Topic: Cut the Bull

[Gambler]

Reading one of my Casino Industry Magazines today I came across an article expounding the virtues of  BullFighter:  Stripping the Bull out of Business   A Free program developed by Deloitte Touche Consulting to cut down on the business jargon in documents.  

Quote:

"A value-added, leverageable global knowledge repository."

"Repurposeable, leading edge thoughtware that delivers results-driven value."

"A future-proof asset that seamlessly empowers your mission critical enterprise communications."

BullfighterTM could be all of these things. Except that we have no idea what any of these things are.

Check it out.  The first thing I used it on was the document produced by our Sarbanes-Oxley auditors in regards to IT.  I quote the analysis

Quote:

Diagnosis: You overwhelmingly embrace obfuscation and don't want the reader to understand anything you have to say. Your writing lavishes a preponderance of dependent clauses and compound negatives upon the reader, whose cognitive load not infrequently exceeds the purported benefit of the substance of the article. Syntax incorporates numerous collections of items juxtaposed or in series that demand persistence and not a little unqualified expertise on the part of all intended recipients of the author's communications. In fact, such machinations inevitably prove detrimental to comprehension and sabotage the imparting of any and all knowledge. Your condition is irreversible.

 

[Toasty0]

Nothing like business/marketing speak to make legal brief look concise.  

[IKV Nemesis D7L]

I wonder what it would say when analyzing some of our more prolific posters?  

[Gambler]

Reading one of my Casino Industry Magazines today I came across an article expounding the virtues of  BullFighter:  Stripping the Bull out of Business   A Free program developed by Deloitte Touche Consulting to cut down on the business jargon in documents.  

Quote:

"A value-added, leverageable global knowledge repository."

"Repurposeable, leading edge thoughtware that delivers results-driven value."

"A future-proof asset that seamlessly empowers your mission critical enterprise communications."

BullfighterTM could be all of these things. Except that we have no idea what any of these things are.

Check it out.  The first thing I used it on was the document produced by our Sarbanes-Oxley auditors in regards to IT.  I quote the analysis

Quote:

Diagnosis: You overwhelmingly embrace obfuscation and don't want the reader to understand anything you have to say. Your writing lavishes a preponderance of dependent clauses and compound negatives upon the reader, whose cognitive load not infrequently exceeds the purported benefit of the substance of the article. Syntax incorporates numerous collections of items juxtaposed or in series that demand persistence and not a little unqualified expertise on the part of all intended recipients of the author's communications. In fact, such machinations inevitably prove detrimental to comprehension and sabotage the imparting of any and all knowledge. Your condition is irreversible.

 

[Toasty0]

Nothing like business/marketing speak to make legal brief look concise.  

[IKV Nemesis D7L]

I wonder what it would say when analyzing some of our more prolific posters?  

[Gambler]

Reading one of my Casino Industry Magazines today I came across an article expounding the virtues of  BullFighter:  Stripping the Bull out of Business   A Free program developed by Deloitte Touche Consulting to cut down on the business jargon in documents.  

Quote:

"A value-added, leverageable global knowledge repository."

"Repurposeable, leading edge thoughtware that delivers results-driven value."

"A future-proof asset that seamlessly empowers your mission critical enterprise communications."

BullfighterTM could be all of these things. Except that we have no idea what any of these things are.

Check it out.  The first thing I used it on was the document produced by our Sarbanes-Oxley auditors in regards to IT.  I quote the analysis

Quote:

Diagnosis: You overwhelmingly embrace obfuscation and don't want the reader to understand anything you have to say. Your writing lavishes a preponderance of dependent clauses and compound negatives upon the reader, whose cognitive load not infrequently exceeds the purported benefit of the substance of the article. Syntax incorporates numerous collections of items juxtaposed or in series that demand persistence and not a little unqualified expertise on the part of all intended recipients of the author's communications. In fact, such machinations inevitably prove detrimental to comprehension and sabotage the imparting of any and all knowledge. Your condition is irreversible.

 

[Toasty0]

Nothing like business/marketing speak to make legal brief look concise.  

[IKV Nemesis D7L]

I wonder what it would say when analyzing some of our more prolific posters?