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Gremlins
« on: June 30, 2005, 04:28:15 am »
I glanced up from the game of chess I was playing with Chief Lick, the head of our regular security force, when I heard the lounge door open.   The skinny form of Jake Carawan seemed to stumble in.  He ended up leaning against the games locker as if he had meant to land there and grinned with his arms across his chest.  “Guess what Jess!  Sector HQ wants to talk to you.  It’s the Dragon Lady herself.”

I almost blurted out ‘who me?’ but managed to switch it to “Why didn’t you use the intercom?” 

“Down for maintenance.  Lieutenant Cole told her that, and then he sent me down here to get you.”

I nodded and turned to my opponent.  “Sorry Chief, duty calls.”  Then I hurried to the bridge.  It wasn’t that far.  The Holmes wasn’t a large ship.  A refitted corvette, it was one of the largest in the Federation Police Fleet.  All of which meant it wouldn’t stand up to one of Starfleet’s frigates in combat.

On the bridge I was greeted by the call of “Captain on deck” and Lieutenant Bob Cole getting out of the captain’s chair.  “Status is normal,” he said softly as I moved past him.  “I’ll talk to Mr. Friedlin about running maintenance routines on first watch.” 

“Thanks.”  I nodded and sat down.  The seat was unpleasantly warm; Cole’s body heat could still be felt in it.  Once I was as comfortable as I could get, I signaled to have the communication restored.

Admiral Sally Brice-O’Hara, commander of Sector Five of the Federation Police, filled the screen.  The emblems of the Federation and the Police Force showed on the wall behind her desk. The notion of a woman in such a prominent position in the force was intimidating to many of the crew, hence her appellation Dragon Lady.  My native Alpha Centauri was a matriarchal society, so a female authority figure was entirely natural. 

“Lieutenant Decker,” she said, immediately businesslike.  “Starfleet has an emergency situation and your ship and the Watson have been placed at their disposal.  Admiral Pekoske of Starfleet will be contacting you shortly with your orders.”  I raised my eyebrows slightly in surprise and she noticed the movement.  “Yes, it’s that important.  This is an opportunity for the Police Division to shine.  See that we make a favorable impression.”

“Yes ma’am,” I said.  “What about the convoy we’re due to escort?”

“The Adler will escort the convoy alone,” she replied sternly as if she weren’t used to being questioned.  “Pirate activity in this sector is low enough that the risk has been deemed acceptable.  Good luck lieutenant.”

“Thank you ma’am,” I replied.  “We’ll do our best.”  She barely nodded and I was staring at a blank screen. 

I didn’t have to wait for it to be filled again.  A man in the gold uniform of Starfleet’s command branch replaced Admiral Brice-O’Hara.  His eyes traveled to the rank insignia on my sleeve and a frown creased his face.  “I am Admiral Pekoske,” he said.  “Are you the captain of this vessel?”

“Lieutenant Jessie Decker, Federation Police, at your service, sir,” I said cheerfully. 

“I see,” he frowned again.  “Lieutenant Decker, I presume you are aware that Starfleet has need of your ship and crew.”  When I nodded, he continued.  “The USS Cousteau, a GSC survey cruiser, failed to make a scheduled check in during the investigation of a newly discovered class-M planet in system PA84-3301.  Your mission is to find the Cousteau and render any aid that may be necessary.  I am transmitting full details of you orders now.”

“Thank you sir,” I replied, trying to look impassive and competent in command.  “We’re happy to provide whatever assistance Starfleet asks of us.”  He frowned again, apparently still unconvinced.  “Starfleet Command out,” he stated and again left me with a blank screen.

It took ten minutes to clear the extra combat teams we’d been assigned for boarding party combat in case pirates did show up and attack the convoy from the conference room.  In that time, I’d scanned the mission orders and invited the Watson’s captain, Lieutenant Vielle, to join us with his XO.  The orders didn’t provide much information beyond what the Admiral had told me, just details.  By virtue of time in commission and having a better ship I was in command of the mission. 

After the short briefing, we parted with the convoy and headed into what for us was unknown space. Traveling at warp five it would take us five days to reach our destination. The map provided by Starfleet still listed most of the territory as we neared PA84-3301 as unexplored.   

Police Corvettes were never designed for long patrols and with twenty troopers on board it was extremely crowded.  Fortunately, Chief Lick and his men had more loyalty to the ship than the platoon that had been added to the ground forces.  Most of the conflict stayed between those two groups.  Given the living conditions and the prominent nature of our mission, there was no way I was going to write anyone up on charges.  The worst punishment I could think of was sending the offenders to a turn working for Mr. Wurster in the scullery.  It did seem to keep the violence down.

I was in my quarters resting, when, on the fourth day of our trip out, Ensign Kevin Etheridge, the weapons officer, knocked on my door.  “Ma’am,” he said.  “I’ve been thinking about this mission.  Since I’m in charge of the gunnery crews I want to have power in the phaser coils and shields up when we come in.  These Survey Cruisers are pretty tough ships.  If something happened to one, I’d rather it not take us by surprise.”

I thought about it for a moment.  Police ships didn’t have a lot of spare power and raising the shields and charging the phasers would force us to shift power away from propulsion.  We probably wouldn’t need the extra speed in-system anyway.  “Good thinking,” I said and smiled at him.  It didn’t relax him as I’d hoped.  Etheridge was new to the ship and to Alpha Centauran women.  “We’ll have the power available for you,” I quickly continued.  “Anything else I can do for you?”

He stared for a moment longer, then said “No ma’am,” and backed out of the room.  I resolved to spend more time with Ensign Etheridge.  He needed to get over that reaction or at least learn how to control it.  I switched on the intercom.  “Bridge, this is the captain.  Run the standard weapons drills and have the other watches do the same when they come on duty.” 

I was awakened by the whistle of the alarm.  I glanced at my clock and noted that the first watch had just come on duty.  A moment later, Ensign Etheridge’s voice came over the intercom, issuing orders to the phaser, drone, and photon torpedo crews.  I relaxed as soon as I figured out it was a drill and went back to sleep.

I made sure I was on the bridge before we reached PA84-3301.  We slowed as we entered the system and begin to scan for the[i ]Cousteau[/i].  Lieutenant Cole was standing by the communications board.  “No response to hailing frequencies, captain,” the executive officer reported. 

Sensors have located the Cousteau in orbit around the second planet,” added Caraway from his scanner position.  “Her warp signature is slightly erratic.”  We moved deeper into the system and he began to provide more detail.  “Planet two is class M. The Cousteau’s warp engines are misaligned and unable to produce a stable warp field.  No sign of any damage to the ship.”

“Put it on screen when we have visual contact,” Lieutenant Cole ordered.  A few moments later, the cruiser was in view, a majestic sight against the backdrop of the sun.  It was in high orbit at a distance of 30,000 kilometers above the planet.  With the Watson following us, we approached the Cousteau from the rear.

“Something must have happened to the communication's system," Lieutenant Cole mused.

"We'll know shortly," I replied.  "Inform sector command we found the Cousteau still in orbit."

Ensign Etheridge, a squeak in his voice pitching it abnormally high, cried out,  “The Cousteau is locking her phasers onto us and preparing to fire.”

“Emergency stop!” I quickly ordered.  “Reserve power to forward shields.”  Etheridge frantically flipped two switches and Ensign Acton at the helm also engaged in a sudden burst of energy, trying to convert movement energy into shield energy before we were hit.  Beams of powerful energy reached out at us from the survey cruiser.  I didn’t have time to grab the arms of my seat for support before they struck us full on.



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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #1 on: June 30, 2005, 12:35:29 pm »
WB to the boards,

A little dry so far. 
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« Reply #2 on: June 30, 2005, 07:16:02 pm »
Glad to see you off to such a good start, Andromeda. I'm always interested in stories about the less flashy, often ignored aspects of the ST universe, and yours fits the bill nicely with a police ship squadron.

Little point, though: it is the 23rd century. Guys are probably quite used to women, Centauran or otherwise, in positions of high authority.

That aside, a good start as I said, and I'm interested in where this is going!
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« Reply #3 on: June 30, 2005, 10:04:05 pm »
I think you could do better by switching to 3rd person (a peeve of mine) and having character interaction about how they're doing 'starfleet stuff' with a police ship.  It picked up at the end though.  Maybe continue as is and do a rewrite?
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« Reply #4 on: July 01, 2005, 03:00:23 am »
I'd like a bit more intro but it's a good start. I'll keep one of my minions on this. Now if only you get a decent posting interval, not as for instance La'ra, Kadh, or S and Kieran, i'd be delighted.

And whats so special about AC women? Or do you just mean women in command?









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« Reply #5 on: July 02, 2005, 01:28:25 pm »
I'm basing the stuff off of the Starfleet Battles GURPS game where AC women run their society and are considered 'sexy'.  I was trying to imitate the period of TOS when ST was often used to have women equal to men but was still sexist.  In hindsigt, I was mad at my fiance so I had to put in the cut about the reaction to strong female characters. 

Thanks for the criticism.  Part two will take advangate of it.
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« Reply #6 on: July 04, 2005, 06:21:45 am »
Hello Andromeda, and welcome (back) to the boards!

Always good to have more girls to combat the testosterone-fuelled high-jinks of endless boys-and-their-toys. *smile*
I think that makes three of us now. Maybe we'll band together and form an elite all-girl squadron and... *looks around, returning to reality*
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Yes.
Well, nice start to your tale (may I call you?) Rommie, and keep those Irish eyes a-smiling. Looking forward to more.
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« Reply #7 on: July 04, 2005, 01:49:56 pm »
"Rommie"? Someone's been watching Gene Roddenberry's Andromeda recently, I think...
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« Reply #8 on: July 04, 2005, 01:58:50 pm »
Maybe we'll band together and form an elite all-girl squadron and... *looks around, returning to reality*

You watch waaaay too much anime. ;D
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« Reply #9 on: July 06, 2005, 10:41:42 pm »
I think an elite all-girl squadron would be cool.  I've already done it.

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« Reply #10 on: July 07, 2005, 01:35:12 am »
Wow, the feedback here is awesome and oh so interesting.  You can call me Rommie.  I use Andromeda because I play the Andromedan Invaders a lot in SFB.  When the TV series came out, it got shortened to Rommie.  I guess people like it, becuase it's turned into my nick in real life even though it has nothing to do with my real name.

Based on all the criticism - that's the right word even when it's good - instead of going further the way it was, I rewrote the beginning.  Here is version two.

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Special Weapons Troops outnumbered regular crewmen in the lounge of the USS Holmes.  The Holmes, along with her sister ships Watson and Adler, was a Federation Police Corvette on convoy escort.  Each of the three small ships carried four extra boarding parties to defend their herd of freighters from the raiding tactics of the Orion Pirates. 

The lounge was a den of noise, aromas and conversation that would never have found its way into such a public space on board a Starfleet ship no matter how small.  In the center of the maelstrom, at the proverbial eye of the storm, the ship’s commanding officer, Lieutenant Jessie Decker, and the captain of the Special Weapons Squads that were normally stationed on the Holmes, Chief Petty Officer Dave Lick, were playing 3-D chess.  Several black chessmen stood neatly on the table by the SW commander and a smaller group of white ones were scattered about Lieutenant Decker’s side of the table.  Jessie rubbed a white knight in her fingers while considering her next move.  “Your problem, Jess,” offered the Chief unhelpfully, as she reached for a pawn, “is that you consider all your moves and make the most complicated one whether it’s sound or not.”

Lieutenant Decker hesitated, pulled her hand away, and began to consider anew.  The Chief sighed, squeezed the dark hair of his bangs, and rocked backward in his seat.

The door slid open and both players glanced up from their game.  The lanky form of Sensor Technician Jake Carawan all but stumbled into the lounge.  He ended up leaning against a storage locker with his arms crossed nonchalantly over his chest.  His eyes scanned the room and quickly came to rest on the two senior officers.  “Guess what Jess?” he blurted out as he walked.  “Sector HQ wants to talk to you.  It’s the Dragon Lady herself.”

Rising, Lieutenant Decker asked “Why didn’t you use the intercom?”  She looked back at the chief and shrugged an apology and headed for the bridge, Carawan trailing her. 

“It’s down for maintenance.  Lieutenant Cole sent me to get you ASAP, so here I am.”  The Holmes, a refitted corvette, was one of the largest ships in the list of Police Assets.  As such she wasn’t equal to one of Starfleet’s frigates in combat.  Her small size did give the Holmes at least one advantage.  The two members of her crew made their way from the amidships lounge to the bridge in under a minute without having to enter the turbolift system. 

Robert Cole, the Holmes’ executive officer, had already risen from the command seat and was standing beside it when Lieutenant Decker entered the bridge.  “Captain on deck,” he called out and then told her, “Our status is normal.  Admiral Brice-O’Hara is on channel two.”  For her ears only he added, “I’ll speak to Mr. Friedlin about not running maintenance routines during the first watch.”

Jessie nodded and quickly occupied the seat.  It still held the uncomfortable warmth of its previous occupant.  She made a brief scan of her tactical displays and then signaled for the channel to Headquarters to be opened. 

Admiral Sally Brice-O’Hara, commander of Sector Five of the Federation Police Force, quickly filled the main viewscreen.  Brice-O’Hara was examining a padd and Jessie found herself distracted by the holographic painting of the Draconian Gardens by Carin Sedjak, a famous artist from Jessie’s native Alpha Centauri, which was between the flags of the Federation and the Police directorate.  Jessie had a copy of the painting in her quarters.  She suspected that she was looking at the original.

The admiral finished what she had been doing and looked up at the viewscreen.  “Lieutenant Decker,” she said, skipping the usual pleasantries, “Starfleet has a situation on its hands that requires immediate attention.  Your squadron is the only force of starships in the area.  They asked for our assistance and you will be providing it.  I will transfer you to Admiral Pekoske of Starfleet momentarily.

“Understand lieutenant, that this is an opportunity for the Police Directorate.  See that we make a favorable impression.”  She looked down at the padd, obviously finished. 

“Admiral,” Jessie asked, feeling it her duty.  Although there was little danger of pirate activity in this remote sector, the possibility still existed and she felt the freighters were her responsibility.  “We are currently escorting a convoy to Narimar III.  What about them?” 

For the first time Jessie could ever remember, Admiral Brice-O’Hara smiled; her unofficial moniker was well-deserved. “I’m glad you asked lieutenant.  The Adler will remain with the convoy while Holmes and Watson are assigned to Starfleet.  Should your mission preclude your returning to the convoy, Starfleet will send a squadron of F4s from Narimar III to join it.  Any further questions?”

Jessie gave the painting one last look and replied, “No ma’am.”  There was a moment of static and a younger man with a severe expression filled the screen.  “This is Lieutenant Jessie Decker, commanding officer of the Holmes.”

The man responded with a frown.  “Admiral Pekoske, Starfleet Command.  Are you familiar with the Galactic Survey Cruiser?” he asked doubtfully.

Jessie nodded.  “Similar to a heavy cruiser in size, the GSC is designed for seeking new resources for the Federation.  It trades armament for sensors and other special equipment.”

Jessie was surprised to see the Admiral’s frown deepen.  “Are you any relation to Matt Decker?”

“He was my uncle, sir,” Jessie answered stiffly.  It was a painful subject to her, both because of his death and the effect it had on her career.  She had joined the Police Directorate instead of Starfleet to escape the illustrious family legacy.

It came as no surprise to her that the Admiral’s expression brightened.  “My condolences, Lieutenant.”  Jessie nodded faintly and the Admiral resumed his briefing.  “The USS Cousteau, a GSC, failed to make a regular check-in while exploring a previously undiscovered planet.  Your ship and,” he glanced downward, “the Watson are to investigate what happened and render any assistance necessary.  We are sending you the coordinates, information on the Cousteau and PA84-3301, the system she was investigating.  Report immediately on locating the Cousteau and as soon as you learn anything.  Good Luck, Lieutenant.”

Her executive officer, Lieutenant Cole, had moved across the bridge and was standing by the communications console looking over the shoulder of the operator.  “We are receiving the information from Starfleet Command.  I’ll have it transferred to the conference room as soon as we have it cleared.”  Jessie smiled; that room, normally empty, was also being used to accommodate their extra crew.

Later that day, officers from both Police Corvettes met to discuss the mission orders.  As quickly as possible, the conference room was restored for the use of the crew.  Twenty extra troopers was a slight, albeit welcome, imposition when expecting to face pirate raiders.  When the mission involved use of the Corvette’s other facilities, the space became rather tight. 

The officer’s mess was a cramped space that barely accommodated the Holmes’ six commissioned officers.  Under the circumstances, it was a welcome escape.  For the four days of their journey, it had provided a sanctuary against the increasingly boisterous crew.  “It’s a good thing we’re supposed to reach PA84-3301 tomorrow,” Jessie observed.  “Otherwise I think half of our combat team would be in the brig.”

Chief Lick, also responsible for ship’s security as well as the combat team, replied “It wouldn’t hold them all anyway.  There’s no need to worry, though.  I put up a sign this morning that anyone caught brawling would be assigned scullery duty.”

In the tiny space, the laughter of six people echoed loudly.  “Any guesses on what we’ll face?”  Jessie asked as calm was quickly restored.

Ensign Thomasina Acton, who served both as helmswoman and navigator for the Holmes, offered, “I’ve been looking at similar incidents.  It’s likely they’ve got a problem with their comm. system and will need some parts.”

“All the same,” countered the weapons officer, Ensign Etheridge, the newest addition to the ship, “I’d like to come in with the phaser capacitors charged and shields up just in case.”

“Good idea, Kevin,” Jessie answered.  “A little caution can go a long way.  A GSC is quite large compared to our little ships.  Have any of you ever seen one?”  None of them had.  “Beautiful ships.  Uncle Matt served on one before he got the Constellation. We got a tour when I was a kid.  Everything was bright and shiny.  It must have been a scientist’s dream to serve on one.  He always said that was where the real action was.” 

Jessie was surprised to find herself thinking of her uncle.  It had always been a subject she had avoided.  He had died a hero’s death, destroying a doomsday weapon.  It reminded her of the dangers of uncharted space.  She much preferred the well-traveled space lanes where the perils were known and were usually no worse than navigational hazards.  Even the Orions were a known quantity.

She suddenly realized that the conversation at the table had stopped and everyone was looking at her.  “I’m sorry, I was distracted,” she said.  “What did I miss?”

“We were discussing crewman Carawan’s idea on configuring the shuttle as a scanning platform to give us some kind of EW ability,” replied Lieutenant Cole.  “We don’t really have the power to do much otherwise.”

“We also don’t have another shuttle in case we need it for something else,” snorted Chief Lick.  “So we wondered which side you were on in all this.”

“Neutral,” Jessie said with a laugh.  “I think it would depend too much on the situation.  Why don’t you guys run a few drills to see how long it takes to pull the spare out of storage?”  She was rewarded with a few groans.

“You’re really looking forward to this, aren’t you?” he said and shook his head.  “Well, I don’t know about the rest of you, but I think it’s time for me to be going before somebody gives me extra work beyond what I’ve got already.”  He rose quickly and departed.  The rest soon followed suit.

The next day, the two ships entered the PA84-3301 system.  Holmes led the way, so it was Jake Carawan from her sensor station who first reported contact.  “Captain, sensors detect a warp trail around the second planet.  Our data on the system reports it as class M.”

“Adjust course for the second planet,” Jessie ordered, “and inform Watson.” The two police ships headed into the system.  A few moments passed and Carawan was able to provide a clearer picture. 

“The Cousteau is in orbit around the second planet.  Her warp output is fluctuating and unstable.  She probably can’t make warp.  There is no sign of any damage to the ship’s hull.”

“She does not respond to hails,” XO Coles added.

“Bring us in behind her,” Jessie ordered.  “We’ll send a shuttle over to find out what’s going on over there.  Keep up on the hails.  She may not be able to answer, but hopefully she can hear us.  Let them know what we plan to do.”

With Holmes still slightly ahead, the two corvettes approached the orbiting cruiser.  “Captain!” Ensign Etheridge suddenly called out, fear giving his voice unexpected volume.  “The Cousteau is locking phasers and preparing to fire.”

Jessie barely had time to order, “Reserve power to forward shields.  Emergency deceleration,” before the powerful beams of energy struck the Holmes full on.  Too late, Jessie grabbed the arms of her chair for support.


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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #11 on: July 08, 2005, 01:14:24 am »
1000 times better.
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« Reply #12 on: July 08, 2005, 07:07:41 am »
Thanks for the permission Rommie. :-) And like Kadh said, this is better. Good job.  :thumbsup:
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« Reply #13 on: July 08, 2005, 12:59:58 pm »
Thanks guys.

Part two will be out early next week.
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« Reply #14 on: July 08, 2005, 06:47:47 pm »
I do like the revised parts, though 1st person doesn't bother me at all.  I grew up on Raymond Chandler and still think well-done 1st person prose is beautiful.
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« Reply #15 on: July 13, 2005, 10:49:52 pm »
Interesting, indeed.

I like it better revised, with the third person POV. I don't dislike 1st person, but it can be a little trickier to pull off. Also, to me, there are just some stories in which 1st person just wouldn't work, no matter how well done it was. This isn't a criticism of your story, by any means, merely a general observation. Heck, I don't even use first person in my own stories, because I don't think I could pull it off. ;D
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« Reply #16 on: July 14, 2005, 02:26:48 pm »
I can't remember the last time I used first person POV. I tend to use Third Person POV and put things in past tense, is if reporting on them from the future.
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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #17 on: July 14, 2005, 09:18:31 pm »
I like the 1st-person POV. That's the way I've written two of my three stories, and most agree that those are my better ones. It is challenging though, but I'm proud that they seem well done.

Keep it up, Andromeda, and give us part 2!
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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #18 on: July 26, 2005, 12:14:40 am »
I recently returned from holidays and will finish rewriting part two very soon.  Tomorrow is likely.
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Re: Gremlins
« Reply #19 on: July 26, 2005, 02:49:39 am »
Nice rewrite babe, but i'd like new material :D ;)
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