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Offline Jaeih t`Radaik

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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #60 on: March 06, 2006, 08:14:33 am »
Heeeey, nice ending, Rommie! Surprised me with the last few lines, too. I was expecting something like a promotion in to Starfleet 'proper', and that being the case I was expecting Jesse to get a promotion to Lt. Cdr. and given command of a frigate, especially as you had her cutter laid up in dock for a while. Then she goes and turns it down! I guess she really wasn't just in the police trying to prove to herself she has what it takes to be in Starfleet.

Also now that I think about it, she could have gotten a promotion to Lt. Cdr. and made XO of a destroyer, or stayed a Lt. and made XO of a frigate, to learn the Starfleet ropes.

Good job of staying true to Jesse's character.  :thumbsup:

So, will we be hearing more of Jesse Decker, Policebabe at Large? And what would be her career options as a captain? The police only has cutters, flagships, and later on, a carrier or two. Will she be staying on the cutter?

Oooh! Another thought just occurred to me. Is Jesse a Police Lieutenant, or a Starfleet Lieutenant? If she's got a Police rank, she'll have a lot more experience than a Fleetie, and it'll explain why such a junior rank is in charge of even a small ship.

Looking forward to more.

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« Reply #61 on: March 07, 2006, 01:49:14 am »
Thanks for reading and commenting.

Yes, we'll be hearing more about Jessie Decker, 'Policebabe at large'.  Her rank is indeed Lieutenant in the Federation Police not Starfleet proper.  I didn't want her to go to Starfleet slightly more than I wanted her to go.  Thankfully she turned me down.  I've got an idea or two for what's next but that will have to wait until after the wedding and honeymoon.  These two parts of the epilogue - the next one is posted just after this - were written with the rest of the story but didn't feel like they belonged with it.  The mood was different and they didn't help with the story I wanted to tell.  But, here you go, the conclusion of the conclusion of Gremlins....
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« Reply #62 on: March 07, 2006, 01:50:54 am »
“Dave, you have to talk to her,” Rob Cole said, his face red with emotion.  The Holmes’ XO and her Chief Ground Combat Officer were in Chief Lick’s tiny office in the ship’s armoury.  Lieutenant Cole had been in the cramped room a few times which was now made even smaller by the plasteel crutch the Chief needed to move about.  “I mean this is Star Fleet.  Most of us never get a chance like this.”

The Chief shook his head.  “If I try that it will just make her more adamant.  You know she could have gone into Starfleet Academy if she had wanted to.  She’s already turned them down once.”

“This time is different,” Cole protested.  “She could just walk into the command chair of a Starship.  No years of school, nothing.  What’s the matter with her?”

“Do you know how many relatives she’s lost in Starfleet?” the Chief asked. 

“She’s not afraid to take risks,” Cole countered.  “We’ve both seen that many times.  This is a good opportunity.  I’ve already tried and she just won’t listen to me.”  He banged on the wall in frustration and quickly reached up to stabilize a shelf that nearly dumped its contents.  “Can you at least say something to her?”

The Chief took a deep breath, sighed.  “We’ll be in the middle of a game of chess this evening.  I can’t promise you anything, but I’ll try and sound her out.”

“Good man,” Rob said and clapped his hands together.  With a nod, he turned and slipped through the narrow doorway out into the armoury.

“That was a box of grenades you nearly dumped on us, you know,” Lick called after him and was rewarded to see Lieutenant Cole pause and then pick up his pace.  The Chief ran his hand through his hair, sighed again.  As he stood up and resettled the boxes of emergency rations he muttered to himself, “If this keeps up, much longer I’m going to make myself bald.”

SHIP’S LOUNGE 2100 HRS

“You are not on your game at all, Dave,” Jessie said.  “That’s two early blunders and two easy wins for me.  What’s bothering you?”  She gathered the dark pieces from the chessboards and set them in their starting positions.

“This is my last cruise, Jess,” he answered heavily and reached for his own chessmen.  “Even with the best artificial legs, you can’t be on line duty in the marines.  I’m not sure I can handle a desk job.”

“A desk?” she scoffed.  “You’ll be training recruits back on Earth before I get my ship back from the repair yard.  Seriously, Dave,” she said, leaning towards him, “I wish there was something I could do for you.  You’re responsible for most of the reputation this ship has.  You know I’ve already put you up for a medal for your work on this mission.  You’ll get it too.”

Dave smiled tightly, started the king’s gambit.  “Yeah, the force will take good care of me, I know.  What about you?  Why did you really turn Starfleet down?  There’s not as much room for advancement for a Police Lieutenant as there is for a Commander in Starfleet.”

“Not you too?”  Jessie let him push her into the Sivek variation.  “I’m sick of trying to convince Rob that I’m fine with where I am.”

He raised his hands defensively.  “I don’t want to change your mind; I just want to understand your reasons.  Check.”

She gave him a hard look, moved her king up a level, and nodded.  “I owe it to you.  Him too, probably.  After the Constellation was lost, I couldn’t face Starfleet.  Everyone would know I was Matt Decker’s niece and all I would get was pity.  I could never be sure that I made it on my own.  Here I know that I got where I am because I’m good at my job.”

“Okay,” Lick admitted, “that explains why you’re in the Police Force, but I know it already.”  He began to set up a bind, trying to cramp her pieces in a narrow defensive arrangement.  “You don’t have to prove anything any more.  Starfleet offered you a position just now based on your own merit, not your uncle’s reputation.”

Jessie pursed her lips, took a deep breath.  “I’m not sure how to explain it.  I’m not a Starfleet officer.  I don’t want to be a Starfleet officer.  I don’t want to find new civilizations, fight a powerful foe for the survival of the Federation, or go where no one has gone before.  I like upholding the law.”

He had to admit that her reasons appeared sound.  He weighed it in his mind for a moment, and then decided he owed Lieutenant Cole one last try.  He changed his tactics.  “I believe you.  Under normal circumstances I’d drop it right here.  But we’re at war.  Without skilled leaders we could very well lose it too.  You’re more than skilled.  The Federation needs you.”

She nodded in agreement and Dave was sure he had her.  Then he noticed she was looking at the chessboard where the pieces had sat untouched for several minutes.  “Yes the Federation needs me.  Just like it needs you, Rob Cole, and a million other people.  If I join Starfleet and we defeat the Klingons, what good will it do us if we come home to a ruined infrastructure with shipping lanes all but closed by Orion Pirates?  The Federation needs Police Lieutenants too.”  Though the move order was unusual, the position on the chessboard was fairly common.  Jessie started the Fischer freeing manoeuvre. 

The Chief shook his head.  “I was hoping you wouldn’t see that,” he said.  "I'll let Mr. Cole know that everything is as it should be."

Jessie nodded in agreement.  “I see everything Chief,” she said and grinned, her mood suddenly light again.  “That’s why I’m the Captain.”

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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #63 on: March 07, 2006, 11:21:17 pm »
Andromeda, that was a great last line. Perfect! And her reasons for staying in the Police tie in beautifully with my own story being currenty procrastinated over. I have about... 1,500 words? I'm trying to make each chapter about 5,000.

Anyway, glad to see Jesse doing it for all the right reasons. When's your next one?
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« Reply #64 on: March 08, 2006, 04:44:41 am »
Great story Rommie. I love it. Her reason for staying with the police is perfect. She's not really running away from her Uncle's shadow. She's a cop because that's what she likes doing.
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« Reply #65 on: March 08, 2006, 10:41:39 am »
Kick ass story, Rommie.  The end is pretty perfect.
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« Reply #66 on: March 09, 2006, 09:22:41 am »
Yup, I fourth the sentiments here, and agree woth Josh. Solid ending and well done.

Rolls eyes at Andy: "Policebabe at large"? Oh, dear...
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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #67 on: March 22, 2006, 08:10:11 pm »


So, will we be hearing more of Jesse Decker, Policebabe at Large?



Very nice.  Finally read it.  Jaeih, I'll post on yours soon. And why are you blaming that on Andy?

 Looking forward to the next story. 

PS, Rommie's getting married Saturday so it will no doubt be a while before we see the sequel.
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« Reply #68 on: March 22, 2006, 09:29:57 pm »
Awesome! Muchos Congrats(-os) Rommie! I hope she's a very nice young lady. *grin*

Barring that, I hope he's a decent guy who'll do what you tell him. *wink*

Well, crap, Kadh! I could have sworn Andy said that and that's why I made the comment. I've just spent the last 5 mintes scouring the replies and find that I said it. My head must have been somewhere dark at that point... *grumbles to self about creeping senility...*
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« Reply #69 on: May 03, 2006, 01:48:12 am »
I'm back and working on the sequel.  Working title "A day in the life."  I'll change it to something unique later.

Me=married again now.
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« Reply #70 on: May 03, 2006, 07:19:34 am »
Congratulations.. and celebrations... * Stops singing because of the Montana class battleship's guns pointed at him*

emmmm... congrats Rommie and glad you are writing again.

+ I saw i didn't comment of the end yest (it was damn near perfect).
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« Reply #71 on: May 09, 2006, 08:53:28 am »
Congrats on the big hook-up, Rommie!
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« Reply #72 on: May 12, 2006, 09:03:57 pm »


 " I don’t want to find new civilizations, fight a powerful foe for the survival of the Federation, or go where no one has gone before.  I like upholding the law.”


That is an excellent line!

Again, a great story, Rommie.

Note: You'll likely still be referred to as 'Rommie' long after we've all forgotten the TV show that started the name.

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« Reply #73 on: January 25, 2007, 12:56:36 am »
Rommie was never my nickname until I started playing the Andromedan Invaders in Starfleet Battles.  Then I think I got the nickname because of the show too.  Now, it's what everyone calls me and I've even changed continents.

Thanks for all the nice comments.
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« Reply #74 on: January 25, 2007, 11:20:22 pm »
Yes...and alas for Andromeda (the show) which could have been great but settled for mediocrity...then sank further...

BTW: Been a few months...how's the hitchin' post treatin' ya? (In reference to marriage, a state which I myself find quite disaggreeable)

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« Reply #75 on: January 26, 2007, 02:24:04 am »
Thanks for asking.

It's had its ups and downs.  We travel a lot.  We went to Russia and he got really sick and spent some time in hospital when we got home. 

I'm defiinitely a positive influence.  Life's good right now.

It's not for everybody, and this is my second try at it.  Hopefully this will end better than the first one (which is to say not at all).  Right now it feels like it will.
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« Reply #76 on: January 26, 2007, 08:55:28 pm »
I too am on my own second try at the marriage game. Frequently I ask myself WHY!

But this one has lasted 3, which is more than double what the first lasted. And I've been with Tammy for 51/2 all told. Been good.

Glad to hear yours is going well. I may be cynical about the purposes of marriage, but I like to see them go well.

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« Reply #77 on: January 26, 2007, 10:43:38 pm »
Currently on my first at 5. Going well! She's taking strip classes. Chair dancing. Oh yeah. Giggity.  ;D ;)
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« Reply #78 on: January 27, 2007, 03:18:13 am »
The purpose of marriage is that a man can father children that he knows are his own without the pressures of having to fight off other men for the attentions of his woman.  Since she's bonded to him, that's theoretically not a problem.  Besides, he can always have her executed for adultery if it becomes one. 

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« Reply #79 on: January 27, 2007, 04:55:39 pm »
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