fish in, and all that.

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Eight craft are on an intersect vector.
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But the hearty little ship kept on flying...
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Andrea rushed the final step into his arms and grabbed hold fiercely...
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“To keep us from dropping dead.” He explained.
I also found this pretty funny.  ;D
I'm glad to see Andrea came around in the end.

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“It’ll get better, son. All in good time. The dark only rules till the light returns.”
I really like this line, and the sentiment/belief/ideal it expresses. I think, if you don't mind, that I'll use that as the motto on one of my dedication plaques, attributed to a Commodore Chevis D. Ford. Make her a cruiser, or maybe an escort.

All in all, a rather stirring an well-told story. I loved the 60s feel to it, and that feel was well executed. There were some great character moments and lots of well written scenes. Definitely to be ranked as one of your best, Guv. Good job.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #54 on: January 07, 2008, 11:54:05 pm »
Thank you very much, sir. Your comments are always appreciated.

Yup, the laziness brought on by the tiredness of writing Endeavour for 2 solid years has made my word-choices pretty bad at times, and my 'editting' worse. Your pointers will be used as corrections when I feel like messing with these again. Thank you!

As to the shuttle bay in the neck of the Endeavour, watch the dockyard scenes of Generations with the Ent-B and watch where the shuttles are coming from. It is also evident in the deck schematic of the Ent-B found on Memory Alpha.

The 'lower saucer hub' is how I describe the bulge built onto the bottom of nearly every Federation starship's saucer. Never could come up with a good label for it, decided on 'hub' many years ago. You, sir...are the only person to ever complain. >:(

Glad you noticed the Spock-line. I decided to throw that in after watching the episode it was used in. My original idea for the Transporter scene would have been more TNGish. I think the TOS element made it better.

Also thought about having Ford just get hit by the truck they beamed in front of... I've been hit by 3 vehicles in my life... Ford should get hit by at least one...but I needed him able to run...not hobble around.

And if you name a ship after Ford...I ask for an escort. New Orleans-Class [if you go by the smaller build-idea, Saber if not].

I thank you for the diligence, time and trouble, good sir!

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #55 on: January 14, 2008, 09:17:09 am »


As to the shuttle bay in the neck of the Endeavour, watch the dockyard scenes of Generations with the Ent-B and watch where the shuttles are coming from. It is also evident in the deck schematic of the Ent-B found on Memory Alpha.

Those actually aren't shuttles, they're work bees, and the holes in the neck that you're talking about are *way* too small to be shutlebays.  Both of the Excelsior's shuttlebays (if you want it to have two) are rear-facing in the lower hull.  One at the very end of the fantail and the other (which I've read is supposed to be a cargo bay) at the bottom of the ship.



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And if you name a ship after Ford...I ask for an escort. New Orleans-Class [if you go by the smaller build-idea, Saber if not].

I don't understand the smaller-build idea.  The New Orleans is a larger ship than the Saber, but it makes sense if you mean fewer ships of the class since more Sabers would be built than New Orleans.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #56 on: January 15, 2008, 10:14:14 pm »
Yeah, me and Andy had a convo about the placement of the hangers aboard Endeavour. The data display of Ent-B shows it to be a torpedo emplacement and Andy confirmed for me that those were indeed workbees.

However, aboard Endeavour, rest assured that it is a shuttle bay, and while the doors are smaller than the traditional hanger bay door, the opening is quite large enough to fit said ship's own bridge module through it, so I don't see problems flying a shuttle through.

As to the New Orleans, most say the ship is pretty huge, but to me, the size of the window's tells me the ship should be in the 150-180 meter length. I know you won't likely agree, as I have read a many similar convos based on just that question. Either way, I care not. But if Andy names a ship for Ford in TNG...then I ask for a smaller breed of vessel. And I do love the New Orleans.

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« Reply #57 on: January 22, 2008, 03:49:48 pm »
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The 'lower saucer hub' is how I describe the bulge built onto the bottom of nearly every Federation starship's saucer. Never could come up with a good label for it, decided on 'hub' many years ago. You, sir...are the only person to ever complain.

:P I call that area the lower sensor dome, as it has been called since the FJ deck plans of 1701. Besides, the Excelsior actually has no bulge there, just the sensor array.

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As to the shuttle bay in the neck of the Endeavour, watch the dockyard scenes of Generations with the Ent-B and watch where the shuttles are coming from. It is also evident in the deck schematic of the Ent-B found on Memory Alpha.


Those actually aren't shuttles, they're work bees, and the holes in the neck that you're talking about are *way* too small to be shutlebays.  Both of the Excelsior's shuttlebays (if you want it to have two) are rear-facing in the lower hull.  One at the very end of the fantail and the other (which I've read is supposed to be a cargo bay) at the bottom of the ship.


Yeah, me and Andy had a convo about the placement of the hangers aboard Endeavour. The data display of Ent-B shows it to be a torpedo emplacement and Andy confirmed for me that those were indeed workbees.

However, aboard Endeavour, rest assured that it is a shuttle bay, and while the doors are smaller than the traditional hanger bay door, the opening is quite large enough to fit said ship's own bridge module through it, so I don't see problems flying a shuttle through.


I like the idea of the neck containing a shuttle bay. The Guv and I had a conversation about this - which lead me to examine my DVD of 'Generations' - and even though those neck cutouts have projections that would make their function as doors awkward at best, they are big enough for workbees, travelpods and shuttlepods to get through. I don't go for a standard-sized shuttle - and I have no clue as to how you figure the Excelsior bridge module could fit through one of those cut-outs - but small craft stowage? Sure.

Besides, we have nothing better to put in that big thick neck at present.

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And if you name a ship after Ford...I ask for an escort. New Orleans-Class [if you go by the smaller build-idea, Saber if not].


According to Bernd Schnieder's awesome site (http://www.ex-astris-scientia.org/), the New Orleans class frigate is 340m long.

http://www.ex-astris-scientia.org/schematics/fleet-chart-1060.jpg

I believe him, based on this:

http://www.ex-astris-scientia.org/articles/neworleans.htm

Cause she's so big (Basically a Constitution-sized Galaxy class), I'm calling her a heavy frigate. I like to be awkward. ;D And I think a Sabre is a good choice for "his" ship.  I have them pegged for the late 2360s, so it's quite probably Chevy's dead by then and can safely be named for him..
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #58 on: January 23, 2008, 10:34:18 pm »
*looks above, slaps forehead, rolls eyes...wonders how such things even become issues in fiction...*

As far as which ship I'd prefer for Ford, yes, the Saber would be it. I don't see Ford's name being on a ship any larger than a Defiant or Saber.  And Ford's name just doean't fit a Defiant... Even if I do love them so.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #59 on: January 23, 2008, 11:33:45 pm »
*looks above, slaps forehead, rolls eyes...wonders how such things even become issues in fiction...*

I blame Andy.*nods*

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