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Offline Commander La'ra

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Sparring
« on: February 19, 2006, 04:05:24 pm »
Another Marissa Sune vignette, this time a direct 'sequel' to the one that came before.

Tell me what ya'll think.


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Sparring



Student and teacher circled each other.

“Decided I might have something to teach you after all?”  Her instructor asked. He was stocky, bald, and usually infuriating.  His breath steamed in the cool air.

“Yes.”  Marissa declared. 

She hadn’t expected approval from this man.  She had expected confirmation.  The fist he threw at her caught her by surpise, her deflection clumsy.  Other attacks followed, becoming faster and faster.  She knew from painful experience that she wasn’t good enough to win.  She stole a heartbeat with a single good parry and hopped away.

He didn’t follow.

“Running?”  He sneered.  Teacher and student circled each other warily.

“Controlling the fight.”  She countered.  She’d disagreed with him on the necessity of such maneuvers previously.  The disagreement had led to argument, blows, painful personal assessment.

He nodded once.  It was as close to praise as the man ever gave.  She could’ve tested his emotions, stolen positive reinforcement directly from his mind, but Master Slask had forbidden it.

The next exchange was more controlled, more instructional.  She countered, as he’d once instructed, without preplanned patterns.  She let her instincts guide her.  He nodded again.

“Less movement.  The more you move, the more time it takes.”  He ordered, ending the spar with nothing more than a shift in tone. “Show me how block, again.”

Slow motion punches, kicks, and grabs followed.  She countered.  He told her she was doing it wrong, correcting minor flaws in the way she moved, held herself, attacked, defended.  It was old ground, but there’d been a pause in their instruction.

Marissa noted that she was listening to him.  That was better than things had been before their disagreement.  She had tried to make herself more accepting of his skill, his superiority as a fighter despite his lack of the force…tried to purge the Jedi haughtiness from herself.  She cared more about that than punches and kicks despite her fondness for physical pursuits.  It was unworthy of her.

Yet it remained, lurking at the edges of her mind.  Jedi weren’t supposed to hate, but she hated her own sense of superiority.  It wasn’t what she wanted.  Worst of all, it didn’t feel like something that belonged to her.  It was borrowed snobbery.

Still, she was listening to her teacher again.  That was progress.

“All right.”  The bald man said.  “On the bag.”

There was a bulky punching bag hanging from a nearby tree.  She’d be expected to hit the bag until she’d proven his corrections had taken root.  She assaulted it.

She realized it was possible that her presumption, her prejudice, might never be completely eradicated.  That angered her.  She planned for it anyway.  If such thoughts couldn’t be wiped out then they must be assaulted at any oppurtunity as well as guarded against.  She could certainly do that.

“Don’t let up.”  The bald man advised.  Marissa’s fists continued to hammer the bag.

“Not going to.”  She declared.



End
"Dialogue from a play, Hamlet to Horatio: 'There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy.' Dialogue from a play written long before men took to the sky. There are more things in heaven and earth, and in the sky, than perhaps can be dreamt of. And somewhere in between heaven, the sky, the earth, lies the Twilight Zone."
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Re: Sparring
« Reply #1 on: February 19, 2006, 10:56:11 pm »
Selvedge woukd'a beat 'er down. Just kidding!

And to all those who don't understand the insdie joke, don't worry about it.


I like the inner growth thing Marissa is goin through. Wonder how you'll write the OTHER fight scene... :woot:

btw... I love this smiley... :puke:
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Re: Sparring
« Reply #2 on: February 20, 2006, 08:16:05 am »
This is a great little vingette. Very character-building, and hers is growing in a good direction. Good job.

PS. That Smiley is disgustingly funny. :drinkinsong: :puke:
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Re: Sparring
« Reply #3 on: February 20, 2006, 05:41:48 pm »
Indeed, they come up with some good ones. :rwoot: :rwoot:
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Re: Sparring
« Reply #4 on: February 21, 2006, 02:20:15 am »
Andy is right, we get a good glimpse of her character every time
Snickers@DND: If there is one straight answer in that bent little head of yours, you'd better start spillin' it pretty damn quick, or I'm gonna take a large, blunt object, roughly the size of Kallae AND his hat and shove it lengthwise up a crevice of your being so seldomly cleaned that even the denizens of the nine hells would not touch it with a 10-feet rusty pole

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Re: Sparring
« Reply #5 on: February 23, 2006, 10:09:42 am »
Yup, another solid performance from the Larster. Man, you are reallu in the groove these days! Star Trek, Star Wars and super hero stories all very well written without a hint of contamination/overspill from one to the next.

Andy's right with his character-building comments. Recognising flaws in yourself is a huge step in self-awareness and the fight against entropy. Pay it forward, and all that. Every act of kindness is one second (or something) reclaimed from the heat-death of the universe.

Back on topic, her admitting to having these flaws and deciding she does't like having them or want to have them makes her a good person, and the decision to keep these thoughts and feelings under assault a great testement to her character.
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Re: Sparring
« Reply #6 on: November 06, 2006, 02:09:57 am »
*loads post into cannon, fires it back toward the top of the list*
"Dialogue from a play, Hamlet to Horatio: 'There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy.' Dialogue from a play written long before men took to the sky. There are more things in heaven and earth, and in the sky, than perhaps can be dreamt of. And somewhere in between heaven, the sky, the earth, lies the Twilight Zone."
                                                                 ---------Rod Serling, The Last Flight