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Fragile Ideals
« on: August 21, 2005, 09:46:14 pm »
I should read old stories about war and ships more often.  They tend to inspire...

I have sort of an idea where this one is going, but I haven't got the details worked out yet.  Hence, don't think too bad of me if the post rate is slow.

Wait...

...the post rate is always slow.

Well, anyway....


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Fragile Ideals



“So the fighting will continue?”

Commander La’ra met the Queen’s eyes.

“Yes.”  He replied.

The ruler nodded.  They stood on the highest balcony of her palace.  There were flashes of light on the horizon, distant cracks of artifical thunder.

“It would be foolish to demand you intervene militarily, wouldn’t it?”  asked the Queen.

“I can’t help you the way you want.”

“The overall situation is too sensitive?”

“Yes.”  La’ra rumbled.  The Klingon Empire and United Federation of Planets were weathering a chill in relations.  Starfleet had grown tired of certain Klingon houses raiding across the border and had responded militarily.  They’d shown discretion; only the forces of the offending clans had been attacked.  Their restraint had prevented war, but nerves on both sides were raw.

“I do wish you’d gotten here first, Commander.  Starfleet makes a great noise about non-interference, but the Rebels were beaten before the Constantinople arrived.  Interesting coincidence.”  She leaned on the balcony rail, her face illuminated by distant guns.  “At least your arrival has restrained their efforts.  Perhaps we’ll stop the advance.”

“That parts up to you.”  He warned.  "We've already found other ways to assist you.  We can find more."

“How much time would that take?  I cannot stall them with negotiation.”  She shrugged.  Her skin was fine bronze, her frame lean muscle.  Her people and  Klingons had strong genetic similarities despite the Kelor's smooth skulls.  The races were cousins.  “The rebels will not accept any settlement short of…short of my abdication and the surrender of our culture.  I will not allow my people to be domesticated.”

 “It would be unfortunate.”  La’ra agreed.   The Kelor were fierce warriors.  "You take it for granted that your removal would lead to such a castration."

"There is a Starfleet cruiser in orbit."  She shrugged lightly.  "The Federation controls the Rebels despite their denials.  Thus, if Rebel victory seems inevitable, I will give the order.”

He frowned. 

“Which order?”

“The order that will direct our entire fusion arsenal to strike our own planet.”

He noted, with the passive understanding one grants a tempermental child, that she seemed entirely serious.

“You’ll want us to evacuate you, then?”

“No, Commander.  My people’s fate will be my own.”  She turned to him and smiled.  “Better than Federation oppression, I think.  A good death.”

"I think we can find an alternative."  He declared.  He could already think of thousands, from using those same missiles on just the Rebels and enduring the literal fallout to letting the insurgents take over and fighting their new society from hills and caves.

He regarded the Queen coldly.  She probably wasn’t popular enough for the second option.

“I hope so, Commander.”  Another smile.  “Escort me to my chamber?  I have no doubt things will seem clearer in the morning.”

“Of course.”  He said, offering up a grin.  It wasn’t genuine.

Monarch and Klingon retreated into the palace.



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"So there's reason to call her Heartreaver?"  Ran'jar's voice asked.

"Yes."  La'ra responded into the communicator. He was on the balcony again, watching the shelling. "It pains my heart that we're to keep her in power."

There was a rude, amused noise from the speaker.  La'ra grinned far more enthusastically than he had for the Queen.

He wasn't being entirely fair.  The Queen was quite beautiful.  She'd given La'ra deep wide-eyed looks and subtle smiles before she'd retired to her room.  He'd felt the tug.  Fortunately, his taste in women ran toward honesty.

"Has the irritant done anything new?"  He asked.

"No.  She's cruising happily.  No transporter activity, usual comm traffic."

La'ra nodded.  The Constantinople's efforts on the Rebel's behalf hadn't been halted.  She was undoubtedly relaying whatever she saw from orbit to the insurgents over tight-beam directional communications.  That was all it had taken for the Rebels to turn defeat into a rapid advance toward the capital.

"The Rebel offensive is still stalled.  Unless something changes, they won't break through."  Ran'jar advised.  The Hiv'laposh had matched Starfleet's ante in the favor of the Loyalists.  The battle was now in stalemate.

"And neither will the Queen's forces."  La'ra agreed.  He was never happy with a stalemate. 

The first indications of a plan began to bubble in his head.  His mouth twitched.  It took discipline not to tell Ran'jar immediately.  The Federation ship was surely listening in.

"Transport me up."  He ordered.  "We should probably discuss how to exploit Starfleet's innocence and virtue in private."
« Last Edit: March 04, 2007, 01:53:32 pm by Commander La'ra »
"Dialogue from a play, Hamlet to Horatio: 'There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy.' Dialogue from a play written long before men took to the sky. There are more things in heaven and earth, and in the sky, than perhaps can be dreamt of. And somewhere in between heaven, the sky, the earth, lies the Twilight Zone."
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #1 on: August 21, 2005, 11:12:11 pm »
es un buen comienzo, ¿pero donde está el resto?  ;D

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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #2 on: August 22, 2005, 08:28:51 am »
Nice one, La'ra.  :thumbsup:

Am I to believe that famed Starfleet is militarily supporting the Rebels? Or are they just championing their cause to the despotic Queen and this is sufficient to rally their efforts?

And I like the way you tied in my Timeline, as well as giving me a good out for the Klingon Conflict of '72-'75 while avoiding Organian interference. Thanks!
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #3 on: August 22, 2005, 09:45:23 am »
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Am I to believe that famed Starfleet is militarily supporting the Rebels? Or are they just championing their cause to the despotic Queen and this is sufficient to rally their efforts?

Well, La'ra certainly suspects that their support is more than just moral.:)

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And I like the way you tied in my Timeline, as well as giving me a good out for the Klingon Conflict of '72-'75 while avoiding Organian interference. Thanks!

I've been looking for a story to slip that into for awhile, after our conversation on it a while back.  You're most welcome.
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #4 on: August 22, 2005, 08:15:54 pm »
Ooooo!

Kick the Feddies asses!

Bang that queen too, while yer at it.
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #5 on: August 24, 2005, 03:24:24 am »
Wow larry 3 storylines. That's ambitious :D
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #6 on: August 24, 2005, 04:31:52 am »
The idea is that if I'm working on several stories then I'll be in the mood to work on at least one of them... ;D
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #7 on: August 24, 2005, 07:20:32 pm »
I should read old stories about war and ships more often.  They tend to inspire...

before I wrote Kadh's ISC adventure I was reading a WWII submarine warfare novel.  They do inspire don't they?
"The Andromedans," Kadh said, "will never stop coming.  Not until they are all destroyed or we are."

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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #8 on: August 26, 2005, 12:45:56 am »
Me not so much, I'm afraid. A good war movie, on the other hand, that does wonders. Only the old ones, though, not the new ones so much. Black Hawk Down does something for me though.

My favorite war-anything is still 'das boot'.

For a minute, as I started reading the above, I thought La'ra was on Goesa'vaina... You had me confused for a minute. Then it all became clear.

BTW Pummel!
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #9 on: August 27, 2005, 10:09:08 pm »
Interesting start so far, La'ra.

Kieran would have bagged the queen by now, though.
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« Reply #10 on: August 27, 2005, 11:47:58 pm »
La'ra obviously has something that would make him a great Klingon leader one day: tact when necessary. 
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« Reply #11 on: August 31, 2005, 10:28:38 pm »
La'ra obviously has something that would make him a great Klingon leader one day: tact when necessary. 

Moderation in ALL things, my dear...

Including Moderation...
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« Reply #12 on: September 02, 2005, 08:21:43 am »
Yes, La'ra is always trying to convince me that his namesake is an 'average' Klingon. No way. He shows far to much restraint... ;-)~
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #13 on: September 02, 2005, 12:38:27 pm »
Yes, La'ra is always trying to convince me that his namesake is an 'average' Klingon. No way. He shows far to much restraint... ;-)~

Oh no, La'ra is quite above average....but I think he's more represenative of the typical Klingon than the rabid dunces you see in a lot of fan fic.  Did any of the TOS Klingons strike you as dumb?

Well, other than Kruge or the bald guy from 'Friday's Child'.  They didn't seem that bright.
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« Reply #14 on: September 02, 2005, 06:09:05 pm »
I liked the TOS baddies.

Klingons were imperial, smart, evil and ruthless.

Romulans were smart and ethno-centric (translates as evil if you happen to be human).

By the time TNG rolled around, Klingons were easily manipulated barbarians incapable of organizing well enough to form a soccer team, but who somehow acquired space flight.

The TNG Romulan Empire was Rome in its last decadent throes - with hardly an honorable Romulan to be found, even in the fleet.
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« Reply #15 on: September 02, 2005, 07:40:30 pm »
Very true.

One had to look damn hard to find a really good Klingon in TNG. There was Worf, but he was raised by HUMANS! The best example of a real Klingon in TNG was possibly the Second Officer of the Pagh in 'Matter of Honor', 2nd season. I enjoyed how he was played, and also liked the glimpse of life aboard a Klingon ship. (I'd also like to see a new series set on a Klingon ship, but know I never will...)

The Klingons in TOS, though not greatly fleshed out, were a very good nemisis. I also like the Klingons in ENT save for the dumb-asses who were taking deterium from those miners in the 2nd season. Onewould think even they would have put a parting disruptor blast into the hydrogen wells before leaving orbit. Or maybe beamed out of the poorly thought-out trap which some how caught them...then beamed back in to continue the fight?

Klingons are essentially as good as the writer allows them to be.
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« Reply #16 on: September 02, 2005, 09:20:00 pm »
Very true.

One had to look damn hard to find a really good Klingon in TNG. There was Worf, but he was raised by HUMANS!

Worf would have made a lousy TOS Klingon.  Always being manipulated by his shipmates, always having to ask first or wait for permission from Picard to shoot things... made all the worse by being constantly shown up by Tasha Yar in the aggressiveness department.

By the time Worf got done asking Picard if he could open fire, the target was already an expanding cloud of gas, and Yar was over in the corner saying "They looked threatening, so I shot them."
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #17 on: September 03, 2005, 08:14:47 am »
I liked the TOS baddies.

Yeah.:) Me too.

I try to capture their flavor in my stories while still keeping elements from TNG.  Of course since I'm writing from their perspective, I have to portray the Feddies as 'the bad guys' in many cases.

It's not that hard, though, which is something I didn't expect...
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« Reply #18 on: September 23, 2005, 03:10:05 am »
This one's coming to me scene by scene and by God that's how I'm going to post it.  No real chapters on this one...I suspect it'll be too short for that.

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“Their orders are the same as ours.”  La’ra declared.

Ran’jar seemed the concentrate.  The pair walked down the Hiv’laposh’s wide central corridor.

“You’re certain?”  The swarthy First asked. 

“They have to be.  Otherwise they’d have taken stronger action by now.”  The Commander declared.  “The Federation despises the Queen.  Their propaganda constantly compares her to Hitler, Amin…that other tyrant of theirs…begins with that odd sound…”

“I am not familiar with Terran dictators.”

“You see the point.”

“Yes.”  The First agreed.  A pair of lower ratings moved aside for them.

La’ra acknowledged the men with a nod, kept speaking.  “If it were Sharp out there he’d certainly have done something more assertive by now.”

“Men of his iron are out of favor.”  Ran’jar reminded.

“Perhaps.”  La’ra chuckled.  “I may be placing too much faith in our adversaries.  The situation is still fragile.  I think they’ve been told not to provoke us.  Not to interfere in Kelorian affairs any more than necessary.”

“So how do we exploit that?  Our orders say the same.”

“Our orders say that we’re not to directly provoke Starfleet forces.”  La’ra halted before the bridge turbolift, pressed the call button. “To fight them we'd have to force them to provoke us.”

“Oh,” Ran’jar snarled.  “but we know that Starfleet only uses force to answer force.”

La’ra grinned widely.  “They never interfere in developing cultures either.”

The lift doors opened.  The men stepped into the elevator.

“Never. So we get them to fire on us.  The Constantinople is a worthy adversary.”

“Yes, she is.”  The Commander agreed.  She was an older Constitution-class, without the advanced upgrades Starfleet was frantically installing in as many others of her kind as they could.  The lift began to hum, a slight twinge of acceleration. “I don’t intend to fight her.”

Ran’jar sighed.  “We could defeat her.”

“Yes.”  La’ra agreed.  “Politics.”

“Politics.”

“Instead we show them what kind of people they’re supporting.  The Rebels have committed as many atrocities as Heartreaver.”

“You think they’ll abandon their mission if we can prove that?”  Ran’jar sounded incredulous.

“No.  But I think broadcasting evidence of Rebel atrocities over half the sector will get the Federation civil authorities attention.  Especially when we remind them that there’s a Starfleet cruiser supporting the insurgents.”

“That could be embarrassing.”

“The Federation likes to present a moral face.  If they don’t order their ship out, they’ll damage their altruistic reputation.  Even if they decide Kelor is more important than their image, the Constaintinople will probably have to back off for some time.  Without her support, Heartreaver can defeat the Rebels.”

The elevator door slid open.  The two Klingons stepped out.  The security station just aft of the bridge doors was manned by a wary Marine.  La’ra stood for a moment, allowing the Marine the make his scan, then walked past.

“She is as bad as they say?”  Ran’jar asked.

“I believe so.”  La’ra sighed
"Dialogue from a play, Hamlet to Horatio: 'There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy.' Dialogue from a play written long before men took to the sky. There are more things in heaven and earth, and in the sky, than perhaps can be dreamt of. And somewhere in between heaven, the sky, the earth, lies the Twilight Zone."
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Re: Fragile Ideals
« Reply #19 on: September 23, 2005, 07:18:26 am »
What dictator?

I like your idea. However, it would be really cool if the federation just ignored that. And I've got a question for you: How are the fed civil councel gonna verfy the broadcast. I doubt they will believe klingons on their pretty & honest face...


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This one's coming to me scene by scene and by God that's how I'm going to post it.  No real chapters on this one...I suspect it'll be too short for that.

I don't mind lot's of little updates regularly :D

So gimme more, so I can crit properly
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