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Offline Jaeih t`Radaik

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Re: A New Beginning
« Reply #20 on: June 11, 2005, 11:12:39 am »
Hey Blyre,

Interesting story for sure, I'll be following it from now on.

Just a little nitpick though: The flashback/mindmeld scene had me confused for a bit, until I realised that yes, it was indeed a flashback scene. Maybe differentiate that section from the main story by using italics, or stars to break it off from the rest of the main story? Maybe even use a different date at the start. That's what had me confused, the STII/TNG uniforms with an ENT date.
It'd make it easier to read.
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Re: A New Beginning
« Reply #21 on: June 11, 2005, 11:15:10 am »
Quote from: Jaeih t`Radaik on June 11, 2005, 11:12:39 am
Hey Blyre,

Interesting story for sure, I'll be following it from now on.

Just a little nitpick though: The flashback/mindmeld scene had me confused for a bit, until I realised that yes, it was indeed a flashback scene. Maybe differentiate that section from the main story by using italics, or stars to break it off from the rest of the main story? Maybe even use a different date at the start. That's what had me confused, the STII/TNG uniforms with an ENT date.
It'd make it easier to read.

Thanks for the suggestion and I'll work on it :)

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Re: A New Beginning
« Reply #22 on: June 17, 2005, 02:03:59 pm »
Looks at Calandar notices Date...

Uhm Wally my brother...  ;)

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Re: A New Beginning
« Reply #23 on: June 26, 2005, 09:06:51 am »
Just an update, Wally has lost his Internet access for awhile, Untill he get's paid again. I talked to him yesterday on the phone, and he said he was getting alot of Writting done, and will be back online soon.

Just thought I'd mention It to you good Peeps here.

Stephen
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